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Re: Rhyme and Reason

Postby WillowRulez » Wed Mar 28, 2007 2:56 am

Talk about destiny and reincarnation... I wonder if the skeleton was 'Tara' once or 'Willow'. Should be Tara since it was a picture of Willow but who knows.
I guess we cant hope for Willow to be already at the place of battle? That the sword somehow transported her there? :smash That probably would be too easy...
Waiting impatiently for more.
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Re: Rhyme and Reason

Postby Chummy » Wed Mar 28, 2007 8:01 am

:clap :clap :clap :clap :clap :clap :clap :clap :clap That was amazing and worth the wait . :shy But leaving us with a cliffhanger that wasn't v.nice. I hope you update soon like TODAY :gnome so that we won't :crash .Keep the good job
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Re: Rhyme and Reason

Postby db » Wed Mar 28, 2007 9:56 am

nope.

This is of the bad. Eeee. Not good with the black oogy slithering into Willow veins and the malevolent feelings... and how could I possibly have predicted that this story would go from bad to worse? Oh, yeah. Bad Alcy (i love it).

I loved the climbing descriptions - the different qualities of the snow, how you painted the path of magic with temperature and flush. Very cool. I am also more than a little intrigued by the Willow and Tara dopplegangers -- are they supposed to be fallen knights? It all seems very mystical and important and... I am beginning to think that Willow really really needs Tara around. Not just 'cause of the love -- but it seems like Tara helps balance Willow; like Willow has the potential to get out of control and fall into the realm of bad in general, but that Tara helps balance that scale. Plus, with the whole learning to control magic thing.

Great update!

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Re: Rhyme and Reason

Postby viximon » Thu Mar 29, 2007 2:52 am

:dance: WOOOW. That chapter was awsome! I mean, first it was all cute, but then all got darker and stuff. So cool!

The wait was worth it. I'm sure next chapter will be too. Don't make us wait long though. ok?

I fear for Tara, we don't know for sure what DarkWillow is about.

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Re: Rhyme and Reason

Postby Willowtree252 » Fri Mar 30, 2007 11:06 am

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Re: Rhyme and Reason

Postby grimlock72 » Sat Apr 21, 2007 1:45 pm

Ah.. spotted this update a tiiiiiny bit late (awfully short on time these days so it's best such intricate stories take their time ).

Poor Willow does really need a book about HER magics (which seem different from 'regular' magics), besides she can speed-read a book. ANY knowledge would be usefull right about now.

Wait.. I missed two updates, the fighty one first; Mr. Bob is clearly trying to make Willow believe something. But I'm not sure why he would want to do that at the point in time at that location. He wants something very specific from Willow I think... after all he could EASILY have killed every non-seal in that house. So he sacraficed some of his men for what ?? What is that Mr. Bob can NOT do ??

Mr. Bob wrote:There isn’t an ounce of goodness running through your veins Willow Rosenberg, and it is only a matter of time until the darkness overwhelms you…forcing you to acknowledge that it is where your true nature lies


Well... if that were true why the need to inject Willow with evil icky stuff at a young age, huh? If she would be soooo evil you might as well have picked her up at birth without going through all the trouble.

What would have happened if a seal had been kill by the explosion?

It's good to see Tara killing the evil junior warlock. Maybe she'll start with that the next time something clearly evil comes her way. Should save her energy.

Can't make much of Mr. Bob claiming he and Willow are familly. Not sure if he actually believes it, or just uses that line to confuse Willow. It's not very relevant at the moment anyway. Mr. Bob is an evil thing which wants to kill Ashley (primairly, if Tara's in the way he'll kill her too of course), so Mr. Bob must be eliminated. Regardless of familly ties, those can be sorted out afterwards

On thinking that entire fighting-update over I get the impression that Mr bob wanted to have fun with Willow, while letting his minions go about their assigned jobs. He likely hadn't figured Tara would survive, so that's good.

On to the Kiwi Mountain part, heh. Not to worry, I know zip about mountan climbing stuff so it looks all good to me The effect of Willow warming up get closer to whatever it actually was neat.

Now how did the old woman GET in that cave, did she close the 'ceiling/floor' thingie behind herself? Did she WANT to be found? Based on what did the floor-scanner-stone allow Willow to pass? (it's a very crude door-access panel, but it sorta works.. once

Same question for the sword. It's size indicates it was made to be wielded by some smallish. But why was the sword there, did the old/dead woman bring it there to destroy it or to keep it to fight evil? How did the dead women's lover die? And why do I imagine the sword used for absorbing evil (with the proper ritual/magic which Willow wouldn't know) ??

Hmm.. well the good news from that would be that there's plenty of room in the sword to absorb evil now. I'm wondering what that icky stuff will do to Willow. I'm not all that afraid she'll go on a rampage (well maybe after the bad guy, what's road to hell paved with again ??:D). She still has two 'beacons' (Ashley and Tara) to guide her to more or less normality or at least the non-evil variant.

Which is why I can't see how Mr. Bob would get Willow to kill Ashley on purpose. It goes against everything Willow knows as 'good'. Accidental.. that might happen, I thought she blow up half the house in the previous chapter when battling Bob.. woman truly has now idea how to handle whatever power she has. Which must be scary.

26 hours of mountain climbing would be rather tiring I dare say, even with the six hours of rest in between. Faith has a much better condition obviously, but poor Willow must be exhausted.

Yet another thing I wonder, would Mr. Bob or any of his henchmen have been able to find the sword at all? And if not, wouldn't that have been better??

Yeah those two updates leave once again more questions, then answers. Though I think that's rather consistent for this story, heh.. well done
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Re: Rhyme and Reason

Postby Alcy » Sun Apr 22, 2007 3:46 pm

dlline: I’m glad you enjoyed the update despite not being the adventurous type, I love the outdoors although I’ve never been mountain climbing. I called on my partner for advice in some cases but most of it was just based on what I’d seen in movies! (I’m not too sure about the beach, as I don’t like beaches but the idea of Tara in a bikini would get me there!)
Where the frilly heck is Willow will be answered at the start of the next chapter…although now that I’m thinking about it I don’t actually say where she is…and then it just gets even more confusing from there. The last three chapters will be nasty…but bear with me, it’ll be worth it.

KloeFrost: Fantabulous sounds like a great word (and given that my spell check isn’t picking it up it must be one!) And please don’t bow, you’ll give me a Jackie Warner-sized ego…and the world’s definitely not big enough for more than one of her! Seriously, thanks very much, its enough just to know that people are still enjoying R & R.

WillowRulez: I don’t know whether to give away anything about destiny or reincarnation but there is definitely something fishy going on here isn’t there. You wont have to wait much longer, I’m about ready to deliver Chapter 20 very soon.

Chummy: I am sorry about the waits between chapters and the cliffhanger, unfortunately the next chapter doesn’t end too well either, but I hope you like it anyway!

db: All with the badness here…and its just gonna get badder…because it’s fun (in a twisted, non-hugs and puppies way) I don’t know much about mountain climbing, but I do love snow, I mostly spend my time swishing down it at breakneck speeds. You’re definitely right about Willow needing Tara around because…well, you’ll see in the next chapter…

viximon: I kinda did make you wait a little long for the next chapter but it should be up soon. And I’d fear for all the characters, not just Tara because once DW is unleashed, well, it’s not going to be pretty…

Dianneswillowtree: Definitely, assume crash positions and hide in the deepest hole you can find!

grimmy: Ahh, welcome back and glad you could pop by. I’ve missed your keen observations and insights into each chapter!
You’re definitely right about Willow needing a book, although she’s about to get something that’s far better…although whether things actually turn out for the better, that’s another story.
Bob definitely needs Willow for something, because he knows exactly what she is and without her, all his careful little plans count for diddly squat. And when he talks about the lack of goodness running through her veins, he’s referring to the icky stuff that was injected at a young age. Supposedly this injection of dark magics would have given her the possibility of being evil…and he knows this.
And to answer your question about what would have happened if a seal had been kill by the explosion? Stay tuned for the next chapter for an answer to that…

Oh, I don’t think family loyalty would help Willow keep Bob alive, although once again, you can see in the next chapter what developments are taking place. It’s a bit of a free for all at the moment with a lot of things happening and I really don’t want to give anything away, because that will ruin the ending.
Glad you enjoyed the mountain climbing, and you’ll find out eventually how the dead woman got into the cave…and the tricky thing about magic is its quite, well tricky. The sword plays an important part in the rest of the story so you’re right to analyse it and the effect that it will have on Willow. You’re also right in that Willow has two beacons to guide her back from wherever she is…although the real question to ask is can they do it?

There are bucket loads of questions grimmy, and I can safely say that you’ll have more after the next chapter is posted!
Thanks everyone for keeping up with the twisting, turning mess that is R & R, the last three chapters are going to be pretty dark...but please trust me when I say there’s a nice, rosy ending in sight – maybe I’ll even throw in some hot, gay lovin’…
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Re: Rhyme and Reason

Postby Alcy » Sun Apr 22, 2007 5:05 pm

Note: The following chapter is kinda dark...please bear with me, all will be made right in the end...but in the meantime, I hope y'all enjoy it.


Chapter 20 – “Revealing Darkness Within.”

The light had been unbearable, filling first her vision, then her mind and finally every pore of her body. This was Willow’s first thought as she struggled back to reality…although that little detail was being debated in the fuzz that served as her mind, she wasn’t actually sure it was reality she was returning to. Was death a reality? As she began to fell solid ground beneath her body, grit beneath her fingernails and something warm lying in her palm, Willow gradually began to accept that it was a reality of sorts. Although whether it was the one she was supposed to be in, she could not yet tell. She tried to move and managed a spasmodic jerk of all her limbs at once and her fingers tightened around whatever the object was in her palm. That one point of contact felt safe and secure and she seized on it, holding onto the surface as though her life depended on it.

“Okay…mucho ouchness,” Willow mumbled, satisfied when her lips moved and sound actually emerged.

Her voice sounded a little odd to her own ears, thick and heavy with something. Although she thought that could perhaps be her brain trying to interpret sound as nothing seemed to be working as it should. All she could remember was the light, there was nothing else at first. Just light…Willow felt her brow furrow and she knew she was trying to get her brain to function again. There had been something else besides the light…darkness? There it was, a creeping, crawling darkness that had taken over her body like a parasite…swarming through her veins…

Willow’s body snapped into a sitting position in one awkward jerk, something metallic clattered to the ground and its sound echoed around the room she was in. There were lights and walls but Willow was aware of none of this as her fingers frantically dug at the cuff of her jacket, trying to pull the sleeve up her arm. She drew it back to reveal her pale arm covered in black lines…her veins as black as night. In a panic, Willow examined the backs of her hands, her other arm, and even rolled up her trousers to examine both legs, Covering every inch of visible skin were the same awful black veins that she had found on her arm.

“Not so good…” Willow whispered, “Okay, something freaky is going on…no shit, Willow. Hey, Willow! At least I can remember my own name.”

She spoke not out of necessity but to hear something familiar, the sound of her own voice. It calmed her somewhat as it echoed off what she now saw to be sterile looking walls. They were simple, modern, like you would find in any house, complete with bland wallpaper that she recognised from her mother’s sewing room. Electric light fittings hung down from the ceiling, throwing the whole room into a comfortable light glow. Willow glanced down and laid eyes on what it was she had been holding in her palm. It was a small sword with a blade of a dull, seemingly unpolished metal. Willow immediately thought it looked like a piece of junk but when she tentatively reached out and placed her palm on the hilt she felt a jolt run through her body. What had previously appeared to be a piece of junk felt alive her in hand. She wrapped her fingers around the hilt and lifted it from the ground. It fit her palm perfectly, as though it were made for her.

“Huh!” Willow exclaimed as she wondered how she ever came to be the owner of a sword, “I don’t feel like Xena.” So I remember my own name and that I like Xena Warrior Princess… and given the feelings that the thought of Xena’s muscular thighs stirred in her gut, Willow's brain added, and I think I’m kinda gay

She had no qualms whatsoever about using the sword as a tool to lever herself up onto her feet. Once there, she remained in a hunched position to keep her head closer to the ground for a few moments longer. When she became sure that her legs could support her weight, she straightened fully upright. Willow then flexed her creaking body, feeling aching muscles stretch and rusty body parts move for what felt like the first time in years.

There was a plain, ordinary door set into the wall in front of her. Rather than head straight for it, Willow turned around to face the opposite direction. Her jaw dropped. Whereas three walls in the room were taken straight from any house she had ever been in, the fourth was strange beyond measure. It was a dark rock face, although smooth rather than the jagged forms of nature. Instinctively, Willow strode forward and touched the black surface with trembling fingertips. It was cold to the touch, as she expected it to be. Set into the very centre of the polished rock wall, was a door. Its frame was of the same stone as the wall, although cut and dressed rather than merely polished. For some reason Willow recognised the symbols that were inscribed around the door frame, each was deeply cut as though they went to the very heart of the rock. Whereas the door in the wall behind her was closed, this one was fully open. Shafts of light poured into the room that lay beyond, although without moving forward she could make out very little that lay within.

Feeling distinctly uneasy, Willow continued forward into the chamber. As she crossed the room’s threshold she felt a sensation akin to a thousand tiny pinpricks all over her skin. The sword in her hand seemed to protest at being taken into the room, although Willow refused to believe that a sword could seem to be aware of its surroundings. The symbols continued into the small chamber, which Willow could now see to be a tomb.

She shuddered as she realised the long oblong shape on the platform in front of her was a coffin. Its lid was ajar. Her mind screamed at her to leave the tomb but something compelled her forward, she had to look in the coffin. Willow’s trembling legs carried her to the platform and she reached out to grip the sides in case she felt the urge to turn and run. She made her next movement as quickly as possible, jerking herself forward so she could peer over the coffin’s lid. It was empty.

Willow breathed a sigh of relief, she didn’t know if she fully expected to see something contained within or not. She just knew that there was absolutely nothing in the black stone coffin, not even a lining. Her fingers instinctively reached out to touch the smooth stone at the base. As the stone came into contact with the pads of her fingers she remembered something further…although could not be certain whether it was truth or just some strange fiction her imagination had concocted. Willow remembered being in the coffin, she remembered being sealed up within that plain stone box. With her eyes closed she could see everything in a dim haze. She was thrashing against some unseen force, struggling to get out of the coffin because she knew exactly what was about to happen. There were faces staring down at her, seven of them…all bar one wearing cold, impassive expressions. Focused in grim determination. The final face, belonging to that of a young blonde woman, was wet with tears. Willow felt an eerie familiarity at the memory of her features. She concentrated harder to dredge up the memory of another face, one similar to the first. Blonde hair, blue eyes…a beautiful woman by any stretch of the imagination. There was a family resemblance to the face peering down into the coffin, but no more. As the lid of the coffin ground closed, the faces gradually disappeared. The last thing Willow remembered seeing before the darkness came was the woman’s face as she wept.

Unnerved, Willow withdrew her fingers from the base of the coffin and dashed out of the tomb, heart thumping wildly as she did. Emerging back into the light Willow skidded to a halt. The empty room in which she had woken was now filled with half a dozen people. Five of them were non-descript men and women clad in drab brown robes…the sixth was something else altogether. Although Willow was repulsed by his appearance, the familiarity was there again. She knew this pale and wizened man standing before her and she knew him well.

“We’re so very glad you could join us, Willow.”

He extended his crab-like hand for her to grasp…and with a moments hesitation, she did.

******

As soon as Tara’s eyes opened onto the world she knew something was not right. Even as it took her time to put her finger on exactly what it was, she felt sick to her stomach. Where her heart should have been, there was nothing but a gaping hole…and it hurt like hell. Tara let out a shallow breath and closed her eyes. Everything was slowly coming back to her in bits and pieces. She felt as though pain and terror were fragments in a puzzle. Although it was a puzzle she did not want to complete, she needed the answers more.

There had been a terrible battle at dawn. Tara remembered a last desperate moment of eye contact with Willow before it was just her and the children. Then they had come for the children, the first were easily defeated but a warlock had fought against her with magicks to the point of collapse. Tara felt pain beneath the cast covering her right hand and arm and remembered she had cut her palm as she plunged a shard of glass into his belly. Then there was nothing until Willow and Faith had pulled her from the rubble of the attic…just her alone. The children were gone. Matt, Dawn…and Ashley.

With her memories flooding back, Tara’s eyes opened and she sat up too fast. Her body protested with spasms of pain and an awful dizziness that left her disorientated in a spinning room. In moments the movement was halted as a strong arm slid around her back to support her. Faith’s concerned visage floated into view. Solid as a rock, dependable Faith.

The slayer found Tara an extra pillow and lowered her back down, paying extra attention to fluffing the pillows in a most un-Faith-like manner. If Tara did not already sense something was wrong then the look on Faith’s face as she stepped back and folded her arms, said it all. Tara had always been able to read Faith’s emotion and now barely concealed guilt and sadness were reflected in equal amounts. Knowing something had gone wrong, she fought to keep her voice steady.

“Y-you’re b-back,” Tara stammered over the obvious statement.

Faith managed an abrupt nod, “I’ve been travelling non-stop for the past three days and you’re damn lucky I managed to have a shower at the airport. It wasn’t pretty smell.”

“For my sake I hope you managed to get Willow to take one too, there’s no way I’m wrapping my arms around a stinky girlfriend.”

Tara’s voice was so breezy it was clearly forced. As she peered over Faith’s shoulder she already knew that her red-haired lover was not there. At that point she already knew that something had happened to Willow, but she needed the words to confirm it.

“You’d wrap your arms around Willow no matter how badly she reeked,” Faith replied honestly, Hell, I’d wrap my arms around Willow if she were here!

“F-Faith,’ Tara whispered, trying to catch the Slayer’s eye, “W-where’s Willow?”

Faith knew Tara was trying to look at her but she determinedly avoided her friend’s gaze and fixed her own on a distant point outside the window.

“Willow’s gone,” her lips barely moved as she said the words.

Tara’s response was angry and immediate, “Why would you say something like that? I’d know if Willow was dead and she’s not, she’s still alive!”

Tara sat up and wrapped icy fingers around Faith’s wrist as the Slayer tried to set her straight, “T, stop…I don’t know what happened, she disappeared…”

“Why the fuck did you leave her, Faith?” Tara demanded hoarsely, lifting her uninjured arm and pounding it on Faith’s chest, “You know exactly what she’s been through, she n-needed you…”

As Tara’s voice disintegrated into staccato sobbing Faith trapped her balled up fist in her own hand and folded her into a fierce embrace. She stroked the blonde’s hair and held her trembling shoulders. Tara’s pain brought back all too clearly the expression of terror and helplessness on Willow’s face before she had disappeared. Faith remembered trying to pry the sword from Willow’s grip and her obvious failure when she woke up alone. At that moment, lying alone in the cave with just her headlamp separating her from the darkness all around, she realised for the first time in her life that Slayer’s felt fear. Every instinct had screamed at her to get the hell out of that tomb and back above ground but she had searched those tunnels for Willow to the point of almost losing herself. It was not until her second and last battery was dying, that she allowed herself to leave. Despite all she had done, Faith still felt as though she had failed Tara.

“We’ve lost them all,” Tara whispered brokenly.

Faith drew back slightly, “What do you mean?”

Tara let out a shaky breath, “Spike returned already, he could not follow them…the children are lost, and now Willow is too.”

Things couldn’t get much worse.

“Where do we go from here?” Faith was only asking herself, she knew full well that Tara looked to her for direction and leadership.

The Slayer felt completely and utterly defeated, she had nothing to offer. Her shoulders slumped as she sat on the corner of Tara’s hospital bed.

Meanwhile, as she brought herself under control, Tara allowed herself to feel a slight measure of hope, it was miniscule, but it was hope nevertheless. Even though Detective Willow Rosenberg had not long been in her life, she felt as though she knew her…and it went without saying that she trusted her with her life. Despite all that Willow had been through during the past weeks, Tara knew the kind of brave, selfless woman that she was. She knew Willow was not dead, and that meant wherever she was, she would find a way to come back to her.

“We wait,” Tara reached out and brushed weak fingers against the side of Faith’s face, “We wait for Willow to find herself…and then she’ll come for us.”

******

“I’d give anything for my PSP.”

“Uh, hello, earth to Matt…wouldn’t you rather get the hell out of here!”

Matt glanced up at Dawn from where he was splayed on a leather couch. He sighed at the stern expression she had fixed on her face and tilted his head backwards so he didn’t have to look at her any longer. She was beginning to act far too bossy for his liking…too much like his older sister, and he didn’t want a single reminder of that bitch. The three of them, Matt, Dawn and Ashley had been cooped up in one part of what they suspected was a very large house. Matt remembered seeing very little as he was thrown over the back of someone’s shoulder and brought into the house after having spent an indeterminate amount of time with the two girls in the back of a windowless van. The whole trip had merged into one indescribable blur with Dawn and Ashley crying, and something very close to sobs coming from his own throat…although he would never admit it.

All three of them had been dumped rather unceremoniously into the small suite of rooms in which they remained nearly four weeks later. There was a living room with a couch, which doubled as Matt’s bed, and no TV. Off to one side was a smaller room contained two beds where the girls slept. A tiny bathroom completed the suite. Their only window was set high into the wall in the living room, Matt had lifted himself to peer out once but all he saw was a featureless concrete courtyard. As it turned out they were let out into that courtyard every few days for an hour or so. Each child was beginning to realise just what it was like to be in prison. There was precious little to do other than read the stack of Reader’s digest books or play one of two board games, chess or backgammon…and none of the three actually knew how to play backgammon.

“Yes!” Matt growled back, “Of course I bloody well want to get out of here.”

The tone in his voice caused both Dawn and Ashley to look up at him from where they were seated on the floor playing chess. Ashley had a small stack of Dawn’s pieces on the carpet near her knee, while Dawn had one lonely pawn of Ashley’s.

“Matt…” Dawn began in the same stern tone she had used earlier.

With a frustrated sigh, Matt sat up and swung his legs off the couch and onto the floor. He put his head in his hands.

“I know, I know…we can’t afford to get angry…I’ve seen the same movies you have and I know exactly what happens when people are cooped up for too long, but I’m starting to think they had no say in whether they went crazy or not,” he let out a breath after his speech and rubbed his stomach, “When’s dinner anyway, I think they’re kinda late today.”

Dawn glanced at her watch and then the small slot on the door that had slid open for three sandwiches and juice boxes at lunchtime and had remained closed since, “They are late…I’m beginning to think something’s up.”

Matt moved to the edge of the couch, “Do you think it’s time…time for you know what?”

Dawn glared at Matt for a second and then cast a furtive glance in Ashley’s direction as though she feared the girl would overhear something to upset her. Rather than be upset, the youngest member of the trio rolled her eyes in annoyance.

“I know exactly what you guys are talking about so go ahead and say it,” Ashley announced firmly, she let out a sigh when neither of the two teenagers spoke, “You think it might be time to kill us.”

Both teenagers appeared exceedingly uncomfortable with the mention of what they had been trying to forget for the past month of their captivity. Ashley merely folded her small arms looked resolutely determined to remain calm. Although beneath the surface she was terrified and longed for the comforting embrace of her mother.

“They might not want to kill us anymore,” Dawn offered hopefully, “I mean, it’s been this long so perhaps…”

“No,” Matt muttered grimly, “They need to kill us…and they will.”

“Matt!” Dawn exclaimed, scooting across the chessboard to Ashley’s side where she folded the younger girl into her arms, “You needn’t say it at all!”

The tiny chess pieces were scattered across the carpet, the game forgotten.

“Why not!” Matt cried, leaping to his feet, “It’s the truth…and it’s all my fucking sisters fault! I hope she rots in hell!”

Dawn felt Ashley’s body tremble in her arms at the sound of Matt’s angry words and she smoothed her hair gently, trying to maintain her own crumbling façade even as his words rang in her ears. She knew full well the young man had been struggling to deal with his sister’s betrayal from the moment he had overhead the adults talking about it downstairs. He now took to pacing the floor in front of the couch, a moment interrupted as the door swung open to admit more of the brown robed minions who they had all come to loath. Matt’s eyes narrowed at the sight of them. Without warning he surged forward at them, fire in his eyes.

“You fucking murderers!” Matt yelled, “I’m gonna…”

His forward movement was arrested abruptly as a familiar face moved through the doorway. He froze before a small smile curled the corners of his mouth. Behind him, both Dawn and Ashley rose to their feet, smiles of their own on their faces. Ashley tore her way out of Dawn’s grasp and before she could be stopped, ran across the floor to the figure standing in the doorway.

“Stop!” a single curt word sliced the air.

Ashley could not move, she had been running and suddenly her limbs would no longer work. She was frozen to a single spot, a metre short of the figure she had been running to embrace. With confusion showing clearly on her face she stared at the woman just in front of her and realised that a change had come over her.

“W-Willow?” she asked quietly, a small tremor creeping into her voice, “Willow, what has happened to you?”

The woman she addressed as Willow stared back down at her and Ashley shivered. Her skin was translucent, clearly revealing the black veins that thumped beneath it. They had spread across her face, raised and distorted to completely ruin what had once been beautiful to Ashley’s eyes. Willow’s own eyes were no longer the emerald green that Ashley remembered so well. She searched in vain for some hint of Willow in those twin black orbs boring a hole into her, but she found absolutely none. There was only a rock-like coldness that sent a terrible chill down her spine. Her once lustrous red hair was no longer. Instead stringy midnight locks framed her white face, falling down over the shoulders of her black leather coat. The coat fell down to the floor, obscuring most of Willow’s body but Ashley could still tell her friend had lost too much weight since she had seen her last.

By now both Dawn and Matt were beginning to wonder what the hell had going on. They too had been moving towards Willow but had stopped at the sight of her strange behaviour, completely unlike the friendly detective they had come to know. Her appearance and the fact that she made no move to help them made all three children start to think that something was exceptionally wrong.

“Hello kids,” Willow smiled but it was not friendly.

“Officer Rosenberg?” Matt bravely took a few more steps forward, “Have you come to get us out of here?

Willow’s head cocked to one side before she replied cryptically, “In a manner of speaking, yes.”

Her arm shot out towards Matt, fingers curled inwards as though she were squeezing something between them. Before he knew quite what was happening Matt found himself lifted a foot into the air. As he glanced down in bewilderment, Willow made a savage ‘come here’ gesture. Matt’s whole body moved swiftly through the air and in seconds he found himself hovering in front of Willow, her fingers squeezing his throat. Before either of the girls could get an inkling of was about to happen, Willow muttered a single word under her breath and Matt went flying backwards. Before he could slam into the wall he screamed once and his entire body vanished in an explosion of white light. Seconds later there was nothing to say the young man had even been in the room at all save an indentation on the couch where he had lain moments earlier.

Ashley and Dawn were struck speechless; their faces twin masks of horror at the sudden end to their companion. When Dawn realised that Willow’s gaze had shifted to her, she scrambled behind the couch. Although the look of terror on her face said that she knew it wasn’t going to stop Willow from doing to her exactly what she had done to Matt.

“Willow, stop this!” Dawn cried in desperation, “I don’t know what the hell has come over you but this isn’t you!”

Willow made a sweeping gesture with her arm and the couch flew to one side, smashing partially through the wall and embedding itself there. As the dust swirled, she lifted Dawn as effortlessly as she had lifted Matt and summoned her.

As Willow held her by the throat, Dawn tried to struggle but found her limbs would not work. Out of the corner of her eye she could just see Ashley, still rooted to the same spot with tears running down her pale cheeks. Dawn turned her attention back to the creature that had once been Willow and tried to reason with it.

“You can’t kill us like this…the ritual…” Dawn began, referring to the carefully drawn circles that had marked the other murders.

“Ah yes, the ritual,” Willow breathed, “An elaborate sham no less, turns out that it was never the seals that were keeping the Darkness at bay…the killings were merely a ruse.”

“A ruse for what?” Dawn spluttered, trying to engage Willow in conversation and keep her talking in the vain hope that she would realise what she was doing.

Willow blinked once, slowly, and replied in a quite voice, “My dear Dawnie, I suppose I can tell you since you’re about to leave us.”

With that she drew Dawn closer, close enough to whisper in her ear. No one else in the room could hear the words passed between the two women. As Willow’s lips moved, Dawn’s eyes widened, almost bulging out of their sockets. Her lip trembled as her face drained completely of all colour. Whatever words passed between them, it was clear they were not easy to hear. Finished, Willow held Dawn at arms length. She regarded her closely as one would look at an insect about to be squashed.

“Goodbye, Dawnie,” she whispered through a toothy smile, “Say hi to Matt for me.”

“Willow, no!” Dawn screamed but it was all she had time to say before Willow threw her backwards.

A split second later Dawn disappeared amidst the same golden light that had claimed Matt. One moment she was there…and then her body was gone. Her shrill scream was cut off abruptly.

Her body disappeared and Willow was left standing in the room with the two henchmen on either side of her and little Ashley standing to one side. The girl was sobbing openly, her blue eyes already red-rimmed. She was shaking her head slowly as though she refused to believe what she had just witnessed.

Willow moved the few steps it took to reach Ashley’s side and hunkered down slightly so she could look her in the eye. Ashley tried to shrink away from the woman but of course she could not move any part of her body save her head. So while her chin tilted to the side and she managed to turn her face away, the rest of her body remained rooted to that one spot. She felt icy cold fingers wrap around her chin and wrench her gaze forwards even as she struggled against the grip.

With it being clear that she would be forced to look at the woman standing in front of her, Ashley tried defiantly to hold back her tears. She succeeded only after a lengthy sniff which left her nose rather sore. Willow seemed to find it funny and a small smile played with her cracked, white lips.

“Are you going to kill me too?” Ashley asked quietly, her voice breaking only at the end.

Willow shook her head slowly, “No Ash…I need to keep you close.”

“Why?” Ashley did not like the sound of Willow’s voice, it scared her to no end.

Willow smirked, as though anticipating something gloriously fun to come, “I’m keeping you close so that when your Mommy comes…which she will of course, I’ll have something to hurt her with...”

“Me,” Ashley whispered in disbelief, “Why would you want to hurt my Mom?”

Willow’s smirk broke into outright laughter. It was the laughter of a small child who had been given far too many toys all at once.

“Because it’s wrong,” Willow whispered.

From the tone of her voice, Ashley knew that this Willow didn’t think it was very wrong at all...


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Re: Rhyme and Reason

Postby dlline » Sun Apr 22, 2007 5:22 pm

Wow, it would appear that I got dibs again. How about that?

I'll be back...

Ok, I'm back!

You know it’s gonna be an interesting update when you start the feedback by quoting the Note…not the story, but the note.

Note: The following chapter is kinda dark...

No kidding, Alcy. And people accuse me of “not messing around.” Sheesh!

“Okay, something freaky is going on…no shit, Willow. Hey, Willow! At least I can remember my own name.”

I just had to mention this ‘cause it was funny.

Anyway, there was lots of cool stuff here, mainly because there was Evil Willow, and as much as I hate to admit it here, Evil Willow is pretty cool, in an intense, watch-your-ass kinda way. It’s fun to see her again. But I suspect that things are still not what they seem, so again, I will choose to trust you and let you lead the way.

I love this story, but I say that so much to you that you probably think I’m nuts. But I do love this story, and I can’t wait to see what happens next. Maybe you can blow something up for me again.

Thanks for a great update,
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Re: Rhyme and Reason

Postby PancakesinBellies » Sun Apr 22, 2007 5:39 pm

What. The. Fuck. :thud
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Re: Rhyme and Reason

Postby db » Sun Apr 22, 2007 8:12 pm

Well, missy, I can say that I don't like where this is going one bit.

Not one bit at all.

Willow *needs* Tara... I think that being away from her makes Willow somehow suceptible to badness -- and and I think that maybe if she isn't there that somehow it makes her bad? I dunno... but she is definately all black haired evil un-goodness and and :paranoid :cry

I don't want her to be evil! I don't want her to to hurt Ashley or Tara. They're using her -- they're manipulating Willow somehow and it's scary.

And what's with all the king Arthur/romeo & juliette references? Maybe it is all about Willow and Tara to begin with. Maybe there is some past life thing they have to set right. Where's Giles? Why aren't they *researching* further?

My chin's gone wobbly again.

oy!

Ok, you've made your point. You are in fact the high preistess of angst and pain.... it gets better, right? :paranoid
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Re: Rhyme and Reason

Postby viximon » Mon Apr 23, 2007 1:30 am

what a mess. Well at last Ashley is save (somehow and for now) with Willow now. I feel sorry for Faith, she did her best but wasn't enough. I wonder what's really Willow thinking; being all veiny and dark...I though she was kinda herself after all. Guess I'm wrong

Keep it up!! Wanting to read more already
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Re: Rhyme and Reason

Postby spells42 » Mon Apr 23, 2007 11:04 pm

Somehow I missed an update, but I'm all caught up now and I have to say that I found the bit where Willow and Faith are making their way through the cave following Willow's magical homing beacon, to be fantastic! And then, the black veins when she picked up the sword, and then couldn't let go, and then disappeared, and then... I think I'm too excited to go on.

I thought it all beautifully theatrical: Willow's fall, the darkness, her light spell, the blonde headed skeleton, the locket with the picture of the Willow look-alike, and the sword under the hands of the praying figure. it'd make a great movie. Then, in the last update, Willow waking up confused, but still sounding a lot like herself, especially in contrast to the Willow that shows up at the kids' prison and deals so harshly with Matt and Dawn.

I actually have my suspicions about that - or perhaps I should say, hopes. What I'm hoping involves Willow not being quite so subsumed by evil as she appears. I'm looking forward to finding out.

Loved Tara's faith in Willow.
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Re: Rhyme and Reason

Postby Willowtree252 » Wed Apr 25, 2007 12:36 pm

:pinky my heart broke for Tara and I cant believe I even felt sorry for Faith. The rest is as follows :wtf and :yikes I am hanging by a thread and shaking in my boots :kdevil
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Re: Rhyme and Reason

Postby Chummy » Thu Apr 26, 2007 12:14 am

Wooooow that was unexpected. but it was great I like it but the poor kids why did you have to kill them. Keep up the good work and plz don't kill anybody else expect for Bob you need to kill him and the bad guys defently . :pray and keep the good work and don't make us wait long .
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Re: Rhyme and Reason

Postby watty » Fri Apr 27, 2007 4:41 am

*rubs hands* Wonderful, wonderful twist. What I absolutely love about your writing is you are not afraid. Killing Buffy; making Tara a cynical tough-as-shit ex-con; turning canon on its head (with a double twist thrown in); killing Buffy; throwing the Scoobies into a hell dimension. And now you've killed off the Seals. Well, may be not killed killed ... they got dispatched somewhere that surely can't be pleasant. I mean, it's by the hands and magic of an evil thing that looks like Willow and talks like Willow, but there's something terribly wrong here. I wonder if it's a hypnotized Willow or it's evil Bob in Willow's body ... or half a dozen weird possibilities that trooped past my imagination.

Because what is wrong? Argh, you do such a great job of leaving us in suspense. Wonderful.
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Re: Rhyme and Reason

Postby Artemis » Fri Apr 27, 2007 8:18 am

Damn, no-one's safe now - not just Buffy, but Buffy's relatives, and Buffy's relatives' friends, you're out-doing yourself this time ;-) Willow's so vicious suddenly - looks like she's been overcome by the dark magic that Bob planted in her, but I suspect it's not so simple. I just can't figure out how exactly it's not so simple... But thinking about that whole section, Tara's line kept coming to mind: wait for Willow to find herself. She's got a hell of an uphill battle by the looks of things.

(And just to prove she's Evil Willow for the moment - or whatever she is - she does the "You're about to die, so I'll explain" thing. I wonder if, in true villain fashion, that's going to come back and bite the bad guys on the ass somehow? I'm even wondering if Willow is just doing a really good job of pretending to be evil, and has actually stashed Matt and Dawn in some pocket dimension for safe-keeping while she tried to figure out how to muck up Bob's plans for good... but all things considered, that seems too calculating for how confused Good Willow has been so far.)
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Re: Rhyme and Reason

Postby WillowRulez » Fri Apr 27, 2007 12:42 pm

Holy cow!
“We’re so very glad you could join us, Willow.”

I'm not :paranoid
Tara let out a shaky breath, “Spike returned already, he could not follow them…the children are lost, and now Willow is too.”

I could practically feel her despair when reading this.
“W-Willow?” she asked quietly, a small tremor creeping into her voice, “Willow, what has happened to you?”

Cliffhanger!!! A part of me cant shake the feeling that Willow is just faking this and that she told Ashley that when she whispered into her ear. But thats probably wishful thinking. :smash
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Re: Rhyme and Reason

Postby Chummy » Wed Aug 29, 2007 2:45 am

Helllllllllllllllllllooooooooooooooooooooooo

Did you forget about this story plz update.
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Re: Rhyme and Reason

Postby Alcy » Mon Sep 10, 2007 8:40 pm

dlline: Yes well, I felt I had to give you all ample warning that this chapter was going to be dark just in case people had missed the dark and evil tone that has been building up in this story throughout the journey!
Glad you found lots of cool stuff, I love Evil Willow, I used her in my very first fanfic and nowI’m using her again…because she’s cool! I’m not sure how things seem if you’re reading it but I know how things are shaping up and trust me, I can take it to darker places!
Glad you still love this story, I have to finish it because there are too many Kittens out there who will be disappointed if I don’t bring things to a conclusion, I’ll get there one of these days! And regarding blowing something up at the end, I’m sure that can be arranged for you!

PancakesinBellies:
What. The. Fuck.

A great way to sum up the chapter!

db: I’m exceptionally glad that you don’t like where this story is going, that means I’ve succeeded in taking it to a nice dark place where I can make everyone suffer immensely *insert evil cackle here*
You’re very right, Willow does need Tara and trust me, in the next chapter I’m bringing them back together…although perhaps not in the way you expect! And maybe it gets better…well, it kind of has to, but I can make things worse first right?

viximon: Everything is a great big mess, I’m not so sure if Ashley is safe with Willow…you’ll have to stay tuned for the next chapter to find out…

Spells42: I hope you’re not too excited to read on to the next chapter, you’ve got to be able to find out what happens after all.
You’ve got some high hopes there about Willow not being quite so subsumed by evil…I don’t know about that, she’s pretty damn bad!

Dianneswillowtree: I hope I don’t leave you hanging by a thread for too much longer, update will be ready soon.

Chummy: I’m sorry I’ll killed so many people…but I can’t guarantee that no one else will die…because that would be giving things away. I’m sorry for not updating this story sooner but I had never forgotten about it and will deliver the second to last chapter very soon!

watty: Ah watty, no, I’m not afraid to do much at all…you never know, I might one day write a fic that doesn’t have a single act of violence in it and is designed purely to make people laugh and sigh contentedly…however, that day isn’t coming anytime soon and I will continue to send our heroines to dark, dark places and kill Buffy off as I see fit. Willow has reached rock bottom again, I’m very fond of taking her there for some twisted reason and I hope the ending will do the story justice!

Artemis: Hi Chris, Nope, no one’s safe…and Willow definitely has a hell of an uphill battle…in fact, it’s probably an up-cliff battle. And then I’ll just say you speculate far too much…but I think it’s probably a case of you reading and writing too much AU!

WillowRulez: Gotta love those cliffhangers! Thanks very much, we’ll see whether your hunch was just wishful thinking or not in the remaining chapters.

Well, after some months hiatus on this fic, I am pleased to say that Chapter 21 is very nearly completed and I should have it up for your reading pleasure within the next few days.

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Re: Rhyme and Reason

Postby Alcy » Tue Sep 11, 2007 2:16 pm

Note: Additional warning for violence, it's not pretty folks...

Chapter 21 – “Lord of Darkness Revealed

Tara Maclay’s eyes snapped open, her breath came in short panicked gasps that did not subside until she took notice of her surroundings. She realised she was safe in her own room above the Magic Box. Her eyelids slid closed once more and she settled into a relaxed state of mind, half listening out for the sounds of Ashley playing or Faith practising in the training room directly beneath her bedroom. She heard neither but was not overly concerned, trying to remember whether Faith said she was taking Ashley to the movies as it was Saturday afternoon. Tara opened her eyes once again…was it Saturday afternoon? She glanced across at the clock sitting on the bedside table, it was five in the evening and she wondered why on earth she was in bed at that odd hour. It was when she tried to rise from her pillow a few moments later than she realised why. Her head spun uncontrollably as soon as she lifted it from the pillow and when she reached up to steady herself she found her hand bound in a fresh, white bandage and her arm was bound in a white cast.

“Ash?” she intended it to resonate throughout the apartment but it came out as a mere croak that did not carry past her room.

Tara awkwardly dragged the covers away from her pyjama clad body and swung her legs over the side of her bed. She was trying to stand when Faith rushed into the room a few moments later. The Slayer was at her side in moments, setting down the axe that had been in her hands before she reached out to steady Tara. Faith arms went around her back as she rose unsteadily to her feet.

“Why do I get the feeling I’ve been doing a lot of this over the past few weeks?” Tara asked weakly as Faith continued to support her.

“Because you have,” Faith replied bluntly, “Every time you wake it’s the same…disorientated…loss of short-term memory, I’m worried about you T, it’s been five weeks since Ashley and the others were taken and a month since Willow went missing in New Zealand…”

“Not exactly easy things to deal with,” Tara mumbled, “Can you help me sit down again?”

The sudden flood of awareness almost drove her to her knees; she remembered in crystal clarity that awful early morning battle as she was huddled in the attic with Ashley, Matt and Dawn as the others fought the Society members, then a fight of her own and everything going black as the children were taken from her. Then more recently, Faith returning from New Zealand alone, with no clue as to where Willow had gone. Tara sagged, her shoulders drooping, she felt as though everything had been stripped away, everything she held dear and loved.

“Hey, you’ve got a text…you didn’t hear the alert?” Faith commented, hoping to draw Tara’s attention back to reality.

The Slayer picked up Tara’s slim-line phone that was sitting in its cradle on her bedside table and passed it across. Tara took it numbly, her fingers barely closing to take a hold of it. However, a change came over her face as she glanced down at the small display screen. She then hurriedly flipped it open to read the message.

Faith’s eyebrows lifted at the most animated expression on Tara’s face she had seen this past month, “Who’s it from?”

Tara wordlessly handed the phone to Faith, watching the Slayer’s face as she read the message

Faith noted that the caller name came up as ‘Officer Rosenberg’ – no doubt Tara had no changed the name since their initial meetings when their relationship had been strictly professional.

Ash & I r ok but need the gang fast, 2648 Grace Road, luv W.

“Can you help me get dressed?” Tara asked, suddenly finding herself capable of standing unaided.

Faith looked on dubiously as Tara crossed the room to stand in front of her wardrobe and began tugging off her pyjamas with some amount of co-ordination. She doubted if it were the same person that had trouble eating her soup just a day earlier. As Tara selected a sports bra and began to awkwardly tug it on, Faith re-read the text…although from the brevity of the message she could not read anything into it.

“You’re not seriously planning on just rushing over there are you, T?” Faith demanded as she dropped the phone and moved to help Tara who was struggling to get a tank over her head, “I know Grace Road, it’s up in the hills in the middle of frickin nowhere, nothing around for miles save forest…why on earth would Ash and Willow be there…”

“I don’t know,” Tara said as her head popped through the hole in her tank, “But she needs us!”

“If she were really in trouble then how come she’s still got her cell phone?” Faith fetched a pair of jeans and an unironed shirt from a pile on the floor.

“Faith!” Tara growled, snatching the jeans and shirt from Faith, “It’s Willow, what more do you need to know?”

“T, I love you…if you trust Willow on this then I’ll trust her too,” Faith breathed evenly as though this were a difficult admission for her to make.

Faith sighed as Tara finished dressing herself, although she had to button her shirt and tie the laces on her sneakers. She did not mention that while she would check out the address in Willow’s text, she had no intention of actually letting Tara come with her.

~~~~~~

It was a small band of brave souls that drove to the address in Willow’s text several hours later. Faith, Spike and Giles were all present with Xander and Anya deemed unfit to take part. Faith had threatened to tie Tara up to prevent her from coming until she realised there was no knot she could tie that the witch could not magically untie.

2648 Grace Road was indeed in the middle of nowhere as Faith had commented to Tara earlier that evening. All four of them felt a rather ominous chill descend when the car ground to a halt and they stepped out. Faith paused in front of the rusted wrought iron gate, hefting her axe onto her shoulder. The others assembled close behind her; all wielding weapons of their own save Tara, who had need of none.

Given the location of the house, it appeared that no one had attempted renovations in about a hundred years. Although there was no doubt that it had at one time been a fairly grand residence, it now appeared to be little more than an overgrown shack. All traces of paint had fled from it’s exterior, windows were boarded up and those that weren’t were devoid of glass. The front door hung off its hinges, wide open…but it was not an inviting picture. There was no trace of life inside or out, no sign of Willow or Ashley.

“Willow! Ash!” Tara was rushing past Faith before the Slayer could make a move to stop her.

“Tara, are you daft?” Faith started after her urgently, “Shut up and stay with us!”

Faith had barely started after Tara when she realised that she was no longer following anyone, the blonde was simply gone. She skidded to a halt, fearing that there was some sort of portal directly in front of her. Behind her Giles and Spike were equally confused.

“Okay, that was unexpected,” Spike drawled with unconcealed sarcasm, “What do you expect to happen when you go rushing towards an abandoned building?”

Faith whirled on him to speak out for her friend, “She’s distraught, not thinking clearly…you could hardly expect her to do any differently…”

“I could expect her not to get us all killed,” Spike growled, “Now what do we do?”

“We go in,” Giles suggested simply, moving up to stand beside Faith.

Faith nodded in agreement and took a few steps forward until she was around the spot where Tara had disappeared…nothing happened. She continuing walking and found her path clear all the way to the front door. With each step she expected something to happen, Society goons to rush at her with murder in their eyes or the wizened and powerful Bob to appear before them. She almost willed them to come at her…and was disappointed when she entered the house without a single incident. The only sounds she could hear were Giles’ hoarse breaths just over her shoulder and three pairs of footsteps on the wooden floorboards.

Spike sighed in exasperation at the deserted house, “What’s the bet that they’re not anywhere near here and we’re going to spend the next hour wandering around an empty house chasing our own shadows.”

Faith paused, axe at the ready in her hands, head cocked to one side as though she sensed something within the bowels of the house.

“No,” she whispered, “They’re here…and I think they knew we were coming…”

~~~~~~

Tara had been running towards the house and then she found herself running straight at a wall…it was as simple as that. She stopped and knew instantly that she had been transported somewhere else, that much was obvious. An eerie golden light lit the room as she spun around to survey her surroundings. Concrete walls stretched in every direction, there were no doors or windows that she could see but the room was saturated with magicks. One obvious source was the floating golden orb in the middle of the room at ceiling height. Directly beneath the orb was a wrong iron bed with an old fashioned feather mattress. Tara did not approach it; instead she closed her eyes, feeling for a way out.

“There’s no way out...unless of course you’re me,” a voice whispered directly in her ear.

Tara spun at the sound of the all too familiar voice, the beginnings of a smile emerging on her face. While the voice had whispered in her ear…the accompanying person was standing on the other side of the room. Tara’s smile froze, half-completed when it turned out to be someone quite different from who she was expecting. She knew immediately that it was Willow…but something had happened to the red head she loved, something that made the hairs on the back of Tara’s neck stand up as she approached. A few moments later, she realised that she had actually been backing away from her lover as though she could not bear to have her come any closer. There was very little trace of the good-natured redhead she had come to love in such a short space of time. Her hair, her eyes, even every scrap of clothing she wore, it was all black.

Willow did not seem to notice Tara’s odd reaction to her presence as she moved to stand in front of her; instead she stared down at Tara’s injured hand, not taking her eyes off it, even to look up into Tara’s own eyes. She reached Tara’s side and gently picked up the cast-covered hand by the wrist. Tara winced at first but moments later the pain was gone. She flexed her fingers experimentally to find everything working perfectly. It was proven when Willow pulled apart the cast and she found her arm as good as new.

“Will…” was all Tara could manage, especially when her lover finally lifted her head, staring directly at her with her disconcerting black gaze.

While Tara could not manage a smile, Willow had no trouble at all. She flashed Tara a dazzling white grin, seemingly quite pleased with her display of control.

“Pesky cast aside,” Willow tossed the remnants of Tara’s cast to the ground, “Much better…”

“Will, what are you doing?” Tara whispered, her legs turning to jelly at Willow’s firm touch on her body after over a month of separation, “This is not the time…we need to…”

Willow responded by biting down hard on Tara’s neck and continuing to roam over Tara’s body with her hands, cupping her arse to pull their bodies together. She thrust her thigh between Tara’s, forcing her lover’s legs apart in order to grind against her sex. Tara’s eyes closed and her lips parted as a small whimper escaped. She had missed Willow’s touch.

Even through her jeans Tara could feel Willow’s touch arousing her all too quickly, a part of her wanted Willow moving inside her and yet she remained aware of just where they were and what they were supposed to be doing. Ashley was in danger and it seemed all Willow could think about was making love. Tara’s eyes remained closed even as one of Willow’s hands travelled beneath her shirt and bra to cup her breast and the other worked at the buttons on her jeans. She lost herself in the touch of her lover.

Growing frustrated at the clothing that separated her from Tara’s skin, Willow claimed Tara’s lips in a savage kiss and brought both hands to the front of Tara’s shirt, she ripped open both her shirt and t-shirt with one tug. Willow nudged aside the sports bra Tara wore to bare both of her breasts, smiling with genuine delight as she did so. A whimper escaped Tara’s lips as she felt Willow’s tongue on her tender flesh, exploring her budding nipple.

While continuing her ministrations on Tara’s breasts with her tongue, Willow forced one hand beneath the half open fly of Tara’s jeans,

It was at that point that Tara came to her senses; her eyes opened…Willow wasn’t thinking about making love…she wanted to fuck her, plain and simple. Everything from the complete lack of tenderness to the urgent manner in which she pawed aside Tara’s clothing. While their coupling in the forest the night before the attack had been just as urgent, there had been tenderness and a connection that gave that urgency a sense of beauty. Any traces of that beauty were gone and Tara knew she couldn’t give in as this was not the woman she loved.

Tara physically put her hands on Willow and shoved her backwards. Surprised by the sudden act, Willow stumbled and tripped over her own feet before she fell to the ground. With Willow’s weight no longer pressing her against the wall, Tara moved away from it and took several quick steps further away from Willow.

Making no move to get up at first, Willow stared up at Tara with the expression of a petulant child thwarted in a game.

“I want you!” Willow growled, slapping the ground impatiently.

“I want you too, Willow,” Tara said slowly, “but not now…later, when we’re out of here and everyone is safe.”

Willow growled again and this time she did get to her feet, although not in the conventional manner. She practically levitated back into a standing position, seeming to expend no effort to do so. Tara whispered a spell to bind her lover but watched hopelessly as it was brushed aside as though it were a gust of air.

“Nothing’s gonna work on me, Tara,” Willow chided, “I’ve always had more power than you and now I know how to use every bit of it, you might say I’ve reached my full potential.”

“How?” Tara breathed.

“I’ve had a little help,” Willow admitted with a shrug, “But mostly I’m just fucking powerful…almost a god really.”

“You’re not a god, Willow,” Tara had backed away from her to the point where she now felt the iron railings of the bed behind her, she know knew exactly why it was there, “You’re just a scared little girl…”

Willow flew forward, her body slamming into Tara’s with an intensity that knocked the blonde backwards and down onto the bed. Tara hit the mattress hard, hard enough to feel the springs dig into her back. Willow’s face was poised inches from her own, the weight of her body pinning her down.

“Who’s scared now, Tara?” Willow demanded in disgust, “You always were scared…scared of what I could be, and you never gave yourself up to me as you should, never worshipped me as I deserved!”

With those insanely passionate words, Willow forced Tara’s legs open with her thigh and bared her breasts with several urgent tugs. She then began to devour them with her tongue, her hand driving beneath Tara’s jeans and underwear to find what she sought. She moved without compassion, not caring that she was hurting her lover. She laughed as Tara cried out when she roughly entered her.

“You’re mine, Tara” Willow whispered in her ear as she moved against her.

Summoning every ounce of strength within her, Tara took advantage of a distracted Willow to wrap her up in air and throw her backwards, off her body and several feet away from her. As soon as the weight was gone, she scrambled backwards off the bed, tugging her shirt over her chest.

“Come on, Tara,” Willow breathed hoarsely, her need etched on her face, “Just one last fuck for old times sake…since you’re probably not going to want to let me anywhere near you after what I have to do next.”

“W-Willow…y-you don’t have to do anything save get us the hell out of here…along with the kids,” Tara took several more steps backward but Willow moved in time with her, not allowing the gap between them to close.

At the mention of the children a small, rather pleased smile crossed Willow’s face and she tilted her head to one side as if remembering a fond memory. The smile and the complete lack of concern drove a stake into Tara’s heart, she knew that her Willow was gone; this was a monster that stood in front of her. It wore Willow’s body, it had the same lithe curves and that same pointy little chin but the thing that had tried to rape her was not Willow.

A small sob escaped Tara’s throat, “Where are the c-children?”

Willow chuckled, “Well, let’s just say little Dawnie and Matt won’t be joining us today, Ashley will most definitely be joining us however…”

Tara was struggling to process this information, clearly concerned for all three of the children but Ashley in particular. She implored the Willow-thing with her eyes, searching for any remaining traces of humanity in the hope that it could somehow be persuaded to help her find her daughter.

“Please take me to Ashley,” Tara asked desperately, “I need to see her…”

The Willow-thing cocked it’s head to one side as though it was enjoying this display of motherly-love and more importantly the pain that the separation was obviously causing Tara.

“I can take you to your daughter…and your friends,” it nodded happily, seemingly having forgotten her thwarted rape attempt as it moved onto a more exciting topic.

Tara screamed as the floor fell away from beneath her feet, she went hurtling downwards at a speed that was surely to result in her instant death. However, as another floor rushed up to meet her she found herself standing as though she had never moved. Dizzy and disorientated, Tara collapsed to her knees. She knelt, breathing heavily for a few seconds, her eyes adjusting to the harsh, bluish light in the room. Someone was calling her name…Faith.

Tara glanced upwards and her spirits sank further to see the rest of the gang up against the far wall of the chamber, all restrained by robe-clad Society thugs. The bluish light that lit the room came from at least a dozen orbs floating near the roof. Other than the orbs, the only other feature to note was the elaborately drawn chalk circle near Willow’s feet. Tara instantly recognised it for what it was.

She looked back to her friends, Spike hardly needed restraining; he looked as though he needed a hospital slumped and unconscious in the arms of his captor. Faith and Giles still fought, Faith had to be clubbed savagely over the head at the sight of Willow dragging Tara into the room. Even as drops of blood trailed down the side of her face she pulled against her captors grip like a savage dog straining to break free of a leash complete with savage snarling.

“Stop!” Willow growled as one thug moved to deliver a debilitating blow to Faith’s head, he paused mid-swing, “I want her conscious to see this…then you can do whatever you like with her.”

Willow motioned a lackey forward with a jerk of her head and he took Tara from her arms, although he hardly needed to do more than seize her firmly by the arm. Tara was led numbly to one side of the room, hardly even caring that the shreds of her ripped shirt were barely hanging on her torso. Faith glanced from Tara and then back to Willow, eyeing the now raven haired woman with barely concealed anger.

“What the fuck have you done, Willow?” she demanded.

Willow stared at Faith as though looking at something rather insignificant and did not reply; instead she turned and made a ‘come hither’ motion in the direction of one of an adjacent door. The door swung inwards to admit the papery faced old man they had come to know as Bob; however his appearance was not what prodded Tara out of her stupor. The blonde’s captor now had to use both hands to restrain her as she surged forward in an attempt to reach the small figure in Bob’s grasp.

Ashley immediately made to run towards her mother but Bob seized her by the scruff of her neck, hauling her backwards and off her feet. She kicked uselessly at the air as he held her a few feet off the ground.

“Ash, sweetie are you okay?” Tara asked, still struggling with both arms pinned awkwardly behind her back

The only sound a terrified Ashley could manage was a small sob but she bravely nodded her head.

Willow turned to the figure behind her, balanced on his outstretched palms was the sword she had liberated from the cave in New Zealand. Where the metal had been dull and lifeless before she found it, it now gleamed brilliantly even in the dimly lit chamber. When Willow reached down to pick it up, her fingers wrapping around the hilt in a claw-like motion, it shone even brighter. It seemed to sing as she lifted it from the outstretched palms, holding it out before her for all to see.

“It’s a shame that something so beautiful has to be sullied by the blood of a mortal,” Willow commented as she ran her thumb the length of the blade.

Her gaze transferred from the blade to Ashley Maclay, who was standing in front of her without flinching. Just a few tears rolled down her small face and she sniffed them back defiantly. Willow smiled at the girl but it was not meant to be reassuring. It was a smile of anticipation…of utter delight at what was about to happen.

While Ashley remained quite still, staring up at Willow, others in the room were less than calm. Faith’s angry roars filled the chamber, the Slayer now requiring two thugs to restrain her but even they were showing signs of not being able to maintain their hold on her for much longer. Even Giles was now pinned to the ground by four men in order to prevent him from rushing to the little girl’s side.

“Don’t you do anything to that kid you fucking psycho!” Faith screamed, lashing out as a third Society goon attempted to stop her from kicking free.

He received a solid thump beneath his jaw for his troubles and went sprawling backwards, seconds later Faith had shrugged one arm free and used it to smash the nose of the man who retained his grip, his hood slipped back and he slumped against the wall behind him. Faith’s bid to reach Ashley did not last any longer, even as she begun to move forward to the girl she found all her limbs frozen in mid air. Her eyes burning with intensity, Faith glared at Willow as she struggled. If looks could kill then Willow would have been eviscerated on the spot…as it was, she calmly walked a little closer to Ashley, ignoring Faith’s continued shouts. Eventually she made a silencing motion with her hand and when Faith opened her mouth to scream again, no sound emerged. Mute and frozen on the spot, Faith was forced to look on as Willow stood with the sword poised above Ashley’s head. Tears escaped from the corners of the Slayer’s eyes.

“W-Willow,” Tara had remained silent in her struggles until that point, her blue eyes brimming with unshed tears that no doubt burnt fiercely, “Willow please, it’s Ashley…she’s not a seal or anything threatening, she’s just Ashley, you don’t need to do this.”

Willow did not look across at Tara; instead she drew the sword back behind her in preparation to drive it forwards.

“Willow!” Tara cried, now pulling against the man who held her.

“Enough, it ends,” Willow whispered, driving the blade forward.

At that precise moment the floating globes of light vanished and threw the entire chamber into pitch darkness. There were few sounds besides a limp scream from Tara and the tortured sound of sharp steel sliding in and then out of soft flesh. There was the soft thump of a body hitting the ground and sharp sobs from Tara. A single org re-formed directly above Willow’s head, it’s blue light throwing most of her face into shadow as she glanced down at the small body at her feet and then to the sword in her hands.

“Well now,” Willow whispered, staring at the blood on her blade, “That was a bit of an anti-climax.”

~~~~~~

Following the awful scene they had witnessed, the four remaining captives were ushered rather mutely into a bare concrete room, Faith having to remain frozen throughout the move and Spike being somewhat revived if still a little groggy. The slayer’s eyes spoke of the violence she wanted to unleash. With the heavy door slammed shut behind them, Faith’s bonds were released and she immediately threw herself against the door, slamming her entire body against it repeatedly, crying out in rage with each collision. Giles and Spike stared at her futile effort, although Spike made one aborted attempt to restrain her and received a sharp jab in the gut for his trouble.

“Faith, it’s solid steel…I think perhaps Tara would have more chance of getting us out,” Giles said quietly, even as Faith continued to slam herself against the metal, a jarring noise echoing around the room with each contact.

Giles glanced from Faith to see Tara. The blonde had immediately retreated to a far corner of the room and was curled up into a tight ball, hugging her knees against her chest. Her face betrayed absolutely nothing save an awful blankness, her eyes were empty. Moving carefully and slowly, Giles crossed the floor to hunker down beside her. When he reached out to touch her cheek she jerked her head away at the contact.

“Can you get us out of here?” Giles asked quietly, his voice barely above a whisper.

There was no response from the blonde for almost a minute, just as Giles thought she was not going to respond at all she shook her head sightly.

“She’s blocking me,” was all she said her voice tight and forced though gritted teeth.

Giles sank back against the wall behind him beside Tara and glanced up at Faith and Spike. Faith was still pounding on the door, although she had begun using her fists rather as opposed to her entire body. With each strike of hard flesh against metal, Giles noticed that Tara jumped slightly as though the noise upset her.

“Faith, please stop,” he said in a commanding tone.

His voice broke through to the pissed off Slayer only long enough for her to spin around and shout at Giles, “You sit there like a dummy if you want…I’m letting them know I’m not going down without a fight…they’re going to have to come in here and…”

Faith paused when she saw the effect her harsh voice was having on Tara, still curled up tightly but now shaking slightly. She un-balled her fists and let them fall to her side, her shoulders slumped slightly.

“We all feel the same way, Faith.” Giles said quietly.

Faith just nodded in response for she could not open her mouth for fear of letting out the sob she knew was building up in her throat. She collapsed back against the wall of the cell, her emotions clearly running high even if she were too upset and exhausted to put them into words. Her arms folded tightly across her chest as though to contain her sorrow. The four remained in silence for several minutes, Tara continuing to sit motionless in the corner although now allowing Giles to at least touch her shoulder awkwardly, Spike slowly paced the length of the small room liked a caged animal.

Faith finally uncrossed her arms and straightened up from her position leaning against the wall.

“With Ashley dead…that means the Seals are all destroyed,” Faith breathed, “So where is this big bad, the Lord of Darkness that we failed to keep all locked up? I wanna at least get a piece of it before they kill me…”

Spike stopped pacing, “I would never go down without a fight…are they going to give us to this big bad or something?”

Faith shrugged, “I dunno, depends what form it takes…it could very well be hungry after all this time asleep…”

“We’ve already met her,” Giles interrupted in a whisper as he examined a cracked lense in his glasses, he glanced up at his companions

“Her?”

“Willow is the Lord of Darkness,” Tara finally spoke in a bland, toneless voice, “as she has been all along.”
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Re: Rhyme and Reason

Postby dlline » Tue Sep 11, 2007 7:33 pm

Wow, dibs again. Cool.

Rockin' update, Alcy, but I need to think about it a little more. I'll be back.

Okay, it's a while later and I've had a chance to think about it. Here goes:

Note: Additional warning for violence, it's not pretty folks...

No shit, Alcy. This is why I love what you write. You just don’t mess around, do you?
“If she were really in trouble then how come she’s still got her cell phone?”

You know, this is just one of those questions that people ask in stories that make you want to crawl into the page, or the TV, or the movie screen and just slap them silly. It’s just one of those great questions that someone always overlooks on their way to doing something really stupid, and I love it. Well done.
“T, I love you…if you trust Willow on this then I’ll trust her too,” Faith breathed evenly as though this were a difficult admission for her to make.

Not the brightest move on Faith’s part, but then again, there’s that wonderful perspective that we have and she doesn’t. See above re. slap them silly.
It was at that point that Tara came to her senses; her eyes opened…Willow wasn’t thinking about making love…she wanted to fuck her, plain and simple.

She moved without compassion, not caring that she was hurting her lover. She laughed as Tara cried out when she roughly entered her.

It wore Willow’s body, it had the same lithe curves and that same pointy little chin but the thing that had tried to rape her was not Willow.

…seemingly having forgotten her thwarted rape attempt as it moved onto a more exciting topic.

Wow, and again I say wow. Pushing the boundaries again, and I think it’s cool. Not that rape is a cool thing, cause that’s actually a sick thing to even say, but you went there and I think you rock for doing that. I get the picture and it’s a really scary one. This isn’t Willow… not even close. I’m more than a little concerned that Tara was so addled by the events of the previous month that it took her as long as it did to figure out that she was in really deep shit, so again I say well done.
…tortured sound of sharp steel sliding in and then out of soft flesh. There was the soft thump of a body hitting the ground and sharp sobs from Tara. A single org re-formed directly above Willow’s head, it’s blue light throwing most of her face into shadow as she glanced down at the small body at her feet and then to the sword in her hands.

“Well now,” Willow whispered, staring at the blood on her blade, “That was a bit of an anti-climax.”

Was it? What the hell just happened? I don’t think anything is as it appears, but I suppose a hearty “no, duh” is in order, eh?
“Willow is the Lord of Darkness,” Tara finally spoke in a bland, toneless voice, “as she has been all along.”

That bitch! And you! Leaving us right there? With one update to go? Part of me wants to slap you and part of me wants to buy you dinner. I guess I’ll let you decide.

Again, and like I usually do, I have to say very well done. Please don’t leave me here too long, okay? This is a great story and I need a great ending. I know you won’t disappoint me. Thank you.

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Re: Rhyme and Reason

Postby whatmakesyouhappy » Tue Sep 11, 2007 7:48 pm

WOW that was quick with the update and a great one at that! :clap
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Re: Rhyme and Reason

Postby tazraven » Tue Sep 11, 2007 8:09 pm

Holy shit.

Honestly, I'm not exaggerating when I say you're my hero. Helluva way to push the limits on the rules. I mean, there's a happy ending somewhere in here, but holy god. What a powerful update that was. I don't want to say dark Willow is cool, but wow, what an amazingly awesome bad guy she's turning out to be. There's a bunch to tie up in the last update, but I'm sure if anyone can accomplish it, you can. Awesome. I bow down.

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Re: Rhyme and Reason

Postby db » Tue Sep 11, 2007 9:01 pm

:paranoid

willow tried to rape Tara?

:paranoid

Willow killed Ashley?

:paranoid

Willow's the lord of darkness?

:paranoid

This story is well written and suspensful and intriguing, but I think it just got too dark for me.
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Re: Rhyme and Reason

Postby shiraz » Tue Sep 11, 2007 11:58 pm

Phew! Whatta ride. Attempted rape, murder of a child, sadistic dark Willow...this was quite the chapter. Guess the truth is Tara fought her off and the murder was shrouded in darkness so....is Ash really dead?

Great writing....I always feel scared reading this story. It's unpredictable and waaay dark, but there's a level of intrigue and the sense of underlying strength in the 'goodness' of the players that keeps me hooked.

I eagerly await the next chapter.

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Re: Rhyme and Reason

Postby Chummy » Wed Sep 12, 2007 3:02 am

You know the hole time I am reading I was holding my breth THis chapter is wonderful but it's very dark. I feel sorry for Tara for loosing both her Daughter and the love of her life. I don't know How this gone work but I hope that willow will came Back to Tara. by the way How many chapters are left?
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Re: Rhyme and Reason

Postby WillowRulez » Wed Sep 12, 2007 4:17 pm

Unfortunately I got spoiled reading the feedback while scrolling up to look for the update so I didnt shock me as much. But of course, completely the opposite of what I expected!
She knew immediately that it was Willow…but something had happened to the red head she loved, something that made the hairs on the back of Tara’s neck stand up as she approached. A few moments later, she realised that she had actually been backing away from her lover as though she could not bear to have her come any closer.

Made my skin crawl.
It was at that point that Tara came to her senses; her eyes opened…Willow wasn’t thinking about making love…she wanted to fuck her, plain and simple.

I dont know how Tara can ever forget what Willow did to her. Even realizing she wasnt really herself wont change that.
“Willow is the Lord of Darkness,” Tara finally spoke in a bland, toneless voice, “as she has been all along.”

Now that you got us into this mess, Alcy... I am curious how you will get us out of it. :smash
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Re: Rhyme and Reason

Postby sacinema » Fri Sep 14, 2007 12:51 am

Sorry for not giving feedback in a long time. Just today I finished reading chapters 19-21. And again I literally bow before your writing skills. Due to my bad memory I also read again parts of chapter 18 because I couldn't remember everything properly. This story is getting even more enthralling. Some thoughts to the last chapters.

Chapter 19
I really loved the alteration between tension and playful banter between Faith and Willow.

It was a person...or rather, it had been a long time ago.

That must be a creepy discovery for Willow. Her first thought "Tara" and than detecting the person isn't even a person anymore.

"Hello me," Willow commented after she finally managed a breath.

Even more creepy. Detecting your picture with dark hair in the hands of a person long dead? Not my idea of a pleasurable moment.

And this sword? More of the creep. Wonderful how you described what happened in a few seconds. And now Willow is on her own.

Chapter 20
I so wouldn't want to have darkness crawling through my veins and my whole body. Poor Willow. There is definitely something quite horrible happening to her. And she is managing everything with a lot of bravery. I would so pee my pants in her place.

The description about Willow remembering how the lid of the coffin closed over herself and the weeping woman was wonderful as well. Sure everything is wonderful but there are some oarts which just manage to get deep inside me.

And with just one sentence you managed to make totally clear even Faith is a vulnerable person. She felt fear for the first time. That must be even more bad for her than for anyone else. And Tara? I can't imagine how she must feel. Ashley gone, Willow gone. How can she feel any hope at all? Maybe her and Willow's love for one another is really able to keep them safe.

It's the tiny things with whom you manage to say a lot with actually not saying it. For instance Ashley and Dawn playing chess. You give us the picture Ashley with a stack of Dawn's playing figures Dawn only has one of Ashley's. That's how we know Ashley is brighter than Dawn. A less skilful writer would have given us the literally words and not a picture to think about.

Wow. What a chapter. Leaves a lot of questions to me. Is Willow truly as evil as she seems? We will see.

Chapter 21
Again. What a chapter. You leave me here totally confused. How can this mess be solved in a good way in just one other chapter? Willow is the Lord of Darkness. Totally gone are all her good sides? I can't believe this. I am tended to believe there is a setup going on.

Brilliant piece of work. All this suspense is so well written. Why went the room pitch black before the sword was able to kill Ashley? There is no proof the lifeless body would be Ash. If she was there will be no way for Tara to forgive. Tara will be lost for Willow. Especially with the attempted rape. I can't imagine which feelings must course through Tara. Is she able to feel anything beyond dumbness? First her lover, the woman she claimed to love so dearly, attacks herself in a brutal way and than her daughter was killed by that said person. A lot of stuff to deal with.

Thanks. I can't wait to read more.
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Re: Rhyme and Reason

Postby cathy north » Sat Sep 15, 2007 6:44 am

I am just started chapter 5 so I don't have anything wise or clever to say except this is so good. I know I'm going to have to catch up with everyone else any feed back will be ancient.

I am really fond of your writing and your character development is sensational. All I can say is bravo over and over....bravo, bravo, bravo.
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