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Moving Day (UD 3/25/06)

Postby eklipse » Tue Oct 11, 2005 8:43 pm

I know, I've still got this other story...um, I mean, fic hanging around somewhere out there. I've been trying to work on an update, been through several actually but they've all been, well, hit and miss. But all those failed attempts gave me an idea...

Title – Moving Day
Author name – eklipse
Rating – PG for now
Disclaimer – All Buffy characters were created by and unfortunately belong to the creators of BTVS, but they are as always an inspiration to us all.
Feedback – Yes please!
Notes – This is AU/Uber, as in no slayer, no hellmouth. There may be a little angst along the way…you’ve been warned.

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Chapter 1

“This really sucks Will, I hope you know that.” An exasperated and sweaty Buffy said as she dropped a box into the back of the U-Haul Willow rented for the day.

“I know it sucks.” Willow replied as she set a box down next to Buffy’s. “But you know I have to.”

“No, you don’t.” Buffy sat on the ledge of the truck bed, folding her arms across her chest. “You’re just being all good-daughtery.”

“Daughtery? Is that even a word Buff?” Willow shook her head at her friend. “But yes, I suppose I am. They did go through all the trouble of buying the place and paying for all the furniture after all.”

“Still…”

Willow turned and pushed herself up to sit next to her friend.

“What am I suppose to do? Say ‘Hey Mom, Dad, thanks for the really extravagant graduation gift but you know, I don’t really feel like moving so maybe you could you know take it back?’ C’mon Buffy.”

“I know. Still, it feels like you’re abandoning us. What are me and Tara gonna do without you Will? C’mon, you don’t have to do this.”

“Yes I do, Buff.” Willow sighed at the mention of Tara’s name. Yes I do.

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That’s the last of it.

Tara swung a duffel bag over her shoulder, flicked the light switch in Willow’s room, Willow’s ex-room, and pulled the door shut. She made her way out of the apartment she had shared with Willow and Buffy for three years and stopped at the front steps of the building to watch the two girls sitting on the truck bed swinging their legs.

Buffy’s face looked the way Tara felt.

When Willow first told them about the condo her parents had bought for her, they were all excited, until they realized that meant Willow was moving out…and across town.

Across town, that’s not that bad. Sunnydale’s not THAT big. It’s not like she’s moving to like Delaware or something. Still…

Tara shook the thought from her head and walked over to her friends, who both smiled as she approached.

“Is this it?” Buffy asked as she took the heavy bag from Tara and tossed it into the truck bed.

“Yeah, this is it.” Tara nodded grimly. This is it.

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It was an accident, a mix-up, a paperwork snafu, and Tara became friends with Willow and Buffy. Someone in the UC Sunnydale Residence Life office read some form wrong, and Willow and Buffy ended up in a triple dorm room instead of the double they had signed up for during freshman orientation. Neither girl was sure how they felt about sharing the room with a total stranger, but they had no idea how close they would become to the shy, unassuming blonde waiting for them in their dorm room. She was sitting on one of the desk chairs, her bags at her feet, a few boxes just outside the door. She didn’t want to just pick a bed and start unpacking without giving them the chance to decide.

After they had settled in a bit Buffy announced she wasn’t quite ready to give the cafeteria food a go just yet. She then called her mom and convinced her to invite them over for dinner, Tara included. It became a ritual: weekly Tuesday night dinners at the Summers household. If one of the girls had a night class, the other two would wait and they would head over to the little house on Revello together. And if it got too late to walk back to campus they would stay the night. After the first few times, Willow and Tara started keeping extra clothes in the guest room just in case.

Whenever Willow and Tara stayed for more than one night, they shared the California queen size bed in the guest room. Joyce refused to let either girl sleep on the floor or the couch and neither Willow nor Tara would agree to Dawn sharing with Buffy just so that one of them could use her bed.

It didn’t take long for the Tuesday dinners/sleepovers to turn into holiday and school break dinners/sleepovers, with Buffy’s mom and sister. Willow’s parents were, more often than not, out of town, and Tara never went home for holidays or school breaks, so the Summers’ family became their family. Joyce even kept a menorah in the window for Willow during Chanukah, though Willow would join in on the Christmas festivities as well.

It was during the first Christmas the girls spent with the Summers family that Willow and Tara’s friendship deepened. Though they got along well and had no trouble finding a topic of conversation, Tara rarely shared anything too personal about herself. If Buffy or Willow brought up stories from their high school days, Tara would laugh along, ask questions, but she never offered her own stories. The only thing she would say about her family was that they weren’t really close. But during that evening of food, fun and laughter, shared with Buffy’s family, her mom’s ‘friend’ Mr. Giles, Willow’s childhood friend Xander and his half-sister Faith, and Dawn’s friend Chloe, Willow couldn’t help but notice that something was off in Tara’s demeanor.

Tara had smiled at all the right times, sang along with all the Christmas carols, and laughed at the gag gifts courtesy of Xander and Faith. But her smile never quite reached her eyes, and there was sadness in her voice and hesitation in her laughter. And Willow didn’t miss the fact that Tara was one of the first to call it a night and head up to bed.

Willow followed soon after, and as she walked into the guest room she was sharing with Tara she found Tara sitting in the papasan, staring out the window and hugging her knees.

“Tara? Are you alright?” Willow had asked as she approached her friend and sat down on the floor by the chair.

Tara gave her a weak smile and nod.

“Really?”

Tara stared out the window a bit longer before looking to Willow and shaking her head.

“Want to talk about it?”

“N-not really.” Tara whispered. “I-is that okay?”

Willow nodded, but made no move to stand when Tara returned to staring out the window.

They sat that way for a little while, until the moonlight glistened off a tear rolling down Tara’s cheek. When Willow stood, Tara thought she had made Willow uncomfortable and expected Willow to leave. Instead, the basket chair creaked and Tara found herself being pulled into Willow’s arms. Tara’s tears quickly turned into sobs muffled by Willow’s shirt.

Tara woke a few hours later to find herself clutching the hem of Willow’s top, her head still resting on Willow’s shoulder. She knew from the movement of Willow’s fingers along her hair and across her shoulder that Willow was awake, and she wondered to herself if Willow had stayed awake the whole time, holding onto her and soothing her as she slept. When Tara leaned back to look at her friend Willow had smiled and ran her thumb across the tearstains on Tara’s cheeks.

Tara rested her head against Willow’s shoulder once more and began speaking. With only the moonlight in the window casting light onto the two friends, Tara told Willow about her family and her childhood. She told Willow about her father’s abusive behavior, her juvenile delinquent brother, her parents divorce. She told Willow about the few years she had lived with her mom, until her mom got sick. She told Willow about missing her high school graduation so she could fly to New York with her mom to try out a new treatment, and putting off her acceptance to UC Sunnydale when her mom decided she wanted to stop the treatments and spend the last few months of her life with her daughter, in the home they had made together.

When she finished talking she looked up at Willow and was taken by the sight before her. In the first rays of the sun, tears streaming down her face, Willow had never looked more beautiful. There was no judgment or pity in her eyes, only acceptance, caring, and affection.

Tara wanted to speak, to thank Willow for listening and for watching over her, but before she could form the words Willow had placed a fingertip to her lips and shook her head. Willow’s hand moved from Tara’s lips to brush a stray strand of hair from Tara’s eyes, which fluttered shut as Willow caressed her cheek. When she opened them again she found herself staring directly into Willow’s eyes.

“Thank you.” Willow had whispered, then she cupped Tara’s face and placed a soft kiss on Tara’s cheek. At Tara’s answering smile, Willow pulled Tara close, holding her as they sat there watching the sun continue to rise.

And that was it. That was the moment that Tara began to fall in love.
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Re: Moving Day

Postby GayNow » Tue Oct 11, 2005 9:06 pm

Quite lovely. I'm looking forward to more. This is such a wonderful beginning. Though, if I may be selfish for a moment, I hope we don't have many more "hits and misses" with your other fic. ;)

Well done!

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Re: Moving Day

Postby tarawhipped » Tue Oct 11, 2005 9:08 pm

Hmmm...a new Uber fic where Willow and Tara are friends who haven't admitted their feelings for each other thus leading to boatloads of angst? I'm hooked!

I love the set up here, and you managed to pack in a lot of background info in a very concise manner. The idea of Faith and Xander as half siblings struck me as really funny, and highly original. The Rosenbergs overcompensating wiht extravagant gifts seems very plausible; I'm just glad it's close by.

I can't wait to see where you take this, though it's nice to hear you're still working on your other fic too. Lovely beginning!

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Re: Moving Day

Postby The Rose24 » Tue Oct 11, 2005 9:39 pm

I am liking this story as well, but like someone else said I am glad you still trying to work on Hits and Misses.
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Re: Moving Day

Postby Guppy » Tue Oct 11, 2005 9:50 pm

:flirt Great start! Wow, Will is so sweet and my heart aches for Tara, just in that little snippet of story. I can' t wait to find out where you take this!
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Re: Moving Day

Postby FineyMcFine » Wed Oct 12, 2005 4:51 am

This is a great beginning and I'm sooooooooooooo looking forward to seeing what happens next. I love the setup, that they were all roommates in a triple room. I take it that Willow's condo is a one-bedroom or else she'd be having Tara and Buffy move in with her, eh? Very touching scene with Willow accepting Tara and holding her and then Tara opening up enough to tell her about her past.

That was some of the best-written exposition that I've read. You filled in the background nicely, concisely, but with enough detail that I didn't feel cheated.

Looking forward to more!
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Re: Moving Day

Postby Graceland » Wed Oct 12, 2005 5:07 am

Ahhh, a very nicely done exposition. What I like about this beginning is that you've given us two parts. In the first, you place us in the now. We know the central conflict or cause of the problem: Willow's moving across town. It's awkward and no one knows what will happen next. There's a sure sense of longing from both girls but neither seems completely lovesick or on the verge of a drinking bender. It's just a question of how things will change.

Then the second part gives excellent exposition. There's no reason for us to have to live through the entire college years because you've summed them up so well. We know about Willow/Buffy an the relationship with the Scoobies. We know the extent of W/T's relationship and T's family background. You give the necessary information without overwhelming the reader with anything we don't need.

Well done. And I don't think anyone has forgotten that other fic...
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Re: Moving Day

Postby watty » Wed Oct 12, 2005 5:18 am

Lovely! Unrequited love for your best friend, awwww. I mean, being in love with your best friend and not sure if she feels the same way, that's not lovely. But the setup and how you've painted the scenario is lovely. The B/W/T friendship and spending holidays at the Summers is lovely. Tara opening up to Willow and Willow comforting Tara is lovely.

I'm not sure how Willow feels about Tara, she's close to T but does she have the same type of feelings as Tara? I'm curious and can't wait to find out.

Great start.
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Re: Moving Day

Postby Kaia » Wed Oct 12, 2005 5:52 am

That was sooo sweet.
And like Graceland said, you've managed to give us all the info we need in a really precise way.
I loved the warmth of W/T's interaction, and it felt so real.
So, not much more to say. Please keep up the excellent work and if you have the time and the inspiration to update your other story, much better...hehe.
Thanks for sharing this story.
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Re: Moving Day

Postby AlysonGoddess » Thu Oct 13, 2005 9:31 pm

Hey great start!!!! Kind a sad.... but thats what makes a story good. Lots of angsty stuff hehe well i really do hope you continue and please update soon!!!

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Re: Moving Day

Postby tarebear » Fri Oct 14, 2005 2:52 am

:bow :bow :bow

amazing start! a start that promises lots of t/w goodness to come but with a pinch of angst to keep us on our toes. :-D

And that was it. That was the moment that Tara began to fall in love.


what an ending to get us hooked. i'm beginning to fall in love with this fic as well! :x

definitely something for me to watch out for!

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Re: Moving Day

Postby Bug23 » Fri Oct 14, 2005 5:46 pm

Great start ... :dance
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Re: Moving Day

Postby RageMore7 » Sat Oct 15, 2005 12:25 pm

wow o wow! there has to be more!!! that's just how it should go!

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Re: Moving Day

Postby WillowPowered » Sat Oct 15, 2005 12:54 pm

Wow, this is really, really good, can't wait for more.

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Moving Day chapter 2

Postby eklipse » Wed Oct 19, 2005 10:55 am

Thanks for all your feedback. Update first, replies later....

Title – Moving Day
Author name – eklipse
Rating – PG for now
Disclaimer – All Buffy characters were created by and unfortunately belong to the creators of BTVS, but they are as always an inspiration to us all.
Feedback – Yes please!
Notes – This is AU/Uber, as in no slayer, no hellmouth. There may be a little angst along the way…you’ve been warned.

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Chapter 2

Tara stared out the window of the rental truck, seeming to watch the storefronts pass as they drove through downtown Sunnydale.

She listened as Buffy continued to give Willow a hard time about moving, but her eyes were focused on Willow’s reflection in the windshield. Willow seemed to shrug off Buffy’s comments as she concentrated on driving.

“And don’t think you’re getting out of dinner with my mom and Giles missy.” Buffy pointed an accusatory finger at Willow.

“You know Buff, he is going to be your stepfather pretty soon. You should probably stop calling him Giles.” Tara giggled at Willow’s teasing. Mr. Giles had been the librarian at their high school, and as much as she and Dawn already saw him as their father, Buffy was still sensitive about the mental image of him and her mom together.

“I’m not about to start calling him daddy, because, well, that’s just weird. And I am NOT going to call him Rupert. What kind of a name is Rupert anyway? I mean, he’s Giles. I love him, and he makes my mom happy, but he’s still Giles.”

In the windshield Tara saw Willow bite her lip and shake her head.

“And no changing the subject you. You’re still not missing dinner. They won’t have it, and neither will we. Right Tara?”

The truck stopped at a light and both Willow and Tara turned to look at Tara. Tara just smiled and nodded her agreement.

“See?”

“Okay, okay.” Willow put her hands up in surrender. “Like I was planning on missing it anyway.”

“Good.” Buffy said, settling back into the seat.

Good. Tara thought as the truck began moving again.

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With the exception of Buffy begging Willow to stop at the Espresso Pump for some much needed caffeinated rejuvenation, the three friends remained silent for the remainder of the ride.

Willow stopped at a gate and spoke to the guard briefly before he waved them through. After a few minutes she pulled into a parking spot in front of a three story brick building similar to the ones on either side of it. It resembled more of a townhouse than an apartment building, and Willow’s parents had bought the third floor one-bedroom unit.

The girls climbed out of the cab and stretched before moving to the truck bed to begin unloading Willow’s belongings. They took a load up the elevator and into Willow’s unit. As Willow moved to inspect the bedroom and master bath she heard Buffy.

“Swanky.”

She also heard Tara reply.

“You say that every time we’ve been here Buffy.”

Willow smiled, glad, not for the first time, that Tara had become comfortable enough with them to take part in the ritual teasing of Buffy. When she came out of the bathroom she found Buffy sprawled out on the king size bed in the middle of the bedroom.

“This bed is like, comfortable times ten Will. You know, I was thinking, maybe we could move in with? This thing is big enough to fit all three of us and then some!”

Willow shook her head at Buffy, and as she did her eye caught a smiling Tara leaning against the dresser.

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Willow was the queen of cross-referencing and babbling. Tara had learned this lesson quickly in the first few months they had lived together. So the day Tara walked in to apartment to find Willow sitting on the couch, eyes buried in a book. The sight of Willow studying was not an unusual one, even though the summer term had just begun, they had just moved into their new apartment and there were still boxes to unpack.
But seeing Willow had just the one textbook in her lap and a highlighter in her hand, Tara was a little concerned.

And when Willow’s only answer to Tara’s question about what she was studying was “Pscyh,” Tara knew something was definitely off.

Willow was tapping the end of her highlighter against the book as she read. Her brow furrowed in concentration, she didn’t notice Tara approaching until she felt the couch shift. She looked up to find Tara sitting next to her.

“What’s up?” She asked.

“You tell me.” Tara said.

“What’s to tell?”

Tara didn’t speak. She merely folded her arms against her chest and raised her eyebrow.

Willow gave an exasperated sigh and dropped her forehead onto the book in front of her. After a minute or so she leaned back against the couch.

“Remember that party Buffy dragged us to last semester?” She began. That was the party where Willow ran into an old classmate of theirs from Sunnydale High that she used to tutor. When she tried to talk to him, his girlfriend had dragged him off in a jealous huff, but not before Willow heard him dismiss her as the geeky girl from high school who he only talked to so she would help him with his homework.

The girl was in Willow’s summer lit class and that day Willow passed her on her way to the lecture hall. As she walked by she overheard the girl laughing as she told her friends what a geek Willow was. She approached Willow after class asking to see Willow’s notes, and sneered when she saw that Willow’s notebook was in fact multi-colored.

Staring at the ceiling, Willow told Tara how she had been ostracized in school for being so smart, with only Xander for a friend until the Summers’ moved to Sunnydale. She told Tara about the older boys who would take her books and play keep away while all the pretty girls cheered them on. She told Tara about never knowing if someone was being friendly because they liked her or because they wanted her to do their homework.

Tara played with the ends of Willow’s hair as Willow finished talking.

“So how’s this working out for you?” She asked Willow, waving her arm in the general direction of Willow’s abandoned book and highlighter.

“It’s fine. I’m still absorbing everything, I guess. But, I don’t know, it just feels weird.” She dropped her arms into her lap and buried her face in her arms, letting out an exasperated sigh. “It’s soooo boring!”

Willow heard Tara laughing as the couch shifted again. She looked up to watch as Tara walked over to the dining table in the corner of the room. Tara picked up the notebook sitting on the table and walked back to the couch, dropping the notebook on top of Willow’s book, then she walked back to the table.

Willow stared at the notebook in curiosity before looking up to see Tara’s back turned to the room as she rummaged through an open box. After a little searching, Tara found what she was looking for. She turned around and leaned on the table. She held up her hand and dangling from her fingers was a bunch of colored pens held together by a pink rubber band.

“C’mon Will, you know you want to.” Tara had dropped her head so she was looking up at Willow through her lashes. Her hair had fallen to cover one side of her face a little, but Willow could still see the teasing half-smile Tara was giving her.

Without a moment’s thought Willow rose and walked over to where Tara was standing. And when her fingers brushed against Tara’s as she took the pens, Willow knew exactly what she wanted at that moment. But it wasn’t the notebook, and for the first time in her life it most definitely wasn’t the different colored pens.
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Re: Moving Day

Postby Kaia » Wed Oct 19, 2005 8:39 pm

Woohoooo!! Update-y goodness!! YAY!
I so love this story, it is so interesting to see the way your portrait your characters and their interactions...
'Me' like, and 'me' prompts you to update and update and update...hehe.
Am I asking too much?
Thanks for the update... :flower

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Re: Moving Day

Postby watty » Thu Oct 20, 2005 5:37 am

The interaction between the three friends is so easy going, can see how close they are. Still wondering how exactly things stand between Willow and Tara.

In the flashback we have a the little sign. You showed us Tara beginning to fall in love with Willow in the last part, and here
And when her fingers brushed against Tara’s as she took the pens, Willow knew exactly what she wanted at that moment. But it wasn’t the notebook, and for the first time in her life it most definitely wasn’t the different colored pens.

Sweet!
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Re: Moving Day

Postby Emms » Thu Oct 20, 2005 6:02 am

This is really, really good! I can't wait for the next chapter :-D

And I agree with watson, that bit is so sweet. :x

Ps... Sorry my feedback isn't very elaborate. I don't have much time this morning, but I wanted to drop you a note anyway, just to let you know how much I'm diggin' this new story. But let us not forget about Run-ins shall we? :eyebrow :-D

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Re: Moving Day

Postby AntigoneUnbound » Thu Oct 20, 2005 7:39 am

Eklipse, I really like this story! It's got a wonderful mixture of sweet and poignant that draws me in. I love the connection b/w the 3 friends; such relationships are always enjoyable to read. You also write well insofar as mechanics are concerned, and that makes it even better.

Thanks for sharing!
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Re: Moving Day

Postby Selena Taiki » Thu Oct 20, 2005 5:38 pm

Just wanted to add my two cents, this is a wonderful story. Very compling. :balloons
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Re: Moving Day

Postby feelin_way_too_groovy » Thu Oct 20, 2005 8:38 pm

THIS FIC ='S LOVELOVELOVE

me likey. please continue. :bounce :bounce :bounce :bounce :bounce
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Re: Moving Day

Postby eirnlove » Thu Oct 20, 2005 11:52 pm

just caught up with this fic, and I'm definitely loving it.

I loved the scene of comfort (first post) it was really romantic.

and I've never seen a fic before that willow and tara are actually friends.

good work, loving it keep up!
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Re: Moving Day

Postby Krokador » Fri Oct 21, 2005 11:09 am

LOVE IT! Hehe, I got myself hooked to another fic. This is bad lol... but no, actually is good, manages to put a smile on my face and some warmth in my heart :P

You have a good hang with writing, it,s all flowing, it's like... I'm watching a show! Keep up the good work!
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Re: Moving Day

Postby WillowPowered » Fri Oct 21, 2005 3:49 pm

Awww love it, both are all with the wanting, just gotta get them to the having stage :bounce

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Re: Moving Day

Postby eklipse » Wed Nov 09, 2005 8:14 pm

Okay, so I know I promised I would reply to feedback much sooner. Bad Jessie…bad. I’ve been very busy with work, interviews, getting sick and entertaining all manner of guests for the past month, but I have kept this fic and all your wonderful feedback in a special place in my heart.

So as promised, replies…

Chapter 1 Feedback!

GayNow – Thanks. Actually my last few tries with the other fic have been more like hit and runs they were so bad. Oh well…

tarawhipped – Ah, someone took the bait. Glad you liked.

I love the set up here, and you managed to pack in a lot of background info in a very concise manner.


I wanted to introduce the characters and establish some relationships as quickly as possible without going into too much dialogue. I actually wasn’t sure if it was too much at once, but the positive feedback from you and others means I was worrying too much!

The idea of Faith and Xander as half siblings struck me as really funny, and highly original.


Yeah, I was particularly tickled by that idea, though I had to stop and think for a minute cuz, you know, there was that whole Faith-used-Xander-for-sex thing on the show.

I wish someone would give me a condo for a gift, wouldn’t that be the best ever?

The Rose24 – Glad you like, and yes I am still trying to work on Hit/Miss aka Run-Ins, but there’s a pretty good chance this fic will be updated first.

Guppy – Thanks, Canon Willow was always very protective of her friends, which was something I wanted to keep. And honestly, my heart ached just writing Tara’s story, but it had to be done.

SallyMcFine – Thanks, I’ve seen other fics where they were all roommates and I liked the idea and decided to see what I could do with it. As is revealed in chapter 2 yes the condo is a one-bedroom and no neither Buffy nor Tara are moving in with her.

Very touching scene with Willow accepting Tara and holding her and then Tara opening up enough to tell her about her past. That was some of the best-written exposition that I've read. You filled in the background nicely, concisely, but with enough detail that I didn't feel cheated.


I’m glad you think so. Usually when I’m thinking of a fic and where I want it to go, I tend to imagine the dialogue more than anything else, but I couldn’t get the picture of that last bit out of my head and wanted to get to it as quickly as possible without “cheating.”

Graceland – Thanks. Good pick up here:

There's a sure sense of longing from both girls but neither seems completely lovesick or on the verge of a drinking bender. It's just a question of how things will change


When I started this story I was undecided on how quickly I wanted things to progress, so I kinda left myself an opening.

As far as “the college years” are concerned, I think we actually will be going back to it more in order to answer the question of how things will change. But I do try not to put anything unnecessary.

Watson – Lovely, I don’t think that word is really used as much as it should be in general, so double thanks.

kaia – I’m glad you liked the interaction and thought it felt real. Some of it is particular memories that stick out in my mind, that I’ve adapted a bit to fit Willow and Tara. I’m not sure what all is happening with that other story, I think it’s run away from me. And you’re welcome.

AlysonGoddess – I know, it’s a little bit sad, I was a little bit sad when I started writing it too. It’ll be a little be happy in a little while.

tarebare – thanks. Yes, of course there will be W/T goodness to come, but I think more tippy-toeing will be in order first. I like that ending too. Keep watching .

Bug23 – thanks!

RageMore7 – Yes, there will be more.

WillowPowered – thanks!



Chapter 2 Feedback!

kaia – Glad you love it and that you think they’re interesting. “Me” will update soon, promise!

Watson – I’m so glad you and everyone like the interaction. I sometimes find myself reading fics where the interactions feel forced or garish, and I’m trying very hard to stay away from that. So far it seems like I’m doing good.

Still wondering how exactly things stand between Willow and Tara.


Aren’t we all? Hehehe…

And
In the flashback we have a the little sign.


Do you believe in signs? Do I? Hmm….

Miss Kittys Ball O Yarn – Thanks, I don’t think you’ll be waiting too long. And as far as your feedback being elaborate/not elaborate, it’s all good. I appreciate any and all fb as it comes (except of course if someone were to be totally inappropriate and rude, but I haven’t got any of those, so I appreciate that too.) I haven’t forgotten Run-ins aka Hit/Miss either, just backburnered it for now to let the ideas stew.

AntigoneUnbound – OMG, Mary can I just say that I love your work? Because I do, so I’m saying it, I love it all! I’m just very very bad at leaving feedback because usually by the time I’m done reading I’m speechless.

That being said, thank you. Poignant, I like that word too, you’ve captured what I was hoping I had captured, if that makes any sense.

You also write well insofar as mechanics are concerned, and that makes it even better.


Thanks, I’m glad for that. I have about 16 years worth of English teachers who would kill me otherwise. Okay, not really, except maybe for this one teacher in 9th grade…but that’s another story.

Selena Taiki – Thanks, I’ll put your two cents in the happy can, because I’m happy you like it.

feelin_way_too_groovy – Thanks, I will continue soon.

eirnlove – Thanks. I’ve seen fics where they started as friends, but much to my dismay, several of the ones I really really really like aren’t finished. Very disappointing, so why not start my own right? Guess that means I have to finish it too.

krokador – Thanks. It’s okay to be hooked. I’m hooked on several myself. (Hmm, maybe that’s why I’m all achy a lot.) Smiles and warmth are good.

it's like... I'm watching a show!


I hadn’t really planned it that way…Interesting.

WillowPowered – Thanks. They’ll get there soon enough.


Whew. I think that’s it! As far as the update is concerned, hopefully I’ll have it posted in the next few days. Work is bad, BUT I just have to do some tweaking to Chapter 3 AND I’ve already started the framework of Chapter 4. Thanks again for reading and leaving feedback!

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Moving Day chapter 3

Postby eklipse » Thu Nov 10, 2005 7:53 pm

Title – Moving Day
Author name – eklipse
Rating – PG for now
Disclaimer – All Buffy characters were created by and unfortunately belong to the creators of BTVS, but they are as always an inspiration to us all.
Feedback – Yes please!
Notes – This is AU/Uber, as in no slayer, no hellmouth. There may be a little angst along the way…you’ve been warned.
Recap – While Tara and Buffy are helping Willow move out, Willow and Tara reminisce along the way.

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Chapter 3

Willow gave a satisfied sigh as she surveyed the living room arrangements. Most of the furniture had been delivered the day before, and everything seemed to be in order. She walked over to the glass top desk next to the front window and picked up the phone. Her line was supposed to have been activated the day before, which was confirmed when Willow heard the dial tone. She dialed Xander’s number and waited for him to pick up.

From where she stood she had a clear view of Tara and Buffy talking. Buffy looked like she was seriously contemplating the contents of the truck bed but Tara didn’t look like she was paying attention.

In fact, Tara was looking straight at Willow. Willow smiled as Tara gave her a wave. She waved back just as Xander answered his cell phone.

“Hey Wills, what’s up?”

“Just wanted to see where you guys were, and let you know we’re at the condo.” Willow spoke as she continued to watch Buffy and Tara talking. Xander and Faith had helped to load Willow’s truck before driving over to pick up Willow’s dining set from their Uncle Rory’s house. Xander had designed it and he and Faith had built it themselves as a housewarming gift.

“We’re on our way. Faith wanted to stop and get food, but we should be there in a little while.”

In the background Willow could hear Faith swat Xander and yell into the receiver.

“Don’t listen to him Red. He’s the punk that kept pointing out all the pizza joints.”

“That’s fine. We stopped for coffee, but I’m sure Buffy will be grumbling about food sometime soon anyway. I don’t know where she puts it.”

Willow told them the guard at the gate was expecting them, and then hung up the phone. As she did she saw Buffy and Tara pick up a few bags and make their way back towards the building. Satisfied that the move was progressing more or less as planned, she went in search of her bag and measuring tape, wanting to make sure one more time that the table Xander was bringing would fit in the empty space between the loveseat and kitchen pass through.

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Tara’s eyes drifted up the brick building and to the third floor window as she half-listened to Buffy debate with herself which of Willow’s belongings they should bring up first. Willow had yet to put up curtains, so Tara could see Willow standing in the window, phone to her ear.

She caught Willow’s eye and gave the redhead a wave before returning her attention to Buffy.

“Um, sorry, w-what?”

Buffy looked up and shook her head when she saw where Tara had been staring.

“What should we bring up now?” Buffy asked, choosing to keep her thoughts to herself.

“Oh.” Tara scanned the writing on the boxes before replying. “Computer and gadgety stuff last. Otherwise she’ll want to start hooking it all up and forget about the rest of it.”

“Right, good idea. Then we’ll be stuck bringing all this stuff up by ourselves.” Buffy nodded to emphasize her agreement while picking a few bags to carry up.

As they made their way back towards the building Tara gave a last glance at the window, but Willow was no longer in sight.

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It wasn’t the best of situations to be in, but Tara wasn’t a stranger to being in love with someone who was unattainable. No, that would have described a major part of her high school life. But none of the girls she had ever liked back then were people she would consider friends, or acquaintances even. She had never been as close to anyone as she had become to Willow, so that part, being in love with her best friend, that was new.

And all Tara had to do was look at the picture on Willow’s desk to remind herself exactly how unattainable her best friend was. Sitting on the hutch was a picture of Willow at her high school graduation, posing with Buffy, Xander, Faith, and Oz.

Oz. Willow’s first and only boyfriend. Tara’s heart ached for the Willow in that picture. She knew that Willow and Oz had split up before they started college. The break-up had been a bad one, and Willow had been devastated.

Tara had often wondered why Willow kept that picture out, when it should have brought such unpleasant memories.

Buffy caught Tara gazing at the picture once, and Tara couldn’t hide her curiosity from Buffy, so she asked about it and Buffy explained.

Willow’s parents hadn’t been planning to attend the ceremony, and had said as much to their daughter on the phone just a few days before. So they had all been surprised when they marched to their seats and saw Ira and Sheila Rosenberg sitting in the first row of parents, next to Buffy’s mom, Dawn, and Giles.

After the ceremony, Sheila had surprised Willow even more. She pulled out a camera and insisted they all pose for picture after picture. Then she put the camera away, pulled her daughter into a hug, and gave Willow her blessing to attend whatever university she wanted.

“That was a good day.” Buffy had said.

So when the picture didn’t make a reappearance on their mantle once the girls had moved into their new apartment, Tara assumed that Willow decided to keep the picture in her bedroom.

It wasn’t until a few months later that Tara found out she was partially right. She was in Willow’s room looking for a book Willow had borrowed and saw the frame sitting on Willow’s nightstand. But when she moved closer to look, Tara saw that the picture was different.

She picked the frame up and found herself looking at a photo of Willow leaning against her as they sat on the back steps of the Summers’ house. Buffy and Dawn were in the picture too, but they were further off to the side and slightly out of focus. They were all looking up at something off camera.

Mrs. Summers had taken that picture on the night of a lunar eclipse. Tara remembered it with a melancholy smile. She had frozen when Willow sat in front of her. It wasn’t as though they hadn’t touched or sat next to each other in the affectionate way that friends often do. But this was different. Willow had insisted on sitting on the next step down, between Tara’s knees. When Willow leaned back to point out the constellations, Tara could’ve sworn she would explode from the feel of Willow’s body against hers. And Tara repeatedly considered holding her breath so she wouldn’t have to inhale the scent that was distinctly Willow with a hint of strawberry.

Eventually she had found a way to distract herself, or more accurately, Willow had distracted her. After Willow had gone through a few constellations, Tara had sheepishly admitted she had never been able to see the regular ones, so she had made up her own, and Willow had insisted that Tara teach them to her.

As the night wore on, Tara managed to relax and just enjoy Willow’s closeness while she could.

That was a good night.

Seeing the picture of that night on Willow’s nightstand, Tara knew that Willow had thought so too. And though Tara’s head insisted that all evidence pointed to Willow being straight, well…that picture gave Tara’s heart a glimmer of hope.

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Well that’s all she wrote, hope you enjoyed. Chapter 4 is in the works….
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Re: Moving Day

Postby Kaia » Thu Nov 10, 2005 7:57 pm

I'm first! I'm first!!
Hehehe...
What can I say? I love your story. You have me at the edge of my seat, not so patiently waiting for updates.
Keep up the good work, this is awesome.
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Re: Moving Day

Postby Graceland » Thu Nov 10, 2005 8:44 pm

Ooo. Some hope for the girls. It's obvious that Tara's into Willow (in love to be specific) and that Buffy knows that. Too bad she doesn't do any matchmaking or be helpful. What's the relationship of all the friends? Xander and Faith arriving together is unusal. Relationship there or just riding after loading up? Keep it coming please.
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Re: Moving Day

Postby AntigoneUnbound » Thu Nov 10, 2005 10:31 pm

That was a good night... And this was a good read.

You're doing a nice job of taking us from one perspective to the other, and giving each of them a sufficiently distinctive voice so that we have a different feel to each section. The descriptions of Willow plunking down b/w Tara's legs (and wouldn't we all like to do that, really?) and Tara's reaction were great to read. And I like that Tara's not so debilitatingly insecure that she can't recognize that the placement of that picture might mean something, even if she's not exactly sure what.

So glad to read this update! And thank you, by the way, for your kind words. I'm glad you enjoy it!

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Re: Moving Day

Postby spells42 » Fri Nov 11, 2005 12:13 am

Hi Eklipse
Just wanted to let you know I'm liking this fic a lot.

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