Short Poem:The Dark Side

[TheWhiz]

I have just started to write fiction and poetry but this is the first time I've felt brave enough to post anything!

I wrote this poem a few weeks ago when feeling depressed. was just an off day, not my usual state of mind! Thought it could show some of the emotions Willow has been going through.



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Dancing in shadows,afraid to embrace the light

Thinking in clouds, afraid of this height

Swimming in fear, afraid the world might bite

Sitting in silence, afraid to stand up and fight

Writing this down, afraid that I'm right.



Living in doubt, afraid of my plight

Shouting in darkness, afraid its swallowing me tight

Walking in confusion, afraid theres nothing in sight

Staring into dullness, afraid it will never be bright

Writing this down, afraid that I'm right.

"I am a whiz...If ever a whiz there was"

[The Next Tara Maclay]

Ooh Good poem..I really liked it.

[Enigmatic]

That was brilliant...very good...

I know how it's like to be down, and when I am I also write poetry...it's a great way to get those sad feelings out...

I'm glad you posted it...

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[Scout]

Wow, powerful. Really captures the mood.

Edited by: Scout at: 4/3/02 5:33:50 pm

[LeatherQueen]

Wow... that's very heavy. But I really, really like it. So very emotional.

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"Honey, I'm the original one-eyed chicklet in the kingdom of the blind." - Glory

[Drakkenfyre]

Excellent poem!!! I believe we all know what it is like on the dark side. Some of us visit there more than we should. I should know, I think I have my own PO Box there. Please continue with more poetry.

"We few, we happy few."
"We band of buggered."

[WiccanBex]

that's really good.. it really speaks to me.



probably because i spend a lot of time feeling really depressed... i'm another one who writes best when i'm feeling down. more emotion, i guess.

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[mollyig]

Its probably the celt in me, but I really love angst!



You've captured the darkness of mood perfectly. Well done.



Hope to see more of your work!

I could paint you in the dark, 'cause I've studied you with hunger as a work of art - Collecting you (Indigo Girls)

[TheWhiz]

Hey, I just wanted to thank you all for your great comments on such a depressing piece!



I've only just started to write stuff down when depressed, but do find it provides great release. Plus, i have more inspiration!!



I shall be definately posting more, am in process of writing W/T fiction so keep your eyes peeled!



*Happy from all comments!*

"I am a whiz...If ever a whiz there was"

[Wiccagrrl313]

TheWhiz,

Great poem. Looking forward to your story.

Tracy

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VILLOV

I troost yuu. Hurty flurty schnipp schnipp!

[thehighpriestess]

Wicked! I so know where you're coming from. Been there far too many times myself - written the poem book too! Keep it up

[Killin Joke]

Heavy rendering of your feelings in the form of this poem, Whizzie... It actually reminded me of one of my own first poems, also written when I was in the dark zone. Since it's vague enough, I think I can post it here, sharing universal emotions and all. Kinda struck me this is how Will must feel to some extent...



"Scared to death of darkness,

afraid to face the light

I can't see the difference

between what's wrong or right



Desolated deserts

in which my feelings dwell

The nights are cold as ice

The days as hot as hell



Why did you desert me ?

Can't do this on my own !

Cries are heard in silence.

I find myself... alone"