Poetry by TheWhiz

[thehighpriestess]

You know I love your poems babe and this one has typical style! Just a quick bump here too!

WILLOW: Where would you go? If you felt lost
and alone? Where would you go?

TARA: To you.

[Drakkenfyre]

Well, perhaps I should talk with you more often!! If it means I am going to get such a wonderful poem like that. That was beautiful. Wonderful mix of emotions. Bravo. Now, might we have some more. Please!! (no pressure)

"In my world there are people in chains and we ride them like ponies."

[TheWhiz]

I just wanted to thank everyone for their comments, sorry I haven't done so before but have just finished exams and returned from convention!!



ninjitsugrrl- I'm glad you thought the poem was powerful. I wasn't sure people would like it

mollyig- Thank you! Glad you liked the mix of emotions and could see what I was trying to get across.

thehighpriestess- Cheers babe! What is my typical style??

Drakkenfyre- Thanks sweetie! Glad you liked it Talking to you made me think I should just go for it and post it!! If you ask for more, in time you shall recieve it!!!



Thanks again!!

"I am a whiz...If ever a whiz there was"

[Lucy Moore]

Reading through,I thought *Rainbow* was good,and then came *Alone*,and it struck me that the emotions expressed in both could be born from the same Place...Maybe that's just me,or the weird mood I'm in tonight...



Ah,well...Post some more - There's not enough Poetry on the board !!

fiat justitia,ruat caelum

Edited by: Lucy Moore at: 6/11/02 2:25:30 pm

[TheWhiz]

Hi Lucy!

Thanks for reading my poems, it means a lot I've never really thought of 'Rainbow'/'Alone' and the emotions behind them being born from the same love. I just write what ever happens to come into my mind! You could be right though! Its nice to see how different people interpret them.



I shall be posting more so keep an eye out

"I am a whiz...If ever a whiz there was"

[TheWhiz]

Right, I decided it was about time I posted something new, now I don't have the excuse of exams



I had a choice between posting a depessing poem or a happy poem, so I went with the happy!!

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I Believe



However long the winding road I believe it will bring me to you,

However dim the night sky stars I believe I can see you shine,

However strong the wind blows I believe we will stand unruffled,

However lonely I may be I believe you will comfort me.



However dark the world appears I believe you will bring light into my life,

However unattractive I feel I believe you see me as beautiful,

However quiet this place I believe you will embrace me with music,

However cold I may feel I believe your love will keep me warm.



However stressed I am I believe you will be my calming influence,

However threatened I feel I believe you will protect me from harm,

However confused my mind I believe you can understand me,

However shy I appear I believe you will coax me out of my shell.



However complicated things seem I believe you will make them simple,

However lost I appear I believe you will find and guide me safely,

However deep the ocean I believe you will keep me afloat,

However prejudiced the world I believe we will always be proud of the love we have.



Whatever path my life takes I believe I will be there with you and you will be here with me. Forever.

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Hope you like it! Any comments are much appreciated.

"I am a whiz...If ever a whiz there was"

[ninjitsugrrl]

This poem is very hopeful and sweet. I liked it a lot.

"What you held in your hand,/what you counted and carefully saved,/all this must go so you know/how desolate the landscape can be
between the regions of kindness.." - Naomi Shihab Nye


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[mollyig]

I love the absolute conviction inherent in this. Nice work!

Adding up the total of a love that's true, multiply life by the power of two
Indigo Girls

[TheWhiz]

Thanks ninjitsugrrl and mollyig for your comments, it means alot that you liked the poem ,especially as I love the poetry both of you post.

"I am a whiz...If ever a whiz there was"

[Lucy Moore]

Ah,Belief...The absolute knowing that something is true...I'm glad that our girls realise this...



Lovingly expressed...Well done.

fiat justitia,ruat caelum

[TheWhiz]

Lucy, once again your kind comments are much appreciated. Thank you for posting

"I am a whiz...If ever a whiz there was"

[AmberBensonRockzMyWorld]

hmmmmm, You ROCK! You've really got a talent in the poetry area. Can't wait to read the next poem you post.

Much Love,

Lisa

This is our Last Embrace, Must I dream and Always see your face.~ Jeff Buckley "Last goodbye"

[Drakkenfyre]

Hello love, you already have a good idea about how I feel about this poem. I love it!! Thank you for posting it and for giving me the sneak peek

"In my world there are people in chains and we ride them like ponies."

[TheWhiz]

More feedback!!

AmberBensonRockzMyWorld- Thank you so much for your kind words Keep your eyes peeled for a new poem.

Drakkenfyre- Hi Laura! Thanks for posting I'm glad you like the poem. As for the sneak peak- you were welcome, I appreciate your feedback.

"I am a whiz...If ever a whiz there was"

[thehighpriestess]

Love the poem....so you're giving Laura the previews now are you??? I'd be offended if I didn't love you two so much!

WILLOW: Where would you go? If you felt lost
and alone? Where would you go?

TARA: To you.

[Loco2]

yipee! you posted! it's really good, i'm so glad you decided to post (finally) ...he he.



it's great, captures the moments perfectly! well done!



squinty! heh heh, look, i found one:

"Dr. Becker, have you seen the skeleton?" "What do you think I am, a skeleton thief? You want to search me?!"
"Oh, bugger off, you brolly!" - Anya to Giles on his use of the english language
"We'll all be a lot happier without the constant whining....Mom, Buffy, Tara, Waah" - DMW to Dawn

[TheWhiz]

Hey



Thanks for the feedback!! I'm so glad you liked it! Sorry for taking so long to post!!



2!!!



Edited to say: Yay!!! I got squinty emoticon to work!!!

"I am a whiz...If ever a whiz there was"

Edited by: TheWhiz at: 7/27/02 6:22:12 am

[ninjitsugrrl]

What a great poem. It conveyed a lot of energy and emotion. Good job!

"What you held in your hand,/what you counted and carefully saved,/all this must go so you know/how desolate the landscape can be
between the regions of kindness.." - Naomi Shihab Nye


My Homepage

[TheWhiz]

Thanks for the feedback ninjitsugrrl, it means alot

"I am a whiz...If ever a whiz there was"

[TheWhiz]

Thanks for the feedback ninjitsugrrl, it means alot



Edited to say:sorry about the double post!!!

"I am a whiz...If ever a whiz there was"

Edited by: TheWhiz at: 7/27/02 3:29:38 pm

[foreverpiper]

I think that wuz great! I think it really flows nicely!

It's better to be pissed off than to be pissed on. - My mantra on a bad day.


And never let it be said that I left a Tara craving unsatisfied. - Willow in Wilderness

[mollyig]

It’s over, over and the world and my pain remains



I thought that was a really powerful line!

Adding up the total of a love that's true, multiply life by the power of two
Indigo Girls

[TheWhiz]

foreverpiper: Thanks for stopping by and leaving such kind comments!! Its much appreciated!!



mollyig: Thank you! It means alot that you stop by and leave comments!

"I am a whiz...If ever a whiz there was"

[thehighpriestess]

Hey girl,



You know I love this one



The way you captured the darkess and desperation was amazing, the totally consuming pain.



Go you, you rule girl

WILLOW: Where would you go? If you felt lost
and alone? Where would you go?

TARA: To you.

[TheWhiz]

P- Thanks for your kind words. About time!! Thought you had forgotten my thread was here!! hehe!!



I will try to have a new poem up over the next few days. Thanks for reading

"I am a whiz...If ever a whiz there was"

[TheWhiz]

Here is a new poem, well I say new but I wrote it a while ago!! I currently have no inspiration



Anyway hope you like!

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Candle



Like a candle I stood tall,

Yet slowly I withered,

Melting away until there was nothing left but an empty puddle,

That means nothing and has no purpose.



I used to burn bright,

Then I began to flicker uncertainly,

Before I was extinguished for good,

Leaving nothing but darkness and silence.



Like a candle there is no way back,

No return to my former glory,

I can never be whole or complete again,

The way I was with you.

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Any comments much appreciated!!

"I am a whiz...If ever a whiz there was"

[Loco2]

ooh, very cool, poem. i like the candle reference - it gives a real sense of what it's like.



thanks for the poem



i muchly like!



steph

"I'm not gay - I'm just Trevor's bitch." - some drunken guy about his sexuality
"Oh, bugger off, you BROLLY!" - Anya to Giles on his use of the english language
"We'll all be a lot happier without the constant whining....Mom, Buffy, Tara, Waah" - DMW to Dawn

[foreverpiper]

Oooh! That was deep, and really, really good! I really liked it!

It's better to be pissed off than to be pissed on. - My mantra on a bad day.


And never let it be said that I left a Tara craving unsatisfied. - Willow in Wilderness

[ninjitsugrrl]

Very sad but beautiful none the less. Well done!

"What you held in your hand,/what you counted and carefully saved,/all this must go so you know/how desolate the landscape can be
between the regions of kindness.." - Naomi Shihab Nye


My Homepage

[mollyig]

I can never be whole or complete again



Great imagery to convey the loss.

Adding up the total of a love that's true, multiply life by the power of two
Indigo Girls