After spending a couple of days wandering round this new board I felt it was high time I actually started a story thread.
I origionally started this story for NaNoWriMo last year. However whilst I managed the fifty thousand words, I didn't manage to finish the story. The problem was I had origionally intended for it to be a sequel to the story The Cathedral and the Bazaar. Unfortunately as this story progressed it began contradicting that story. I tried to keep it in line with the past story, but that lead to it becoming very complicated and eventually collapsing.
Yesterday I was wondering if I could save this story, and hit upon the obvious answer. To make it a stand alone story, and not a sequel.
Anyway that's enough of the history of the story. The story is about Willow and Tara trying to find out who the powers that be are.
It takes place over a period of a month and involves two storylines which are set in two different realities.
In the first the PTB decide the key is too dangerous and they need to get rid of it. Willow, Tara and Faith race to convince them not too. Unfortunately they fail.
The other one takes place over the same month as the first but in a reality in which Dawn never existed. However everyone is plagued by memories of the other reality, and try to find out where the memories have come from.
And in order to keep things really simple it starts at the end,
Prologue
“We're almost there.” Willow's legs burned as she sprinted towards towards the meeting spot, and she guessed that Tara was feeling the same. Coming up to the top of a hill She could just make out the silhoute of a building in the distance. Pausing a moment she said, “We're here.”
“Willow.” Tara took Willow's hand and pointed to their right, where the sun was just starting to rise up above the horizon.
“Oh no. Come on we can still make it.” Still holding hands they ran towards the building. Flinging the door open she looked round, “Where's the portal?”
“We're too late.”
Willow looked at the grandfather clocked which was standing at the far end of the room, reading one minute past nine.
“One minute? One stupid minute. I can't believe we've gone through all of this just to fail.”
“Dawn,” Tara whispered. They both stopped as the ground started shaking. The wall at the far end of the building disappeared. It didn't collapse or break, it just vanished.
“Oh great, and now the worlds ending.”
“I don't think it's ending,” Tara said, “Just changing.”
“So what are we going to do?”
Tara put her arms round Willow and pulled her close as the room collapsed around them, “Willow, remember Pandora's Box.”
I'd welcome any thoughts on my idea or comments on the prologue
Yay justin!! Thank you for sharing this! I so love beta work! I can immediately see the drawbacks of working in this medium though. How can I go about pointing out things like spelling errors, duplicate words, punctuation problems, things like that. I think it will just take some creativity on the part of Kittens. As far as your post goes, I just see a few spellings here and there and would suggest a quick run of Spell Check.
