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Developing: my first fict

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Developing: my first fict

Postby cammy » Sat Feb 02, 2008 6:32 pm

Prolog



" My name is Sympha Belneldes I was once a powerful witch who fought the forces of darkness I guess I should explain who I am and why all this is so important it started in the late 1400s when a Romanian prince who the world knows as Dracula died and was taken over by a demon and allowed to live forever by the drinking of blood of the living and becoming a monster unlike any ever seen. I was a witch who's family was devastated by the princes hunger for destruction. I went to Transylvania and to his castle to destroy him but I failed and was put into stone. The years went past when a hunter rescued me from my stone prison. We defeated Dracula and married forming a family that made its way to the new world but from there things went from the continuing of magic and fighting the darkness to that of slavery of the women of the family held by a lie of saying that the women of my family were demons and it came that I have in come in search for a desendent who's power can stop a darkness never seen before."

year 2008 NY

" Thats the fifth vampire nest we cleared out this week alone" muttered Faith pulling out a battleaxe out of the hard stone floor where once a vampire layed.

" Well u wanted to have fun and I guess this is fun" Willow joked

Faiths phone rings and she answers it "yes Angel shes with me you want us back now oh comeon I just got some free time and just got ol red out of her usual fun depressing nature for once ok ok we will catch a plane to LA see u later." "well red we gotta go Angel and Buffy are calling a super team meeting everyones back in action"

to continue in Chapter 1 The Meeting of Power
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Re: my first fict

Postby Willowtree252 » Sat Feb 02, 2008 6:34 pm

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"well u wanted to have fun and i guess this is fun" willow joked

faiths phone rings and she answers it "yes angel shes with me you want us back oh come on i just got some free time and just got ol red out of her usual fun depressing nature for once ok ok we will catch a plane to LA see u later." "well red we gotta go angel and Buffy are calling a super team meeting everyones back in action"


Oh Kat I am so proud you are writing a story I am going to board this train and I am along for the ride my dear friend I love the start more please.
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Re: my first fict

Postby littlewicca » Sat Feb 02, 2008 6:40 pm

hey it seems cool start, please write more, and soon, I want to see why buffy and angel need the super witch and faith for.

I love this quote, I wish to know more about sympha belneldes please soon? :pray

We formed a family that came to the new world but things went from the contining of magic and fighting the darkness to slavery of the women of the family held by the lie of saying that the women of the family were demons and it came that i have in search for a disindent whos power can stop a darkness never seen before
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Re: my first fict

Postby Hemiola » Sun Feb 03, 2008 8:22 am

By all means keep up with your writing, but, dear Cammy, you must work on your spelling and grammar.

"phoniex"--I assume you mean "phoenix"?

"disindent"--I assume you mean "descendant"?

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Re: my first fict

Postby littlewicca » Sun Feb 03, 2008 3:09 pm

that is why it was on beta :) it means she needed help but now she does so. right kitty? :kitty
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Re: Developing: my first fict

Postby DaddyCatALSO » Mon Feb 04, 2008 1:23 pm

I think I know where this is going and it sounds extremely interesting.
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Re: Developing: my first fict

Postby cammy » Mon Feb 04, 2008 4:58 pm

if anyone wants to read it ive put it on the boared
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