by EasierSaid » Tue Sep 21, 2010 4:43 pm
Yay for an update! And when I was asleep, again! That was one of the nicest 'good morning' surprises I've had in a while. You sneaky such-and-such. And three years... it can't have been that long since your last update. Nope, don't believe it. You didn't miss a beat, or lose a step; it was as smooth as a teeny tiny baby's derriere.
I loved the 'previously' intro. Was a nice reminder of the gut punch Willow endured, and why Tara so frantically needed to speak with her. Perfectly brief reminder of what was going on. I also really, really super a lot loved their talk. It was so tender and intimate. Even though it was tense, and awkward, it reads so beautifully. (I really like the line about brothers not marrying their sisters and Tara's no they don't response. I could hear Tara's sigh when she responded. Brilliant.) I felt like a fly on the wall and I swear I held my breath so I didn't miss a word. You did a really excellent job of capturing the cadence of their conversation. I felt like I could hear the pauses and hesitation without too many of them written in, if that makes sense. You also did a great job of describing their physical contact. I felt like I could see exactly how Tara was touching Willow to comfort her. It was sweet and reassuring, and I loved every caress.
I think it's a nice surprise that Willow is so trusting. She could have easily gone with the self-doubt, but your Willow trusts in Tara so implicitly. It's really lovely. And, as always, the language you use is so lush and romantic. You do such a fantastic job of pulling me into the time period and the first person. (I continue to be in awe of that, by the way. First person is HARD.) Just a wonderful job, through and through.
Sigh. I love this story. Just heart it to death, so I'm so glad to have an update to sink my daydreaming brain into. Thank you so much. xoxo
p.s. I'm relieved to read you don't have a husband.