A Poem By My Kid..

[EffieBlue]

this was written by my 13 yr old



Don't leave me

don't stay

don't obsess me

don't go away

because I hate you

because I love you



My heart wasn't supposed to melt

I was meant to stay safe

I didn't want to lose control

I didn't want to stay sane



All that life is

All that life was

is changed now



I wasn't supposed to feel

but then you came

you cursed me

you saved me from myself



I didn't want to fall in love

I didn't want to hate

I wanted to stay out of harms way

to stay away from heart-break



My past life

my love was wrong

I loved...

the one I loved, didn't



To keep sane

to stay mad

that was what I wanted



I know what I'm doing

but I don't understand.



Why do I feel now?

Why did I let down that wall?

My emotions will kill my soul

They nearly did before.



But You,

You care

I see that

but I can't believe



I never could

I still can't

trust me i should know



All that life is

All that it was meant to be

has changed now.



And now I see

how you want me to be

you want me...

to be me.



But I can't,

don't you see?

I destroyed me

when I loved and lost

i am dying now

because of that

But then again.

I always was.



The moment we are born

we begin to die.

remember, my life says

remember that...



So what does it matter?

why do I bother?

To love,

to hate,

I tell myself that

but I can't help it

because of you.



Don't leave me,

don't stay.

Don't love me

don't hate me.



I don't know what to do.



I can't control it

it's like you do



All that I am

All that I was

All that I will be

is different now



save me,

kill me,

whatever you wish..



just leave me,

just stay.

Save me,

kill me,

just don't go away

just don't love me.

Just don't hate me.



By the Effieling

Edited by: EffieBlue at: 12/6/03 11:18 am

[intricate mirage]

*jaw drops* -stands up to give a huge round of applause- That was bloody awesome! Superb! Bravo!

Cassie



My whole life I've only loved one person, that person was you.

[SJ]

Excellent poem

[TemperedCynic]

Effieling, you have a remarkable talent for poetry. You expressed raw emotion with words of uncommon beauty. Each couplet defines an emotion - rage, indifference, hate, love, crushing despair, and mindful expectaions - with an almost world-weariness view of it all. If this is autobiographical, it is my fervent hope that you have moved beyond this brutal disillusionment to a happier place. Oh, and welcome to the Kitten Board!



This? By a 13-year-old? Wow, chip off the ol' Effie, I say!

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More than any other time in history, mankind faces a crossroads. One path leads to despair and utter hopelessness. The other, to total extinction. Let us pray we have the wisdom to choose correctly. Woody Allen (1935 - )

[StrangeQuark]

This is a very powerful statement. Dissolution, conflict, contradiction, the duality of existence. Hope and disappointment. The structure and words of this work are very compelling, yet remain simple and clear, easy to identify with. Isn't that the definition of a good poem?



Good stuff, Effieling. Good stuff indeed.



-SQ

[the effieling]

WOW..never expected so many replies..i also expressively told my mother not to post it..

i write poetry at weird times..like this one was written at 3:00 in the morning on a Saturday..and i only have 3.this ones my middle one...

as you may have noticed i like the dots at the and of my semi colons

and TemperedCynic:

it IS part autobiographical-

'The moment we are born

we begin to die.

remember, my life says

remember that...'

thats the only part though..



thank-you for the replies-though i doubt i'm like my mother(effieblue).for one thing,i usually use the colour blue!

my mom says with the last two poems i have written,i have branched out a bit from my fiction and first poem,which were expressively final fantasy...hope to see you all again!



ThE EffIeLiNg!

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Kittyxx

[Stroke of Luck]

Hey Effieling



Great work...and ur just 13? WOW u write really well and it was so emotional....i see u have a hand for poems



Keep on going!



CU

SoL/Natti

This is a duet, Amber! You need to sing!"- Tony

[kitten of rain]

"Wow" is all I can think of right now. Amazing.

and you'll never be the same