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Chock Full O' Words

Postby tkheaven » Tue Aug 26, 2003 7:00 pm

Well, I guess it's my time to shine. I rarely start new threads, especially one I'll end up getting feedback for. If you so chose not to leave any it's ok, but it would be nice. I've written quite a few things... most in lyrical form, few in poetry. Unfortunately I've lost many. Some (to me) will be crappy, some will shine. So I'll start off with something due to much distress...



call it Swimming, or Going for a Swim, or Untitled..either way the words are there:





I don't know what to think

much less say

the whirlpools of emotion meshing

and missing each other

by sharp turns

that stings and cuts

at times

but awaken the senses

like a splash of cold water

after an hour's siesta

to only stay shocked

and numbed

arms wrapped hoping to move

not with the motion that rips

and pulls unevenly

in your mind

the headache that builds

from the confusion

wishing it was Jack who nauseated

and contorted the moment in which

you though for a split second

was so precious

and in fact it is

the moment sharp turns

pull and rip your sight away....

it fades....

it's precious and you still it

as a reminder

and tuck it away from it all

can't move, won't move

moving...floating, cutting through the waters

over and over, going places but knowing

the familiarity of this place

twirling and spinning

until you reach its rim

spilling yourself over

can you swim?.....



slowing, stopping, vision clearing

stomach trying to catch up...

the pool still whirling

its contents meshing and missing...

missing..missing for just a speck

because clearing is more nauseating

than the mesh

and you dive back in

grabbing Jack with you

just to make it that much more interesting

in the whirlpool where nothing makes sense

much like this, with words spewing

and nowhere and everywhere here

not knowing what to say

much less think



---------------------------------



ok, that's my wordy mess for the day. hope it didn't leave your brain all confuzzled...



Tk's new and improved "GrrArgg"...Crazy? Crazy?? I do not talk to myself...it's called thinking aloud...


Tara ate her, devoured her from beneath. -The Edge of Silence giving new meaning to season seven's catch phrase.

Kill the snake of doubt in your soul, crush the worms of fear in your heart, and mountains will move out of your way. -Kate Seredy

Edited by: tkheaven  at: 12/6/03 5:44 am
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Re: Chock Full O' Words

Postby SJ » Wed Aug 27, 2003 12:43 am

Great writing :clap



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Re: Chock Full O' Words

Postby tkheaven » Wed Aug 27, 2003 2:18 pm

thanx SJ, I read it over after writing it, it left a bewildered look on my face..lol..glad you enjoyed..more soon

Tk's new and improved "GrrArgg"...Crazy? Crazy?? I do not talk to myself...it's called thinking aloud...


Tara ate her, devoured her from beneath. -The Edge of Silence giving new meaning to season seven's catch phrase.

The things that are important-such as courage, integrity, loyalty, luck, and determination-those things are not distributed on your chromosomes. -Rhonda Cornum

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well, well, well

Postby Drakkenfyre » Thu Aug 28, 2003 9:03 pm

The Lady Dragon lands in your thread and looks around. My dear, I am quite impressed. You actually did it, you posted your thoughts! *the dragon kisses you on the cheek* I am so proud! Well done, my dear, well done. Please do tell this dragon that you plan on posting more? *the dragon raises an eyebrow at you* Yes?



The Lady Dragon

Neither a lofty degree of intelligence nor imagination nor both together go to the making of genius. Love, love, love, that is the soul of genius. -- Wolfgang Amadeus Mozart

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Re: well, well, well

Postby tkheaven » Thu Aug 28, 2003 9:36 pm

Thank you, m'lady *bows*...yes, I do plan on posting more.. Trying to figure out whether to post something new or something old..

Tk's new and improved "GrrArgg"...Crazy? Crazy?? I do not talk to myself...it's called thinking aloud...


Tara ate her, devoured her from beneath. -The Edge of Silence giving new meaning to season seven's catch phrase.

Dreams are...illustrations from the book your soul is writing about you. -Marsha Norman

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Re: well, well, well

Postby bulldog tidnab » Fri Aug 29, 2003 11:16 am

hmmm... well my dear, you already knew i liked this. incredibly pleased that you decided to post something. you do have quite an enthralling way with words. enjoy this bit in particular:

Quote:
in the whirlpool where nothing makes sense

much like this, with words spewing

and nowhere and everywhere here

not knowing what to say

much less think




i do have one teeny suggestion for you.... a bit of beta work perhaps? noticed a couple of typos and such.

so so so... more? soon? yes?



*smooch*

"There is always some madness in love. But there is also always some reason in madness." -Friedrich Nietzsche

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Re: well, well, well

Postby tkheaven » Fri Aug 29, 2003 12:00 pm

*rubs da bulldog's tummy* thanks andi...it was pretty much how I was feeling at the time it was written. I didn't know what the hell I was thinking, everything was all a mess in my head...in regards to the typos, ya..it's the kybd I tell ya...*chuckle*

*tk gets down on one knee and looks up at andi with a grin* Will you be my beta? heh, I'm better at math than I am spelling. Maybe I should take up computer science *pauses* What Am I Nuts?? Perhaps I am.. oh well..



I think the next one with be the infamous dream poem....*shrug*

Tk's new and improved "GrrArgg"...Crazy? Crazy?? I do not talk to myself...it's called thinking aloud...


Tara ate her, devoured her from beneath. -The Edge of Silence giving new meaning to season seven's catch phrase.

Dreams are...illustrations from the book your soul is writing about you. -Marsha Norman

tkheaven
 


Re: well, well, well

Postby tkheaven » Thu Sep 04, 2003 5:42 pm

ok, so it's been more time than I expected. but i finally got a new one here to share. thanx andi for helping me out *bows to da bulldog*

and away we go...



flickering red hot flames

licking away at the images of you

quiet, warm

holding on to yourself

to a vision

of another across the room

behind flickering blue torches

the hottest part of the flame

always above and controlling



you hope? pray?

you’re silent

hiding from the cold nights

from the brute of winter

and still you tremble

frostbitten passions

lasting a lifetime

or so it seems

a never-ending battle

of logic over emotion



cruel brigand at play

and the nauseating feeling

so intense

it wraps around a spiked club

wedging itself deeper into the floor

on into that void

you try so hard to resist

you try so hard to avoid

you try…



your finger scorched

from the shield you hid behind

iced blue stepping forward

to comfort

kissing the wound with

a burning touch

you move away

knowing this isn’t what you wanted

not what you needed



looks are deceiving

you’re hurting

in pain

clenching the finger

with a blackened tip

and see a way

an escape from this hell

finer than that touch

believing it would heal

only made to aggravate



finding your way

offered a breath

cool and welcoming

both warm and refreshing

warm tongue in comfort

cool breeze to soothe

you smile and fear

no more



Tk's new and improved "GrrArgg"...Crazy? Crazy?? I do not talk to myself...it's called thinking aloud...


Tara ate her, devoured her from beneath. -The Edge of Silence giving new meaning to season seven's catch phrase.

Dreams are...illustrations from the book your soul is writing about you. -Marsha Norman

tkheaven
 


Re: well, well, well

Postby SJ » Fri Sep 05, 2003 1:01 am

Like that poem a lot :clap

Great imagery :)

SJ
 


Re: well, well, well

Postby bulldog tidnab » Fri Sep 05, 2003 5:28 pm

*bows in return to tk* not a problem my dear. always happy to help.

i really really like this. way to use the word brigand:lol you should get extra credit of some form or another for that alone i would think.

and have i mentioned how much i love love love the second stanza? :banana (sorry, had to use the banana.. haven't gotten to do that 'til now.)



*woof*

"There is always some madness in love. But there is also always some reason in madness." -Friedrich Nietzsche

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Re: well, well, well

Postby tkheaven » Sat Sep 06, 2003 7:05 am

SJ - thank you...I've been told I'm great with imagery so I try to get my muse to take advantage of it...



andi - brigand, brigand, brigand, brigand, brigand...lol...do you know how many times I went through that thesaurus trying to find the fancier words? :lol no matter, soon I'll be throwing questions to 'Bean WorldEncyclopedia of Life - revised edition'...updated thesaurus for your pleasure (that sounded kinda wrong)...lol...

no, I don't think you've expressed yourself enough about that second stanza...(you can stop using the bed as a trampoline now..off the expresso, woman) *chuckle*

Tk's new and improved "GrrArgg"...Crazy? Crazy?? I do not talk to myself...it's called thinking aloud...


Tara ate her, devoured her from beneath. -The Edge of Silence giving new meaning to season seven's catch phrase.

Dreams are...illustrations from the book your soul is writing about you. -Marsha Norman

Edited by: tkheaven  at: 9/6/03 8:33 am
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Back with more words

Postby tkheaven » Mon Sep 15, 2003 6:59 pm

well, here's some more so share. This was written...*scratches head* some time ago...form a little different than the usual, kinda 'IM' style...and for your reading pleasure, a little bit of 'Bliss'...





-tell me, what you want to do to me

-I want to wrap my arms around you, my hands slowly moving across your back...until my right hand reaches your ass, nails digging, and my left hand reaching and grabbing for your hair, as my mouth attacks your neck with a hungry kiss, then lightly biting, nibbling....slowing down the kiss with gentle light pecks...then reaching up toward the jawline and begin to suck lightly then harder just under there, as both my hands cling onto your ass, squeezing...nails digging, pulling you closer..hearing escaped moans, arousing me even more..trailing my lips to your collarbone, continuing the light nibbling, gasping for air as i continue to take in your flesh...lower until I reach your breasts, my right hand gliding over your hips slowly, light touches over the skin making it quiver, reaching your already hardened nipples and taking it between my fingers, my thumb flicking over as the index and middle finger holds it in place. My body slowly decends...my mouth taking over where my hand left off...reaching over to the unattended breast, massaging as I gently pull the hardened nipple between my teeth, a free hand glides down over your stomach..down to brown curls dampened by your arousal, two fingers glide between slick folds .... they glide past...closer to your desire. my mouth begins to take in more of your breast, tongue massaging over the hardened nub. you hold my head in place tightly as I feel your hips moving forward, wanting to feel me inside. my fingers pull away a bit and you let out a light disappointing groan, my thumb circles around your clit, gliding...feeling the moist pool created. Feeling both your right hand holding on to my hair as the other slides over my back...wanting to leave no space between our bodies, your center yearning for me to explore further, you push your hips closer..wanting me to get closer, I bring my head up...look deep into half closed eyes, my left hand leaving your breast and reaching behind your neck...my lips inching closer and leaving a slow kiss lingering on your lips...I break away as i feel your anticipation. My lips move toward your ear, my cheeks resting over your burning flesh...Is this what you want, I ask in a low whisper, Yes, you say....I can't hear you, my fingers gliding closer to your center...you gasp, Yes, oh God yes, please...I turn and look into your eyes, with burning desire I take hold of your lips and kiss you deeply as two fingers thrust inside, gutteral moans from deep within us ecsape from the kiss as my fingers continue to thrust without abandon, you break the kiss and let out a airy gasp as your arms wreap around by back, your hips grinding wildy at my hips....I can feel the walls begin to tighten as i take long hard thrusts into you, your moans getting louder, higher in pitch. I finally thrust with all I have and you scream my name......your orgasm crashing throughout your body, your head tucked in my neck and your nails digging into my skin as I leave my fingers inside, letting your orgams ride out as long as humanly possible. My fingers slowly gliding out...letting them brush over your throbbing clit...we stay there trying to slow our breathing...holding on to each other, you shift your head so that my lips can bring a gentle and loving kiss on your forehead....I love you



Tk's new and improved "GrrArgg"...Crazy? Crazy?? I do not talk to myself...it's called thinking aloud...


Tara ate her, devoured her from beneath. -The Edge of Silence giving new meaning to season seven's catch phrase.

Dreams are...illustrations from the book your soul is writing about you. -Marsha Norman

Edited by: tkheaven  at: 5/31/04 9:12 am
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Re: Back with more words

Postby SJ » Tue Sep 16, 2003 2:00 am

Like that,good style of writing :read



SJ
 


*gasp*pant*thud*

Postby bulldog tidnab » Tue Sep 16, 2003 2:28 pm

ok.. wow.. yeah.. wow... uh... yeah. whew. i think i need to.. um.. uh... heh.

this is really.. yeah. really really yeah. ahem. yes.

heh.

*runs off for some "quality alone time"*



oh and the olives... the olives def win. big things.. tiny packages and all that.;)



*pants*

When I give food to the poor, they call me a saint. When I ask why the poor have no food, they call me a communist.

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Re: *gasp*pant*thud*

Postby tkheaven » Tue Sep 16, 2003 5:23 pm

*bows*bows* SJ, bulldog...thank you..I'm sure there's better out there than this.



andi...elephants...otay? otay. elephants. olives are good but elephants...heh.. oh, well...hmm, although I supposed you can't have a comment made where elephants taste good... oh no..nonononono..ACK! Ok, olives..olives...for now... :p





do not mock my Babar...

Tk's new and improved "GrrArgg"...Crazy? Crazy?? I do not talk to myself...it's called thinking aloud...


Tara ate her, devoured her from beneath. -The Edge of Silence giving new meaning to season seven's catch phrase.

Dreams are...illustrations from the book your soul is writing about you. -Marsha Norman

Edited by: tkheaven  at: 9/18/03 6:56 am
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Re: *gasp*pant*thud*

Postby wolfwynd » Thu Sep 18, 2003 6:46 am

:drool :drool :drool :thud :thud :thud



That was.....erm..... :thud - keep up the good work!!! I love all the poetry of your that I've read and hope that eventually I too will be able to write to your standards! (Although somehow I doubt it!)



**goes off for a cold shower**



Keep the dream alive... :tara + :willow = :love



Wolfy :pride

"I don't want prawns I just want to learn how to play guitar" - me having a weird day....

wolfwynd
 


Dream

Postby tkheaven » Thu Sep 18, 2003 9:49 am

wolfwynd, thank you...I do think my poetry still needs a bit of work. I like writing the smut but would like to incorporate it into something bigger, perhaps a short story..working on that, though... ;)

And now, the infamous Dream...this was written sometime in May/June. it was on a dream I had back in April about a girl who I somehow felt close to, my twin I guess you could say (but wasn't me) and the things she did to ultimately destroy my world, my then gf was also in this dream. The lines in italics are part of an IM explaining my crapmare I had decided to incorporate. The poem came after certain apects came to realization...



DREAM



I woke up sweating, propped myself up on the bed

Covering my eyes from an expecting beam of light

In an already darkened room where signals flicker

From a tiny pc button, glowing like an orb

Working every fiber to ensure network connectivity

The smoke detector flashes once

Indicating its job is being done, silently watching

A light banging heard from a nearby enclosure

The shelled reptiles making known their presence

A slight movement from the warm thigh against my own

Bringing me back to reality

As moist palms slide over a dry mouth and away

Eyes follow the warm flesh to a tranquil sight

Cheek burning red and lines impressioned from

The pillow that caressed it before turning to face me

The love racing through me a smile forming when

The crinkle in her nose appears from the feather

Sticking through the casing

A kiss that is place right at her eye’s corner

Lips molding into the curve and placing

A small peck, microscopic in comparison

The emotions created from this goddess

Not looking past this heaven I walk toward

The space where I refresh my face and think of

The day that just passed…pause from

The thought that just ran through my mind

The reflection that stares back asking to reflect

The hand towel that slowly leaves my face

Turning my body and slowly walking towards

The door’s frame where I flick the switch and with

The dim lighting see my shadow towering and stretching over

The bodies…sleeping…holding one another

Am I still dreaming?…



Looking down and up again half expecting to see

The room change…there

The goddess with a reddened cheek from a pillow

Breathing in deeply in sleep, I also see

A flash of day’s past and the reminder of a confession

Replaying in the back of my head, I see

A feminine laughter, two, three voices together for a

Trio of joyful cries from the surprising punch line to a joke

-she's tall, dark curly/wavy hair to her shoulders...

-no matter how much crap i talk about other girls..you are the one for me..i love you so much...you are perfect for me...do you have doubts about me?


The cool and warm and earthy tones of

Bodies intertwining, lips caressing

Two hands on thighs, two with nails digging

And two drawing closer to its peak

-fair complexion

-It's like I know her or will know her...and I trust her somehow

-I don't doubt you

-maybe it’s a mirror of you


The facial expressions made when in conversation

Exposing more truths leaving me speechless

Amazement in finding another, so similar, so alike

Thoughts finished with words from her lips and visa versa

Reading minds without probing, knowing what’s there

Looking at yourself..in a different suit, spilt but whole

In another vessel…and it dawns like a freaky déjà vu

-how

-I mean, it didn't feel like 'me'

-I don't know

-maybe your alter ego


To see a beautiful slender body alongside a goddess…

The wonder and delight and surprise in that instant revelation…



So I flick the light off, past the shelled reptiles

And the glowing speck of an orb

And the watchful eye that flickers on occasion

Back to the position in my bed with

The darkened room as my hands and body stretch

Sliding behind and reaching out and around

Her sides towards her breasts in a relaxing position

Spooning her body as she spoons her body in comfort

And shelter from a bad dream of evil bicycles

And suspending in air but falling

But I fall, and yet I comfort and I fail to see

If this, my dream or reality is… or has been…or will ever be…



As I lay here, holding on to myself and no one

The domino that will allow no effect to take place

Because it’s harder to pick up the pieces

Than lining them up and making them pretty

I close my eyes and pray for a dream or to wake up

Back to where things were alright, felt alright

Wherever that may be, in my head or in my face

I lay it on your skin and rest

Mind opening and flowing into

The next matrix of illusions

Dreaming into a reality into a dream









Edited cuz I just realized I misspelled a word or two...



Tk's new and improved "GrrArgg"...Crazy? Crazy?? I do not talk to myself...it's called thinking aloud...


Tara ate her, devoured her from beneath. -The Edge of Silence giving new meaning to season seven's catch phrase.

Dreams are...illustrations from the book your soul is writing about you. -Marsha Norman

Edited by: tkheaven  at: 5/27/04 6:55 am
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Re: Dream

Postby onyxsundrops » Thu Sep 18, 2003 11:41 am

:clap Wow, that was nice... very realistic!

Thanks so much for sharing.



Yvonne:peace

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Re: Chock Full O' Words

Postby bigds9fan » Thu Sep 18, 2003 3:00 pm

Hello,





Very nice poem indeed. I am impressed.





Take care,



Ferry

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Re: Chock Full O' Words

Postby bulldog tidnab » Thu Sep 18, 2003 3:25 pm

glad you posted this. i really am rather fond of it. still love the use of convo in it.

you really are quite remarkable with your use of imagery. have i mentioned that before? like to think i have, but you never know.

and no... no mocking of the babar. but i still side with the olives. as for which tastes better... i don't like olives and it's awfully hard to find good elephant in minnesota.



*wanders off to find a way to disconnect her id*



When I give food to the poor, they call me a saint. When I ask why the poor have no food, they call me a communist.

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Re: Chock Full O' Words

Postby tkheaven » Thu Sep 18, 2003 7:02 pm

onyx - thankyouthankyouthankyou



Ferry - you're impressed? this is the most I've written in ages, methinks...



bulldog - thank you..I really enjoy when you can somehow fit in a convo or memory into a situation, makes it more..realistic, I guess..I don't know...I just like the way it flows...

What?? no elephant in mn?? something's gotta be done about that..*goes elephant happy, stuffs box and ships off to MN priority mail...looks about...* what... so they're stuffed elephants, where the hell am I gonna find real ones to send you?? hope this is good enough to hold you off...



well, here's a new one..came outta nowhere..no, I lie, came from that never-ending battle of somethingie vs thingermajig..yeah that...

no real title...just make 'em up as I go along..and somehow my brain picks out a moment from Dude, Where's My Car?...and theeeennnn?? *chuckle*





and yet...



I look away

yet I see you

I cover my skin

yet I feel you

I rinse my mouth

yet I taste you

I clear my thoughts

and yet I miss you

I wait for you

yet I fear you

I yearn for you

yet I run from you

I offer an embrace

yet I shy from you

I won’t let it be

and yet…





Tk's new and improved "GrrArgg"...Crazy? Crazy?? I do not talk to myself...it's called thinking aloud...


Tara ate her, devoured her from beneath. -The Edge of Silence giving new meaning to season seven's catch phrase.

Dreams are...illustrations from the book your soul is writing about you. -Marsha Norman

tkheaven
 


Re: Chock Full O' Words

Postby SJ » Fri Sep 19, 2003 1:48 am

Great writing :clap

Liked both those :read

SJ
 


Chock Full O' Words

Postby tkheaven » Fri Sep 19, 2003 2:31 pm

*bows*bows*



and here's another I just got to finish...





til the morrow comes and comes

my heart does race on beating drums

blood pumps fiercely through my veins

let go the horses free from reins

mind does rattle more than snakes

but thought of you, it satiates

now tranquil spirit, love of you

my state of sleep knows dream as true



the dulcet sample of your name

rolls on my tongue, sweet maple rain

satin as your touch does reach

my soul it learns the more you teach

eyes of blue it sees no wrong

glares at the pain til it is gone

pure in voice which calls for me

in want and need, grand harmony



golden heart rich in its purpose

your beauty deep and past the surface

wit and quip speeds past the trees

soul to bind forthe all of these

yours to hold and comfort lies

my hopes and fears without disguise

and I to you will treasure most

faith, love and trust this host





*official kitten thread of much lyrical bling bling*





edited to rephrase a line



Tk's new and improved "GrrArgg"...Crazy? Crazy?? I do not talk to myself...it's called thinking aloud...


Tara ate her, devoured her from beneath. -The Edge of Silence giving new meaning to season seven's catch phrase.

Dreams are...illustrations from the book your soul is writing about you. -Marsha Norman

Edited by: tkheaven  at: 9/20/03 5:36 am
tkheaven
 


Re: Chock Full O' Words

Postby SJ » Sun Sep 21, 2003 3:13 am

Great poetry,enjoy reading all your work,you're very talented :clap

SJ
 


Re: Chock Full O' Words

Postby bulldog tidnab » Wed Sep 24, 2003 12:45 pm

much lyrical bling bling huh?:rofl



this is beautiful. it really is. your use of rhythm and cadence is spectacular. as per usual, your use of imagery is fan-f*ckin'-tastic. *sigh* my hero.. :flirt



*sits outside and waits for the elephants to arrive*



hope they didn't get lost in the mail... poor little guys.



*howl*

When I give food to the poor, they call me a saint. When I ask why the poor have no food, they call me a communist.

bulldog tidnab
 


Re: Chock Full O' Words

Postby tkheaven » Wed Sep 24, 2003 2:15 pm

SJ - *bowsbowsbows* thank you...I'm trying to be as creative as my muse allows me to be, she's gotten a little help lately.. *looks at above post*

and speaking of which.. LOL YEAS *bling bling* heh. OH Yeah, about those elephants...they refused to go beyond the neighboring state, don't know why, something about overflowing and too long the walk to get there...they're waiting here for you...(damn they're lazy...) so no need to sit around, no need to look up either...nope, nothing falling from the sky, I know you won't be looking out the plane tomorrow...lol. Breathe woman....it'll be ok...



Tk's new and improved "GrrArgg"...Crazy? Crazy?? I do not talk to myself...it's called thinking aloud...


Tara ate her, devoured her from beneath. -The Edge of Silence giving new meaning to season seven's catch phrase.

Dreams are...illustrations from the book your soul is writing about you. -Marsha Norman

tkheaven
 


ill say

Postby FireFlyofDust » Sun Oct 05, 2003 3:16 pm

I'll say as i said before..beautiful





FireFlyofDust
 


Back

Postby tkheaven » Sat Oct 18, 2003 10:13 am

FireFlyofDust- thank you...





umm, don't know what the moment's mood is...it just is...



marred hearts desire

is no stranger to you

stranger is the absence of

stepping completely away

yielding all that was given

overcoming all that was lost

uttered words yet still unheard





I have no clue how this invited its way into my brain... oh well..

Tk's new and improved "GrrArgg"...Crazy? Crazy?? I do not talk to myself...it's called thinking aloud...


Tara ate her, devoured her from beneath. -The Edge of Silence giving new meaning to season seven's catch phrase.

Dreams are...illustrations from the book your soul is writing about you. -Marsha Norman

tkheaven
 


Re: Back

Postby SJ » Mon Oct 20, 2003 1:19 am

Good poem :)

SJ
 


Re: Chock Full O' Words

Postby ScarlettVonRaven » Fri Oct 31, 2003 9:47 am

Bravo! Nice job with various forms. The poem I can relate to most is your first poem, Swimming. I especially liked the rhythm and diction. You create a certain staccato by ending a line and then starting the next line with “and” or when you pile words up “moving...floating, cutting” (very nice effect). I also liked your use of consonance “slowing, stopping” “meshing and missing”. :bow

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