Poetry

[barnabasvamp]

Wow...That one stirs up all sorts of emotions.



Wonderful.



BV

It's the passion in a kiss that gives to it its sweetness; it is the affection in a kiss that sanctifies it.

[SJ]

Wow,great poetry

[dynarb]

Hey Yvonne,



You read my poetry so I feel it only fair that I should pop on over here to read some of yours. There is only one other person I leave feedback to and that I my girlfriends fanfic, but I feel I need to return the favour. Thank you for your feedback. I've read some of your poems and I find that some hit home for me...especially Desert...since that is where I live...in the desert.



Keep it up.



Dyna

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Tara: You think you know. What's to come. What you are. You haven't even begun."

- Restless



Amber Benson Accolade

[onyxsundrops]

Thank you for the feedback: Wired Vixen, Barnabasvamp, SJ, and Dynarb. So I've finally managed to complete something.



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Silhouette



the light beat of your pulse

echoes in the darkness

as fingers struggle in the moss

of your southern abyss



searching for a place

to feel the body of emptiness

ungraspable upon your face

my lips are lost upon your kiss

       

your eyes are glistening

two inches away

my arm outstretched, listening

don’t hesitant, your body knows the way



your words blend so well into the night

as curves flutter, yearning to unwind

but when you step into the light

I know that you have left your soul behind.





Yvonne



Edited: wanted to switch/change a word or two.

Edited by: onyxsundrops at: 9/16/04 9:21 am

[Wired vixen]

Hey Yvonne, that poem was great!

Quote:

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your eyes are glistening

two inches away

my arm outstretched, listening

don’t hesitant, your body knows the way

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Absolutley amazing......



Stace xXx

"Um...dont mean to ruin the sexcapades...but we need the chips out there. Xanders being a chip whore." -She's my always by spikeizmine87

[barnabasvamp]

Very, very nice.



BV

It's the passion in a kiss that gives to it its sweetness; it is the affection in a kiss that sanctifies it.

[StrangeQuark]

["your words blend so well into the night

as curves flutter, yearning to unwind"]



That line will stay with me for a while. Very nice indeed.



-SQ

[SJ]

Very nice poem

[Renee85]

I know I'm a bit late here but I just wanted to pop in and let you know how much I'm loving your poems, I just love reading poetry and this board is just full of great ones, especially yours. So yeah, I'm glad you finally updated! 'Silhouette' is a great piece of work, very lovely.

__________________

"For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart. It was not my lips you kissed, but my soul." -Judy Garland

"Live as if you were to die tomorrow. Learn as if you were to live forever." -Mahatma Gandhi

[onyxsundrops]

Thanks for the feedback Wired Vixen, Barnabasvamp, StrangeQuark, SJ, and Renee85. I'm glad all of you liked the poem.



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Can I buy you a drink?



Anonymous, my eyes scan the crowd

Studying the wall of sculptured backs

Hearts pound, wanting and loud

Smiles beckon and my senses attack



Fingers are wet against the glass

And drops run down heated skin

Aromas linger when bodies pass

My eyes devour the sight from within



I stop and my breathing becomes less

In the corner with your shy exterior

What lays within your core, I can only guess

But I know I want to be nearer



My body moves closer, wishing to stretch

If only to hear your arousing sigh

My gaze holds, able to catch

A small glance from your interested eye



Under the red lights, drops of sweat glow

And my mouth is dry, trembling like my knees

Jeans are tight, barely containing the hips that flow

I whisper and your body agrees



You laugh and I offer my number

A damp thumb smears the fresh ink

Your smile has awakened my slumber

Can I buy you a drink?







Yvonne

[Wired vixen]

Hey Yvonne, this one is definatley my favourite one so far!



Thanks for updating! yay!



Stace xXx

"Um...dont mean to ruin the sexcapades...but we need the chips out there. Xanders being a chip whore." -She's my always by spikeizmine87

[Renee85]

Wonderfully and amazingly well written, if I could write like you I’d be a happy camper.

I loved this one a lot, thanks for updating and I'm always a fan of your work.

__________________

"For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart. It was not my lips you kissed, but my soul." -Judy Garland

"Live as if you were to die tomorrow. Learn as if you were to live forever." -Mahatma Gandhi

[SJ]

Like that poem,great writing

[barnabasvamp]

Wonderful, keep up the great writing.



BV

It's the passion in a kiss that gives to it its sweetness; it is the affection in a kiss that sanctifies it.

[onyxsundrops]

Thanks Wired Vixen, Renee85, SJ, and Barnabasvamp for the feedback. It's greatly appreciated.



Just a simple poem.



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Revisited



I was surprised to hear your voice

Through the silence, you called to me

You know it hurt when you made your choice

But I let it go, supposing it was meant to be



Weeks have gone and I have found

A night’s comfort in the arms of another

But my soul screams somewhere in sound

I won’t lie; your words still make my heart flutter



No more, no less, I had taken you as you were

Staying with you when you wanted more than me

Hating myself when your eyes made my emotions stir

Our love was ugly but I had searched for the beauty



You dragged me down when you were low

And now you’re back and I want so much to believe

That the damage never happened and I never died from the blow

That in the past weeks I smiled instead of grieved



Would you make me forget if I let you in?

Would you tell me that none of it was real?

Would you tell me that with me was where you’ve always been?

Would you finally allow yourself to feel?



You wanted your freedom, your chance to breathe

And I suffocated myself to grant your request

Never thinking that you would really leave

That you would crush it all and leave me with an empty breast



So now I stand but I want to run from your charms

Your devilish smile says we can make it work, it’ll be better than before

You have no idea how much I want to be in your arms

But it’s too late; I won’t listen to your excuses anymore.

[SJ]

Wow,great poem

[Wired vixen]

That poem has to be the best yet, it was so beautiful....

Quote:

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Hating myself when your eyes made my emotions stir

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I loved that line, reminded me how it feels to be this person, i loved this poem alot!



I hope you get writing more soon, i truly adore your poetry.



Take care!



Stace xXx

"Um...dont mean to ruin the sexcapades...but we need the chips out there. Xanders being a chip whore." -She's my always by spikeizmine87

[onyxsundrops]

Thanks for the kind words SJ and Wired Vixen.



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Sugarcane



Baptized in honey

You’re sour

Sweet and runny

My beautiful flower



Such a petal

Your lips are fresh

Free to settle

On your sugary flesh



Trap me in your vine

Drink me dry

Squeeze me and dine

On my every sigh



Burst lively within

My awaiting mouth

Your juices on my chin

Drip south



Stretch your leafs

Absorb me

While my soul breaths

Your mystery



So sweet

Your taste is true

So sweet

I must pluck you.





Yvonne

[Wired vixen]

Mmm...good poem! Also i am now full of naughty thoughts.... hehe



Thanks for updating!



Stace xXx

"Um...dont mean to ruin the sexcapades...but we need the chips out there. Xanders being a chip whore." -She's my always by spikeizmine87

[Renee85]

Very sensual stuff, this is one of my favorites of yours yet! I think I'm full of naughty thoughts too, lol, very cool poem and I'm always eager for an update. Great poem and great job!

__________________

"For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart. It was not my lips you kissed, but my soul." -Judy Garland

"Live as if you were to die tomorrow. Learn as if you were to live forever." -Mahatma Gandhi

[WickedReds]

Yvonne... hey there... i just got around to reading all ur stuff... me likes lots... more please



-reds



my banana dances for smut

Tara in a wet shirt, Tara in a wet shirt. Tara in. A. Wet. Shirt. “Of course.”-Willow From Remember to Breath By Yellow Crayon

[SJ]

Like that poem,great writing

[onyxsundrops]

Thank you for all of the great feedback.



Artist



Write on me, redraw

The smile that has been erased. Paint

Me with flowers. Etch away the sharpness,

And fill me with curves. Love me.



Sculpt the pain, reshape

My slumping breast. Imagine me.



Blow away the shavings, sketch

The angles. Fill the holes, cross me out,

Retry.



Darken the eyes. Breathe,

And dip your brush, cover me,

With bright colors. Silent,

Beneath the glass, give me

The hardness.



Let my tears drip from your tips, blue

Black, yellow, green, I've read

The softness,

That lay bare on your canvas.



Do not recopy me, original

Dying once is enough,

Capture this pose, still

Lingering against the fresh ink.



Put away your nail, useless.

Do not hang me on your wall

To be forgotten is worse, nameless,

Put me away,

To be admired when you no longer dream.

Edited by: onyxsundrops at: 11/26/04 7:56 pm

[barnabasvamp]

This one is wonderful, and suits the title so well. Thanks for sharing.



BV

It's the passion in a kiss that gives to it its sweetness; it is the affection in a kiss that sanctifies it.

[WickedReds]

WOW.... that was just powerful.. beautiful.. i love it..



-reds



Mein Banane tanzen für Schmutz

Smutbunny Anthem: *sung to tune from Goldfinger* Smutbunnies...they'e the bunnies, the bunnies that love the smut...and Willow's butt. They surf for smut fiction...always lookin' for the next naked sweaty fix...of Tara's tits.- Written By Cameron(tarawhipped) For Us Smut Bunnies

[SJ]

Lovely poem

[Wired vixen]

Hey Yvonne!!



At the risk of sounding cheesy that poem was so deep and powerful, like Reds said



I love your poetry, sorry i haven't left fb for so long, but i've still been reading like the good poetry reading gal that i am!



Hope to read more soon!



Stace xXx

"Um...dont mean to ruin the sexcapades...but we need the chips out there. Xanders being a chip whore." -She's my always by spikeizmine87

[Renee85]

Two words. Absolutely amazing. I especially love your style of writing; I wish I could write like that. This poem is moving, incredibly well written, and I just love it. I could go on and on but I’m trying hard not to do that anymore, lol. Thanks for posting this, I’d love to read more soon.

__________________

"For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart. It was not my lips you kissed, but my soul." -Judy Garland

"Live as if you were to die tomorrow. Learn as if you were to live forever." -Mahatma Gandhi

[onyxsundrops]

Barnabasvamp, WickedReds, SJ, Wired Vixen, and Renee85 thank you so much for the inspiring feedback, I’ve been flirting with this new form lately, so I’m glad ya’ll like it.



Lover of Me



You’ve held me, let me go

Surrender. I was buried, beneath

The stubborn corners of your past.



Kiss me, take away

The scars left from my dreams, hurting

The metallic sheets of our chamber.



Memorize the curves of my skin, and

Touch the devious shadow, playing

Against the fingertips of our sliding grasp.



Release. Make me know your name, screaming

And cradling my soul, brush away

The heavy doubt and fill me with your essence.



Love me. Lover inside of me, implanting

The pressure of your heat over mine, educate with

Your philosophy. Instruct my body.



Zero to twenty, count

My trembles as they vibrate against

Your lips, tell me to believe.

[WickedReds]

Whoa... that was kinda dirty... love it... but go figure i write dirty stuff all the time.. hehe love it



-reds



Mein Banane tanzen für Schmutz

Smutbunny Anthem: *sung to tune from Goldfinger* Smutbunnies...they'e the bunnies, the bunnies that love the smut...and Willow's butt. They surf for smut fiction...always lookin' for the next naked sweaty fix...of Tara's tits.- Written By Cameron(tarawhipped) For Us Smut Bunnies