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First Ever Poem

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First Ever Poem

Postby Puff » Sun Aug 17, 2003 2:59 pm

Ok so I was inspired to write a poem...never done it before so here goes. Please give feedback :)



Rubberneckers



That’s me in there.

Did you stop and stare?

Did your car slow down to a crawl?

The car on its side.

Is there someone inside?

Did you think of me at all?



That’s me that cried.

That screamed from inside.

That had to be cut free.

Did you pray?

Did you swear?

Did you care I was there?

Will you remember me at all?

                       

That’s me in there.

Trapped, alone and scared.

In that up turned car.

Are my flowers still there?

Do they draw any stares?

Will you notice them at all?



That was me in there.

I was trapped in that car.

As it slowly caught on fire.

You slowed down to watch.

Have you forgot?

Its me.

I died in there.               



So, the day started and I knew my name and had my pants on. So far, so good. Yay.
Amber Benson

Puff
 


Re: First Ever Poem

Postby bluewillowwitch » Sun Aug 17, 2003 7:24 pm

:bigwave ,

That was a great poem. :clap It was very emotional. Yo should write more you are very good at it.





bluewillowwitch :glasses :flower :fallen :peace

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"Fate keeps on happening."--Anita Loos

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Re: First Ever Poem

Postby SJ » Tue Aug 19, 2003 1:40 am

Powerful poem :clap

SJ
 


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