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A New Poem ........ Let me know what you honestly think

Postby Shadowygirl » Mon Jan 08, 2007 2:27 pm

Disenchanted

Easing your way through my thoughts,
Disenchantment of a pretty ideal
Set on a pedestal and burnished with gold;
Or maybe some marble statue
With every feature frozen in place
So beautiful, so heart wrenching, so frozen.

And slipping through tear-wet streets
Hanging on to lullabies of silver and silk,
Destined to lose ourselves in a paper cut tragedy
Don’t tell me goodbye; don’t tell me goodbye.

Let promises linger in the space between us
Where nothing lives but forever and
A rose, and a kiss, and two hearts intertwined,
Where times stands still for us
And we can believe that this is real,

And you’re still here within me,
Slipping inside my every daydream,
Reminding me of how something can seem so perfect
Until it becomes so disenchanted;
And stroke of midnight, bloodshot eyes,
Don’t tell me goodbye; don’t tell me goodbye.

It’s not goodbye.

Only I’ll see you later.

In my dreams.
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Re: A New Poem ........ Let me know what you honestly think

Postby SJ » Tue Jan 09, 2007 3:46 am

Great poem.
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Re: A New Poem ........ Let me know what you honestly think

Postby Willowlover » Tue Jan 09, 2007 9:07 am

This poem was touching. Im not entirely sure what the words mean to me but they are powerful. Great poem.
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Re: A New Poem ........ Let me know what you honestly think

Postby barnabasvamp » Sun Jan 14, 2007 5:15 pm

And slipping through tear-wet streets
Hanging on to lullabies of silver and silk


Nice poem, and I especially like your comparisons.

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Re: A New Poem ........ Let me know what you honestly think

Postby Karmah » Tue Jan 16, 2007 4:11 pm

heh, well um its hard to comment sence I know who this is about, but I think you have a wonderfull new writing style and great use of Visuals and apey 12:01 starts everyday new :)


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Re: A New Poem ........ Let me know what you honestly think

Postby Still Waters T » Wed Jan 31, 2007 10:14 pm

That was melancholic and beautiful, sis. :sigh
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Re: A New Poem ........ Let me know what you honestly think

Postby Shadowygirl » Tue Jan 29, 2008 11:07 pm

thanks everyone !
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