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Justified's (Attempted) Poetry Corner

Postby Justified12 » Sat May 26, 2007 4:47 am

Hey guys!

I was having a fairly 'deep-emotive' day and I decided to post some of my attempts at poetry on the board. I'd love to hear what people think about them... or if they can relate.

And just as an after thought, I often feel like my 'poetry' reads more like song lyrics without a specific tune... lol so thats why they have a sort of 'rhythm' to them.

Justified xo
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Re: Justified's (Attempted) Poetry Corner

Postby Justified12 » Sat May 26, 2007 4:53 am

Here's one I wrote a while ago...


I would stop the world,
Just to see the smile in your eyes,
I can taste your tears,
Everytime that you cry.

When I fall asleep,
You're the dream in my mind,
The colours on my palette,
The model for my design.

I wanna be your saviour,
I wanna be your knight,
I wanna be your hero,
I wanna make things right.

I would walk the mile,
To bring you back,
I can feel your anger,
With every shirt you pack.

When your soul is burning,
Mine smolders as well,
Your my every thought,
I'd walk beside you from hell.

I wanna be your fire,
I wanna be your shield,
I wanna be your future,
I wanna help you feel.

If you're gonna leave,
Leave and come to me,
Runaway from the pain,
And we both can be free.
"Now that I know there's something to know, I can't not know, just because I'm afraid somebody'll know I know, you know?" - Willow
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Re: Justified's (Attempted) Poetry Corner

Postby Justified12 » Sat May 26, 2007 5:01 am

This is also something from quite a long time ago...

When life should be perfect,
And you can't find the cause,
Of the mayhem that lingers,
Darkly in your thoughts.

A restless struggle,
A constant fight,
A meaningless chaos,
Yet a hopeful delight.

You find me sitting,
Alone in my world,
The one filled with demons,
And regrets all withheld.

There in that creation,
You help me aside,
Quiet all the monsters,
As my fear's forced to hide.

What magical presence,
Brings with it this light,
A weapon against nightmares,
That shines in the night.

And finally we lay here,
No longer cold or afraid,
Our souls have connected,
Forever and always.
"Now that I know there's something to know, I can't not know, just because I'm afraid somebody'll know I know, you know?" - Willow
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Re: Justified's (Attempted) Poetry Corner

Postby Justified12 » Sat May 26, 2007 5:06 am

This is something short that I wrote a few months ago.

Music doesn’t always dance, like tear drops in the rain,
At the back of my conscience, begging for restraint,
Lies the sting of regret, the anger at deceit,
The mystery of longing and the future at my feet.

When moments that have passed, torment a present thinking mind,
The struggle that is rage, comes back slowly from behind,
Although my everlasting apex, quickly thickens in the sun,
The vex of insecurity, prevents logic to overcome.
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Re: Justified's (Attempted) Poetry Corner

Postby SJ » Sun May 27, 2007 4:17 am

Those would make great songs,thanks for sharing.
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Re: Justified's (Attempted) Poetry Corner

Postby Justified12 » Sat Jun 30, 2007 12:23 am

Ok... so thanks to some inspiration from my wonderfully talented girlfriend... I tried my hand at a different style of poetry... I hope it works lol

This one is dedicated to my love... Only 18 days left until we can be together...

Cold bites at my skin
But I burn for you
The fire that echoes inside
Blazes white with heat
It fuels a growing hunger
And I starve for you
A chest-clenching symptom
That derives from your distance
I fade into the background of this world

Dreaming of days alone with you
Forcing focus on time wasted waiting
But failing to forget your eyes
They penetrate my longing soul
And it aches for its other half
It aches for you

A high ride delivers my body
But I fly when you hold me
My heart will meet me there
Finally complete as it rests in your hands
"Now that I know there's something to know, I can't not know, just because I'm afraid somebody'll know I know, you know?" - Willow
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Re: Justified's (Attempted) Poetry Corner

Postby Justified12 » Sat Jun 30, 2007 12:26 am

This one shifts focus about half way through... it's about two different things lol... but yeah...

Blood drips from me
And I feel the red-stain tears
Rip away more of my soul
You took so much
But it’s never enough
My insignificance scarred
Branded into my skin
With each new indiscretion

Forget me not my lost love
My words are painful yes
But pure and without bias
Spoken for your good?
Articulated for release?
Neither justifies the contact at all
You no longer deserve this patience

I devote a place to care
But that too needs wiping away
Enough time wasted on cleaning
Your disaster guaranteed to crash
Bear down on your head
Crumble your once untainted heart
I will not save you
This ending is your own

True not over, not yet
But without your love
I would be devoured
Drawn into a darkened abyss
Never to climb back into the light
Emaciated by my loss
Consumed by my jealousy
Faded into a ghost of bitterness and spite

A new hope that embraces
Shelters my torn heart
Promises future guard
You would never fall to this
Swear your truth and valour
Heaven rests in my willing trust

A soul too broken
Should feel resistance
Tread cautious on rocky paths
Not throw sense to the wind
But I do

Never break this belonging organ
You own more than you know
All rests in your strong hands
And although burden is unwanted
I beg you to save me, forevermore
Never to let me go
"Now that I know there's something to know, I can't not know, just because I'm afraid somebody'll know I know, you know?" - Willow
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Re: Justified's (Attempted) Poetry Corner

Postby SJ » Sat Jun 30, 2007 1:23 am

Great poems.
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Re: Justified's (Attempted) Poetry Corner

Postby Justified12 » Sun Oct 21, 2007 2:50 am

Ok so this is a poem I wrote for an English assignment at school lol...

Eclipse

I bite my lip in distraction, gnawing the soft, pliable skin,
A breeze tickles slightly at the back of my neck
As hot sunlight battles with it for dominance
The familiar war of elements in spring
Comforts an anxious soul, consumed by winter-chilled fear.

I break a physical barrier, gain emotional entrance
Following the flickering light that’s found there,
It entrances me like a tiny insect,
The subtle allure of artificial buzzing calm
Uniting with the barely warm glow that emanates.

I delve into the depths of a soul,
Walk the tightrope of psychosis.
My bare feet stick painfully to the freezing tile floor,
Skin stretches to leave ghostly imprints that soon fade
While I wait for a spell to blur reality.

“Inside should be safer than out” I say.
Crawl within myself and hide till its over.
But scratching darkness awaits me in my head,
Infested with unrelenting black bugs
That breed and birth and breed again

Longing to deprive me of my sanity, rip away my pride.
The air is thick with glazed temptation,
Words that no one dares to speak aloud.
A bloodshot eye drenched in liquid envy
Keeps watch over my purple-tinted dreams.

Twisted branches sprout from a sinister trunk
Reaching into the sky to claw irately at the clouds,
Frayed grass is painted with glistening unshed tears
And I sit alone beside a jagged edged sea
Forged from the shattered pieces of my mislaid heart.

But even when a fixated hum drags me back
I still remain that wandering un-dead flesh
Cradling a faint sun that sets in neither realm,
Turn to face the whispering solution of hope
And meet only a gruesome, disfigured demon

Taunting my trust with games of chance,
Wielding a power beyond fate and destiny,
A charming lie within the cloudy depths of truth.
But I will not be tempted by illusory visions,
Not when the struggle has worn so thin.
I am mere months from my resolve,
Battling on with a sword built of training,
The blade glistening bright with absolution,
The wooden handle glued steadfast into my palm.
A few final strikes and the war is won.

I wear no armour against failure,
Hold no shield to protect me from loss,
The path I carve is everlasting,
Its sides engraved delicately with ink-stained paper
Middle excavated wearily with the day’s final act.

A crowd roars behind me with enthused expectation,
Waving a banner embossed with an emblem of rank.
Inflict a mortal wound! Taste the dust!
Presented with the winner’s prize
An intricate silver cup that holds my freedom.

The world is partially setting on an era,
An eclipse tainted by fierce uncertainty,
Yet welcomed after such infinite strain.
As smouldering quills are finally laid to rest,
Golden tips melted from strenuous effort.

Together we form an army
Fighting in this unavoidable, obstinate war;
The gunshots ring their last as we approach the horizon.
It glows orange in the wake of those lost,
Now the vivid gleam of heaven draws near.

Honey lacquered clouds cushion my ego,
A reassuring voice silences my inhibition
And soothes the remnants of past apprehension.
I fall into the feathery soft grasp of a goddess
That gives me wings, strong and secure.

I find myself no longer alone
Nor battling beside a legion of warriors
But safely nestled in a place I can at last call home,
A destination that eluded my grip until now.
I am at peace, lying within the suppleness of rapture,

Its ample, never-ending perfection is beyond comprehension.
Almost undeserving of such a reward
But I look back on the past,
Remember the dark trials that have been faced
And realize that this is where I have always belonged.
"Now that I know there's something to know, I can't not know, just because I'm afraid somebody'll know I know, you know?" - Willow
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Re: Justified's (Attempted) Poetry Corner

Postby SJ » Sun Oct 21, 2007 3:28 am

Great poetry.
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Re: Justified's (Attempted) Poetry Corner

Postby Lifty » Wed Dec 12, 2007 2:59 am

yes, great poetry. Love 'eclipse' :)
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Re: Justified's (Attempted) Poetry Corner

Postby Justified12 » Sun May 11, 2008 8:37 am

Haven't got anything poetry-like to offer... just wanted to say some things for my own benefit...

Why?
Why did you do this to me? To us?
You love me and yet you want to hurt me?
We go around in circles.
You chase me and then you turn around and make me chase you.
Don't say we'll never speak again. We both know it's a lie.
Don't say I'm not fighting for you or trying to prove myself.
If I wasn't, why would I be here right now?
A part of me will always be waiting for you...
Waiting for you to return with my heart.
Until then I'll wish I had died and this is just my hell.
Until then I'll hope that something will save me from this pain...
But I know nothing will.
Everything was perfect and I know it wont ever be like that again...
Not for me.
I've ruined it, You've ruined it, She's ruined it.
We can keep passing the blame but it wont do any good.
I love you... and I always will.
But I feel that this is the end.
"Now that I know there's something to know, I can't not know, just because I'm afraid somebody'll know I know, you know?" - Willow
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