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Re: Replies

Postby littlecrazy80 » Sat Jan 29, 2005 5:21 pm

Just started with this story. And I must say it´s awesome. :D :D :D



*lil´c*

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Re: Replies

Postby wiccanbotanist » Sat Jan 29, 2005 9:33 pm

Well now I feel a bit silly. Of course it will be more interesting for Tara to figure it out herself. And true she did get something out of Xander...the interview certainly wasn't a waste of time...I just wasn't thinking.....



As for your new update...loved it. Interesting interaction between her and Willow especially that Tara could sense that Willow had heard and understood her. Though I wonder how Willow feels...I mean of course she would naturally feel something for Tara but its just something I'd like to see in her own words (or thoughts). I'm sure we will probably get to it when Willow comes 'round.



-wiccanbotanist

"If truth is stranger than fiction then where are the flying monkeys?" - Daria

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I Bow as The Robed One Updates

Postby wimpy0729 » Sat Jan 29, 2005 9:48 pm

Hey Emms!



I bow to your awesomeness. Now, could you please help me back up?



Okay, still intrigued. Now I can't wait to see how Tara is going to bring Willow out. Well, I guess that could be a double entendre, now couldn't it?



lol...Redheads. That was cute, and so is Willow. hehe



Now, if you keep giving us these wonderful updates, I may have to shine up your crown off and gladly place it back on your deserving little head.



Always waiting for more of your goodness!



Wimpy



"There was plenty of magic." ~ Tara

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Re: Replies

Postby hidden watson » Sat Jan 29, 2005 9:50 pm

Quote:
To say I was nervous would have been an understatement. I was absolutely petrified. If someone was to ask me to explain the reason though, I strongly doubt that I could've.
I love that, drawn towards Willow by higher forces at work.



Was there any doubt that Tara won't take the case? Of course not! Loved the way she just made her presence known and not tried to make Willow respond, yet making it clear she's a friend.



Still intrigued by why Willow is in this condition. Hopefully Tara will get to interview Buffy soon.

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quiet thoughts

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Re: Replies

Postby Rhiannon9891 » Sat Jan 29, 2005 10:09 pm

OOOH Emms,

Thank you, thank you, thank you, :pinky :p inky:pinky A new pair of running shoes...just what I wanted...and they're a perfect fit, thank you.

Now on to feed back...So Willow's in there somewhere....I know Tara will find her and bring her back to reality...

Quote:
You've always had a thing for red-heads


Emms...Why does this line bother me ???

Very good update...:clap :clap :clap



Well gotta run...over to the other Emms fic that's due to be updated at any moment now...see ya over there...bye



Rhiannon :seesaw

She is like a cat in the dark

And then she is the darkness

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Re: Replies

Postby thebardgirl » Sun Jan 30, 2005 6:13 pm

Fabulous! Whoo hoo! You can't have enough AU, in my mind and this is WONDERFUL. Really. Me like very, very much. Hurrah!



Especially these parts...



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"I don't know....there's something about her Mary..."




It's cause you luuuuuurve her, Tara. Yes, yes you do. You don't know it, but you do. So ha. Ha. Ha. Ha. I know it before you do! *cackles insanley*



And also, did anyone else think of "there's something about mary" when reading this? Cause....I did.



Quote:
"No... I knew you would...once you saw her. "



"How do you mean?"



"You've always had a thing for red-heads."








Hee. *smiles like a crazy-fiend* I can totally relate with Tara on that.....oh yes indeed.



-elizabeth :spin



p.s. More! More! More!

"Oh, where are my manners, Tara, Willow, Willow, Tara."



-random line I know I search for in every fanfic out there.

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Re: yay!

Postby MissKittys Ball O Yarn » Mon Jan 31, 2005 11:06 am

Okay..here's what I'm thinking guys... and please tell me if I have gone completely off my rocker....cause I know this is like a writing no-no and the grammar gods might come down and strangle me in my sleep for what I'm about to suggest...but... I have been trying to come up with a way to get Willow's point of view in this story. Im starting to feel a bit one sided on this fic...which is because it is one sided...I started it in the first person, which makes it impossible to switch points of views without everyone being completely confused about who's talking. SO.... and please don't throw things...but... I was thinking about Keeping everything Tara and from her point of view first person.... and here's the part where you might want to throw things....*ducking* and introduce Willow in the third person.... *cringing* I would keep everything from Willow's point of view strictly in the third person....I"m not sure if it will even work....I would really like your thoughts on it.





xoxo

Emms

I can wax philisophically on a variety of different subjects...that doesn't,however, mean that I have anything constructive to add to the conversation.

--- Me

Edited by: MissKittys Ball O Yarn at: 1/31/05 10:07 am
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Re: Replies

Postby stillrunning » Mon Jan 31, 2005 11:33 am

Who DOESN'T have a thing for redheads?? I personally LOOOOOOOOVE them. And Willow's the favorite(of course). So glad Tara's going to take the case, save Willow, fall in love, and live happily ever after. Oh crap I spoiled it!! But it's still the best direction for ANY fic to go...just can't wait to see how you get us there!

"Heaven's not a place that you go when you die...it's that moment in life when you actually feel alive"

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yay!

Postby CrazyTaraWitch » Mon Jan 31, 2005 11:43 am

loving this story very much!

keep it coming Miss Kitty!

grosses bisses

~jas

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Re: yay!

Postby watersong84 » Mon Jan 31, 2005 12:34 pm

Hey Emms :wave



I've been reading this fic and loving it, and I see where you are comming from with your one-sided problem. I see why you want to add Willow's point of view to the story and I agree with your reasoning. I do thing that the third person might work, but I'm not so sure that the first person would be confusing. Willow's first person could be in italics or something. The reason I suggest this is that Tara is already the first person, which makes her basically the narrater of the story. If Willow's thoughts were in the third person, it would be like Tara was narrating them, and unless Tara can read her mind, that might be a bit wierd. And even if it was understood that the narrater was not Tara, it would still be a fact that SOME narrater would have to know what is going on inside of Willow's head, and it seems that only Willow can know that.



Basically, what I'm trying to say is that I think it would be easier for you to write Willow in the first person, and make it clear when she is speaking rather than Tara.



BUT I don't by any means think that yours is a bad idea. This is, after all, your fic, and you have been doing a great job with it so far. So, really, what does my opinion matter. I think whatever you feel most comfrortable with would probably be your best bet. :D



Oh, by the way... the "readhead" quote that basically everyone who commented on this last update has mentioned... :clap ha! Very good.



I look foreward to the next update, to see how you solve your problem. Just go with your gut, that usually works out for the best. :wave









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Re: yay!

Postby shuyaku » Mon Jan 31, 2005 12:38 pm

I personally don't think it is a big deal to switch POV's - first , third, whatever, as long as you are consistent and provide some clue that the POV is switching (like a bunch of ********** or something). As long as it makes some kind of sense, I think we'll figure it out ;)



Also, I would like to point out that I am once again sucked into another of your lil' fic worlds. I can hardly imagine writing one story and you're doing what, like 3 or 5, 8 maybe. Amazing!!



-shuyaku

Oh God, Willow—you’re giving me the gift of Karen Carpenter. Just when I think I grasp the full extent of your love." - Tara

"Why do birds suddenly appear? It’s because, you are queer…" - Willow (Gods Served and Abandoned by AntigoneUnbound)

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Re: Niobe's Silence

Postby CrazyTaraWitch » Mon Jan 31, 2005 1:00 pm

*strangles miss kitty harshly* bad Emms, bad! third person BAD!

unless you want to have both points of view in the same update, I suggest that you post a warning before any updates from Will's POV, and simple use first or second person for her point of view.







p.s.: hope ur neck's okay, but I didn't see any gods of grammar around to do the job, so i thought i'd lend the a hand...third person bad!

grosses bisses

~jas

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Re: Niobe's Silence

Postby sam darls » Mon Jan 31, 2005 2:10 pm

Hehe..always had a thing for redheads..so cute :p . Great update. Love sam xx

"Sometimes things happen between people that you don't really expect. And sometimes the things that are important are the ones that seem the weirdest or the most wrong. And those are the ones that change your life." - Jessie Sammler (Evan Rachel Wood)

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Re: Niobe's Silence

Postby kindagay » Mon Jan 31, 2005 3:09 pm

Emms sweetie, :wave I've been meaning to leave you feedback for this wonderful new fic of yours for ages, but, RL kept getting in the way. :buried



Anyway, I'm absolutely loving this fic, in fact, I don't think you could write anything that I wouldn't love :flirt

As a psych student I'm absolutely intrigued by the concept of this new story of yours - it has my intellectual mind buzzing with excitement :D



Oh oh, and I'm loving that you're updating regularly, 'cos I can never wait too long for update-y goodness from you :)



Keep up the wonderful work sweetie



Hugs

Jeanne



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Tara: “Let me guess – you want me to lie on your lap while you feed me grapes, but my sweet, shy, precious, honey you’ve been too shy to ask – yes?” - GROWW by WannaFriendsBe



My very own Willow & Tara website

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Re: Niobe's Silence

Postby robotguru » Mon Jan 31, 2005 5:12 pm

Jas, second person is like roleplaying, "You do this, you do that", that sort of thing :p



Me, i'd probably say keep it in the first person, put a doody little *** before switching views or something, we'll get who it is anyway.



Oh, nice fic btw :p

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There can be no rainbow without rain, you cannot know true happiness until you know sadness first.

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Re: Niobe's silence

Postby russ » Mon Jan 31, 2005 5:16 pm

Firstly, apologies for not leaving commentary before now. I've been reading it with interest, and feedback is overdue.



You've taken a unique approach in having teenaged Willow traumatized to the extent that she has ceased to communicate with the world. Elective mutism is an unusual choice; normally a condition of young children, it's very uncommon coming on in adolescence, and curing it after 10 years is highly unlikely.



As for your question about POV; I don't see any problem with switching to Willow's first-person. It would be pretty clear from context whose POV we were in.



You have a larger problem to deal with, though. Willow has become Tara's patient. That means any romantic relationship between them is strictly forbidden by any code of ethics I've ever heard of. If this relationship takes its inevitable course (this is Pens, after all), Tara will have to find some other line of work.



Having said that, I'm eager to see how this story will unfold. The process of reaching out and bringing Willow out of herself should be fascinating.

Russ



When we love and give it everything we've got, no matter what the consequences, we are doing what we were put here to do -- Geneen Roth

Edited by: russ at: 1/31/05 4:17 pm
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RE

Postby MissKittys Ball O Yarn » Mon Jan 31, 2005 7:36 pm

Hello again everyone. I just would like to say thank you to everyone that has left feedback and feedback in particular concerning my P.O.V dilemma. I think I'm going to try doing Willow first person...thanks everyone. I'd like to get individual replies right now, but there's been so many and I have mega housework to do...so I'll have to get to those individual replies a little later... But one bit of feedback calls for a reply right this moment....



Russ



Quote:
You've taken a unique approach in having teen-aged Willow traumatized to the extent that she has ceased to communicate with the world. Elective mutism is an unusual choice; normally a condition of young children, it's very uncommon coming on in adolescence, and curing it after 10 years is highly unlikely.




I completely agree with you....but sometimes what things seem to be aren't what they always are...after getting to know Willow a little better....she might start to see things a little different... Or not... Elective mutism is rare in adults, but I've heard that it does occur. If that is what Willow is going through I have no doubt about Tara's abilities to bring her out of it. :D



Quote:
You have a larger problem to deal with, though. Willow has become Tara's patient. That means any romantic relationship between them is strictly forbidden by any code of ethics I've ever heard of. If this relationship takes its inevitable course (this is Pens, after all), Tara will have to find some other line of work.




I have complete faith that Tara will have the utmost respect for any all code of ethics. But you are right... she might not be able to continue helping Willow in that capacity if there's a romance a'brewin'. :D



Thank you for your feedback Russ...it was both helpful and insightful.. I hope you stay around. :laugh



xoxo

Emms

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Re: RE

Postby Willow18 » Mon Jan 31, 2005 9:41 pm

This is really interesting so far. I'm curious to see where you take this. How will Tara be able to help Willow? Hmm. I can't think of any reality where Willow can resist Tara's charms. I have faith in you to deliver another captivating story a la Sunflowers. :)

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Re: update

Postby Irishgrl3 » Tue Feb 01, 2005 9:31 am

Emms,

Really like this storyline! Too bad Tara couldn't catch up with Buffy for maybe a few answers to Willow's condition. Xander wasn't to much help. But we all know if anyone can bring Willow out, it's Tara. :blush I too would be interested to know what's going on in Willow's head, especially after Tara's first visit.

Can't wait for more!

-anna

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Re: update

Postby MissKittys Ball O Yarn » Tue Feb 01, 2005 5:29 pm

Replies replies replies as promised! :laugh

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lil c Thanks for reading...and oh my! what a toothy grin you have there.



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wiccanbotanist Don't feel silly on my account sweetie...Maybe Xander should have told her something more...but he was really busy...so at least he has an excuse.



As for Willow's POV that's a little glitch I've been trying to work out...And thanks to a lot of kittens that put their 2 cents in, I think we'll get to see a little os what Willow's thinking, very shortly.



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Wimpy Yay! more bowing...(I really can't get enough of that) :D *helps wimpy up*



lol you naughty kitten you...with all your double entendre talk...



hehe oh joy! did I hear correctly? You are going to run back to the happy little costume shop and bring me back my beloved crown? And yes, my head is quite deserving isn't it?:smug



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hiddenwatson Higher forces are wonderful aren't they? They are also quite convenient in plot progression...if you ask me :D



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Rhiannon Yay! you liked your shoes? I'm happy you are still enjoying the fic... Run on girl! :glasses



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elizabeth Yes, AU is wonderful isn't it? there are so many nifty situations in which to precariously place our girls. I love it too!



What's this about something about mary? ( I absolutely hate that movie! :sigh ) Please tell me I didn't plagiarize something from that horrible flick...cause I would just....I don't know... be forced to run screaming from the room with my hands over my eyes, shouting something about trauma and acute temporary insanity... :paranoid (whew! now that, that crisis is over.... I just wanted to say...thanks for the feedback! :p



oh and.... if it's more you want...more you shall have. But please try to keep the insane cackling to a minimum! :peace



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still running A very valid choice...red heads are very cute.



Yes...save Willow...fall in love...and live happily ever after...exactly in that order... It's the formula for success...I never mess with the classics.



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Watersong Thanks for your thoughts on this predicament, you were such a big help. I plan to try and do Willow's point of view in the first person as well. I just hope I can pull it off...If not, there's going to be quite a few confused kitties out there. :|



and you left the most valuable advice, cause with the idea about putting Willow in italics. That just might work out! :D



I'm glad you liked the line about Tara liking red heads...



thank you sweetie for your kind words and thoughtful advice.



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Shuyaku



LOL. Well, I don't think it's quite as many as 8 fics...let me see... *counting* actually it's only 5... whew! I must be tired. ;)



thank you sweetie



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Jas :shock I've been strangled? Well, it's nice to see someone stepping up to the plate and taking initiative.



and yes...I think my neck will be fine... ( I think I need an ice pack, yeesh! :spin )



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Sam darls hehe, glad you liked the update! :pinky



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Jeanne OH Jeanne! yay! here you are at another one of my fics. *pats your furry little head* Welcome!



an intellectual mind could always use a good buzz, in my opinion. ;)



Now that the pleasantries have been taken care of... there is something I would like to bring up right about now....



There seems to be a certain person, who shall remain anonymous...lets just call her Shmeeanne... Well...anyway...this Shmeeanne person has left me in the lurch with the lack of updates to her wonderful story... really, It's been ages and I've found myself wanting to go to this person's thread and leave a lengthy ramble about updates and responsibilities... (I would do it too, if I thought there wouldn't be hoards of angry kittens thinking it was an update... )



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Robotguru

Thanks for the advice sweetie and I'm glad you are enjoying the read. :love



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Willow18 Woo Hoo! You're interested. My work here is done.. I guess I should pack up my pencils... :p :love



regarding the storyline and how Tara will help Willow; I haven't really decided yet, I'm kinda making it up as I go along...



oh and...you are right... I highly doubt that Willow would be able to resist Tara's charms...not for too long anyway... Thanks for reading.

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Anna The Buffy interview should be coming up within the next couple of updates. You know Buffy though, she's pretty busy with the slaying....she might not have time to pencil an office visit into her schedule...Tara just might have to meet up with her on buffy's turf....that could be interesting huh? :hmm

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That was a lot of writing...my hand is cramped! Someone toss me a bag of frozen peas please.



I just want to thank everyone again, for reading and taking time to leave feedback. I'm going to do my best to get an update posted within the next couple of days...possibly tomorrow...but I'm not making any promises.



luv ya!



xoxo

Emms

I can wax philisophically on a variety of different subjects...that doesn't,however, mean that I have anything constructive to add to the conversation.

--- Me

Edited by: MissKittys Ball O Yarn at: 2/1/05 4:38 pm
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Re: update

Postby pikescoob » Tue Feb 01, 2005 8:58 pm

Another story by you! I'm a fan of your writing so of course I had to check this out :D Definitely an interesting start...I'm confident that Tara can get through to Willow.



**Michelle

"these wounds won't seem to heal,

this pain is just too real,

there's just too much that time cannot erase"--Evanescence (My Immortal)



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hi

Postby MissKittys Ball O Yarn » Wed Feb 02, 2005 10:19 am

Hi Michelle :wave It's nice that you made the trek over to this fic. :)



Quote:
Another story by you!




I think I might actually have too many...I think the count is up to 5 :hmm



thanks for reading :love





xoxo

Emms

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Re: hi

Postby Grimlock72 » Fri Feb 04, 2005 2:54 pm

Wow... who knew a Ball of Yarn could have such an active imagination :) You got promoted to staff writer here at pens or something ?? :lol . I seem to recall reading a lot of your stories lately, I would go slightly insane writing about so many different universes.. then again, Dr. Tara might come fix me.. heh..



I like the setup of this story, for a change Tara is doctor and Willow needs rescue-ing. Interesting... I do wonder how much Buffy will tell Tara about whatever incident occured. Always got the feeling Xander is more of the spill-person, usually needing a cure for foot-in-mouth decease as a logical consequence :) .



Given Xander's description of the incident I would have expected Willow to be more sort of scared for life. I would understand her seeking shelter and protection, but what good does not-speaking do her ?? For that question alone it will be nice to know what Willow is thinking.



Hmm... I suppose Willow hasn't attended much school the last 10 years, lots of knowledge to catch up on :lol .



Don't overwork :kgeek yourself though... we CAN wait patiently for updates. Well, some of us can... some I'm told :lol



Grimmy :wave

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"You hurt Tara," Willow said too calmly. "The last one who tried that was a god. I made her regret it." -- Unexpected Consequences by Lisa of Nine

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Re: hi

Postby MissKittys Ball O Yarn » Sat Feb 05, 2005 9:42 am

Hello everyone! :wave Today's the day :laugh or at least I hope so. :| I have four glorious days off of work...and in those days I plan to get many updates posted...starting today. Thank you everyone, for being patient.

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Grimlock hehe staff writer...is there such a title...actually I think "staff procrastinator" or "staff start one thing before another thing is finished" is a more apt title.



Quote:
I like the setup of this story, for a change Tara is doctor and Willow needs rescue-ing.




Yeah...different I know, but I thought I would switch things up for a change. I've read story after story (and they're all wonderful) where Willow does all the rescuing, so I thought it would be interesting to see a different dynamic between them.



Quote:
I do wonder how much Buffy will tell Tara about whatever incident occurred. Always got the feeling Xander is more of the spill-person




lol, you are so right about that. Even to the point where, Tara hasn't even been able to get ahold of Buffy but Xander's interview was easily attained. Getting anything out of Buffy is going to take considerably more work for Tara...but who knows...once Buffy does open her mouth, she might say something entirely insightful, causing everything to become sunshine and roses....



Quote:
Given Xander's description of the incident I would have expected Willow to be more sort of scared for life. I would understand her seeking shelter and protection, but what good does not-speaking do her ?? For that question alone it will be nice to know what Willow is thinking.




I don't really know yet... I'm sort of making this all up as I go along... I'm not a psychology major or anything... sure I took a couple classes in college, but that hardly makes me Freud...Well, maybe it does a little... :p



Quote:
Hmm... I suppose Willow hasn't attended much school the last 10 years, lots of knowledge to catch up on




Ha! You've discovered the hidden flaw in my beautifully laced plan. You win a prize. :D here :punish hehe.... actually I've been thinking a lot about that little glitch...And there's only one logical conclusion I can come to... (what? I'm not going to say it now...and give away the ending? Yeesh! )



thanks for the insightful feedback Grimlock. You've posed many a question that I will be thinking about as I diligently type out the next update. :love



xoxo

Emms



I can wax philisophically on a variety of different subjects...that doesn't,however, mean that I have anything constructive to add to the conversation.

--- Me

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Update

Postby MissKittys Ball O Yarn » Sat Feb 05, 2005 10:46 am

okay...here's a little of what is going on inside Willow's brain. I tried to make it as clear as possible that she's having a conversation with herself...but if its too confusing, I could possibly do it differently.



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Author Miss Kittys Ball O Yarn

Disclaimer Joss Owns everything. I own nothing... enough said?

Rating Rated R for now, could change.

Notes Everything up until the episode Willow the episode Where willow finds the students killed in the lounge in season one. From that point on Its completely AU.

Summary Tara is a psychologist brought in on a case involving a young woman lost in a near catatonic silence.

Feedback Would be muchly appreciated.









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"She's beautiful isn't she?"



Beautiful? In what way?



"In the all around kind of way."



Be more specific.



"Okay...Geeze I don't know...That's such a hard question.



What is this? Wheel of fortune? Just pick a letter already.



"It's not that easy."



You brought it up, the least you could do is help me to understand.



"You don't make sense"



Neither do you most of the time. You think I'm going to make this easy for you? Get on with it!



"All right! She's beautiful okay...?"



We covered that part.



"I like the way her hair feels."




How would you know? You've never even touched it.



"Well, I like the way her hair looks like it feels... I like how she smells.



She stinks?



"She does not. She smells like warm vanilla. Whenever she walks by me I can smell her."




You're strange. You've only known this woman for a few hours and you're already smell stalking her?



"It's not like that, and would you please shut up?"



Excuse me...could we think about something else now?



"You asked. And besides, she's interesting. She didn't look at me the same way everyone else does...I like thinking about her."



That's your problem you know.



"I don't have a problem... okay...I do so have a problem, obviously. What's your point?"




Thinky thinky that's all you do. Why don't you try a little less with the squishy brain mass, frontal lobe type action and a little more action-y type action.



"You have all the answers don't you?"



I am the level head here.



"Your head is not level. It's rounded and not too good for the thinkin'. Someones coming.. "



let them. They can't help you. You are the only one that can do anything about your situation. How many times do I have to tell you that? Really, I sound like a broken record. Just fess up already.




"To what?"



You couldn't handle it.



"What?"



It was too much for you



"What was?"



All that blood.




"I'd take blood over being here any day. I don't think that was ever the problem. Wherever there's evilness you can bet there is going to be buckets of blood not too far behind. I was prepared for that."



But there was blood remember? You freaked out.



"I so did not freak out."




Then why are you here when you could be with your precious buckets of blood?



"This isn't my choice."



It's always been your choice.



"I don't know why I even talk to you.:"



Because, I'm the only one that listens.




"Do you ever feel like someone's trying to do a number on the natural order of things? Like maybe I was never meant to be here at all?"



What's the use of those kind of thoughts? You are here, and that's a fact jack.



"Stop it..."



Listen Red...Don't kill yourself over details.




"Details, details, details. Details are my thing, it's what I do, It's who I am."



I'ts not who you are.



"What do you know about who I am?"




I am you...You are me...It's a thing. I knew I was the more philosophical half- look, what you do and who you are are two separate entities. Here, see for yourself.



I examined my reflection in the mirror. I look so lifeless, it's frightening what I've become.



Different than what you imagined huh? In here, you're okay...a regular walking, talking, normal Nelly. But out there, to the outside world, you are a sad pathetic woman in a chair scarred shit-less over some oopy goopy blood. And that's the facts Jack.



She didn't see me as lifeless, I could tell. I have the feeling she saw the me that's still here, the me that still lives in the world. I wanted to tell her, but she was gone before I could make my lips move. So here I am, stuck in a conversation with myself again. That's the way it always happens; first they come with their assortment of rainbow colored pills and then I find myself locked inside an intolerable conversation with myself. "Stop saying that."



Its the truth...



"No, not that. Stop calling me Jack...Its disturbing."



Disturbing? you are the one having a conversation with yourself.



"Ignoring you now."




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TBC

I can wax philisophically on a variety of different subjects...that doesn't,however, mean that I have anything constructive to add to the conversation.

--- Me

Edited by: MissKittys Ball O Yarn at: 2/5/05 12:00 pm
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Re: Update

Postby kindagay » Sat Feb 05, 2005 1:11 pm

Hey sweetie, :wave



Very interesting & cute update, with funny moments too :D & it wasn't at all confusing either. You did a great job of writing Willow's internal conversation with herself, especially the debate about in what way Tara is beautiful - Very cute :) & I definitely agree with the whole
Quote:
"In the all around kind of way."




I'm looking forward to finding out more of what's going on in Willow's head & I hope it isn't too long before she can make her lips move to tell Tara what's had her so quiet all this time.



Now, about my fic - I know that I'm being a bad kitten & should be punished :punish for making you wait so long for an update. I am working on the next update, I just seem to be making very slow progress with it. & with it being Dawn & Kate's wedding, I want it to be all romantic & sweet :heart

I promise I won't leave you waiting much longer sweetie.



Keep up the great work with this wonderful fic (& all your other great fics) :)



Hugs

Jeanne

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Tara: “Let me guess – you want me to lie on your lap while you feed me grapes, but my sweet, shy, precious, honey you’ve been too shy to ask – yes?” - GROWW by WannaFriendsBe



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Re: Update

Postby hermitfish » Sat Feb 05, 2005 1:30 pm

Hey Emms...now I thought I left feedback for the previous part but perhaps I'm getting too discombobulated for my own good. I'm still very intrigued...liked the W/T intro and I find the mental thought argument to be an interesting format for presenting Willow. I also followed it fine...wasn't confusing...of course I've got lots of voices in my head...so maybe I just have lots of practice interpreting that kind of thing. I'm liking the progression. Lovely.



~Cyd




All you need to start an asylum is an empty room and the right kind of people.

~Eugene Pallette in My Man Godfrey (1936)



Altered Shadows

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Re: Update

Postby littlecrazy80 » Sat Feb 05, 2005 2:15 pm

Great update! It was funny and sad.



*lil´c*

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Re: Update

Postby Grimlock72 » Sat Feb 05, 2005 2:50 pm

Well that was kind of cute and sad at the same time. The part where Willow seems to think no-one else listens to her is esp. sad :cry . I wonder if whatever occured in the teacher's lounge really was the sole trigger.



Willow's more rational side sounds an awfull lot like Faith by the way :) That just happens by accident I'm sure :lol .



Willow seems very much aware of the world around her, which is good. She must have been bored stiff years ago, whats keeping her there? If her emotional/bable-side agrees that being in that institution is not a desired situation, yet she doesn't seem to have done much to get out ???



Weird, but then I'm just a computer programmer... not a shrink :) Now if I could just figure out the title of this story...



Grimmy

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"You hurt Tara," Willow said too calmly. "The last one who tried that was a god. I made her regret it." -- Unexpected Consequences by Lisa of Nine

Edited by: Grimlock72 at: 2/5/05 1:51 pm
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Re: Update

Postby watersong84 » Sat Feb 05, 2005 6:24 pm

Hey! :wave

That was a great update... not at all confusing. I think you handled your little predicament just fine. Willow's voice is great... and I'm glad that she paid so much attention to Tara. :applause

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