....here's the second part of the first chapter.
Hi! Just dropped by to say that this story is very cool! I liked it. It's a great start and I can't wait to find out what happens next. 

It really is naughty of me to be starting another story though, because I really should be concentrating on finishing Catching Sunflowers... but hehe I just couldn't help myself. I'm glad you all are enjoying. The next part should be out soon, as I'm almost finished typing it. Thank you everyone, for the lovely feedback.
ok I will leave you a feedback later since some one we both know is talking to much on yahoo right now.
Don't let Rhi chattering away like a little fuzzy chipmunk keep you away from my brand new story!
new story...what can I say...I can't help myself
Coolness! I loved it! Conflicting ideals, strong emotions, tense surroundings! It just can't get any better.
I'm already seeing it: Tara nursing Willow's wound, tension thick enough to cut with a knife, sparks flying
yes....that is a lovely visual isn't it? I'm glad you liked the first chapter Rob, thank you for leaving feedback.
Hi! Just dropped by to say that this story is very cool! I liked it. It's a great start and I can't wait to find out what happens next.
Does this bring your total of stories currently in progress to 1000?
yeah....some number like that. How do you do it?
I don't know if (well, if I was a writer) I could even have more than one going without losing the plot and writing about Sunflowers growing in a psych hospital with an albino child that fights for the military in each update.
well...i guess we all know what my next story will be about
I can't wait to see what happens next. Will Tara take Willow to her camp? Will they run away together? What's going to happen???
But you will just have to wait and see!
The birth of a new story by Emms, and I get to leave fb...yay!!!
The plot to this fic is terrific. One culture's thoughts and beliefs against anothers...1) this screams of Romeo and Juliet...but in our case...Willow and Tara. 2) Two worlds will unite as their love grows... and maybe perhaps, in their infinite love, they will be able to bring peace to the world
but you know....your way works too.
See...this makes me think that the Shinti were'nt responsible for the death of Willow's parents. Maybe it was another secret tribe...or maybe someone from their own military who didn't want to see Willow's father in power perhaps because he would have brought peace? You know how the government is? Well as the story progresses I'm sure to bring up more outrages theories...you know me.
you never miss a thing. and I always enjoy reading what kind of scandleous theories you've come up with to explaination Willow and Tara and their various situations.
War does not become Tara...ever. She's the most caring, loving human being...the thought of her having to lead her people must be so overwhelming for her. I felt her pain...you described it so beautifully
) Emms, I'm so exicited about the possibilities that this fic will generate. You've done a fantastic job in describing the world in which our heroins live, the atmosphere...just everything.
and thank you for replying....I always enjoy reading feedback from you.
Emms,
So exciting to see a new fic from you. I like the start of this very much. It has a sort of classic epic feel to it. Kind of uber but it'd be like, "uber what?"
actually, I have no IdeaKind of uber but it'd be like, "uber what?"
Interesting contrast between Willow who has been basically brainwashed since birth and Tara who is obligated to lead her people but who does not believe in their ways.
But... Who was Willow hearing at the stream and then she was no longer there and hadn't had a confrontation?
Well....I'll get around to fixing that little typo eventually...but until I do lets just say for all intents and purposes that they skittering in the bushes was some kind of harmless animal rooting around for a tasty meal of grubs or something as equally yummy.
Emms, the epitome of prolific writing, though not the best role model for young writers just starting out *coughtoomanyunfinishedficscough* wrote:I really should be concentrating on finishing Catching Sunflowers ...
Emms, the epitome of prolific writing, though not the best role model for young writers just starting out *coughtoomanyunfinishedficscough*
I can't say that you're wrong about that.
No, the pressure will be from the outside. Like Irene described, Romeo and Juliet
Looking forward to the next part. Or you could finish Sunflowers first. As long as you keep to your posting schedule, anything posted will be good for me .
I won't beg though, I'm far too dignified and have my reputation to consider to beg. Yes ma'am . [Now why do I feel I just set myself up to be ridiculed again ? "You? watson? Reputation? What reputation?!??]
...but there was something....No...she wouldn't allow herself to take that thought any further
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Looks like they didn't exactly start off on the right foot. Willow's curtness is understandable, as she is on alert. But she's hurt in the middle of a forest in enemy territory. That isn't the way to endear herself to people who could kill her in an instant (that's what she's been told all her life, right?).
) She never exptected to be in the situation she's found herself in afterall. Also, I think she doesn't want to admit it to herself, but she's a little flustered about her initial reaction to seeing Tara. It kinda took her off-gaurd and I don't think she's fully recovered yet, so maybe she's being difficult and curt as a defense mechanism....to protect herself against the mutany of her own brain?
Love your animals - praggots and mussox reinforce the idea that this is a different world.
well thanks for dropping us a bone there
I've got the next part nearly finished so it should be posted soon....I think we can expect some sparks to be flying between our girls very soon.
I understand that Willow is thoroughly pissed off at the Shinti for her father's death, but the evilness of some doesn't apply to all.
Tara might not know who Willow is or where she came from, but taken that the "Plains" folk and the "Shinti" folk have been dooking it out for a while, should tell Willow that any stranger would be in danger and possibly even killed if they were found near the "Shinti" encampment, and given that logic, Willow should or could come to the conclusion that Tara is not a threat...just there to help.
The praggots and the mussox are fun, I keep picturing "Stich", from "Lilo and Stich" as a praggot, can't think of one for the mussox.
Lilo....that's a funny visual...okay, lets go with that. The Praggots now look like Lilo. Now, about the mussox... I kinda pictured them to be something like wild boars. Go ahead and grab hold of Tara's hand Willow...she wasn't the one who killed your father. Ughh...people and their grudges.
1) Romeo and Juliet vs. 2) Willow and Tara = Will falll in love, even though they came from 2 opposing entities.
1) Opposing families
2) Opposing cultures
Emms...again your description of the "Shinti" camp is so vivid. These are people who respect and appreciate mother earth.
Well, there goes my fantasy of Tara sweeping Willow off her feet and kissing the boo boo's away.
....there's still time for sweeping and boo boo kissage, I wouldn't give up on it so quickly sweetie.
Emotions clashing, niiiiiiiice. Willow felt something at first sight, but her reaction kinda sounded like a knee jerk to me. Not wanting to show weakness to someone who she pretty much considers the enemy. Tara too, I can see interesting debacles in their near future.
Also, gotta love Anya and her none-too-subtle approach. I can just picture Willow's face when Anya started taking off her clothes.
I'm glad you liked Anya's approach...I think it was the first very Anya thing she'd done so far....she's kinda a little bit different here then how the show characterized her being....I guess I was tired of writing the same old moments for her....you know, the ones where she comments about orgasm (not saying that she wont comment about orgasm here though...cause that is sometimes too funny to resist) But she is basically the same Anya we know and love....just a little less loud about it.
And I may be reading too much into this, but I have the feeling that belt of Willow's may cause some trouble if they find out she has a transmitter attached to it.
I'm curious as to how you plan to unite a pacifist and a trained soldier. Should be interesting.
But I'm workin' on it.
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Hello . . . I really like the atmosphere you've created surrounding our favorite twosome.
Thank you. For whatever reason it reminds me of the Ewok forest from Return of the Jedi (except, minus the Ewoks of course).
Oh, and Willow in a sleeveless shirt and a utility belt?! YUM!
(you make us writers with three stories look like slackers)
)
IM loving this story so far.. Is willow really going to betray tara? Anyways keep it up!
Is Tara the biological daughter of two women? Or does she have a father too? And what about magic, is there some kind of magic going on? Willow doesn't seem to be a witch, but is Tara? I'm full of questions today.
(I have a sickness.....
)
Is willow really going to betray tara?
I'm betting she's going to spy and plot, but as her feelings for Tara develop she'll start seeing that the Shinty aren't all that bad.
If you're going for the real drama it's going to happen when they establish a relationship thus breaking Tara's trust on Willow.
I liked Tara's second mom, but... 1) How exactly did that happen? 2) Is Tara the biological daughter of two women? Or does she have a father too? 3) And what about magic, is there some kind of magic going on? 4) Willow doesn't seem to be a witch, but is Tara? I'm full of questions today.
let me see if I can asnwer all those questions and still not give anything away.
I can wait for it to actually happen, meanwhile I'll speculate.
1) The interaction with Tara's mother was quite lovely. I'm glad that her non-biological mother and she have such a strong bond which includes physical affection. That is quite nice. 2) I'm assuming that Tara's mother's partner holds no power in the tribe and would not be able to assume her responsibilities. 3) Who is conducting those responsibilities now that her mother is incapacitated?
I wanted Tara to have two strong parental figures in this story. I've got so many stories going on where Tara's father is a jerk and I kinda wanted to look at it from a different angle....because Tara's problem in this story doesn't stem from the fact that one half of her parental unit isn't supportive. One thing that interests me is that the Shinty Folk don't seem the anarchist slaughter people type. Maybe Willow has been the victim of bad PR or brainwashing?
Finally... I hate to say this but I will because I always enjoy and respect your stories and your writing. These last two updates seem to have been posted very quickly and not proofread very closely. I noted probably 5-6 errors in each post that I would not have expected. In all those cases, I had to reread to figure out the issue and it intefered with the flow of the story.
I just wanted to drop a note to say that the previous two chapters have now been edited by yours truly
and should now read more smoothly
....I hope.
The little exchange in the beginning speaks volumes. Tara not wanting Willow to leave then blurting out the invitation to stay. Willow keeping her status as "enemy" secret but secretly happy to be staying on a personal level.
The interaction between Tara and her other mother is very sweet, and bittersweet. Tara's biological mother is obviously very sick and the problem of succession looms large.
Lots to think about, lots to come, hopefully smoochies sometime soon, conflict too. Keep it up!

Girl, I don't know how you do it. So impressive!
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