Poetry

[barnabasvamp]

A little depressing maybe, but very well written.



BV

It's the passion in a kiss that gives to it its sweetness; it is the affection in a kiss that sanctifies it.

[Wired vixen]

There is so much depth in these last few poems, as there is always, you are easily one of the best poets on the IE, thanks for sharing such great words







Stace xXx

Light up, light up...As if you have a choice, even if you cannot hear my voice...I'll be right beside you dear.... <3

-Snow Patrol

[Wicked Wicca]

I enjoyed your poems a lot. Really intense... raw emotions. Great work, looking forward to more soon.

[onyxsundrops]

Thank ya kindly for the feedback and comments. I've written something non-sad, depressing. Hope you like it.



Midnight Melody



You were my beginning, untainted

Soft skin, harsh breath upon my neck,

Like midnight hours creeping,

Into the handmade dream,



Surrendered, bare, and painted,

On your temple, too pristine to wreck

The memories quietly sleeping,

Amid the sweetened cream.



It was love that led me to you on bruised

Knees, devoted to your curious touch,

Spilling onto the sheet—our song

Played against the glowing mahogany,



The firmness of your overused

Hips, fingers gripped, yearning to clutch

The fleeting whisper before it was gone,

Drowning in your rhapsody.





Yvonne

[SJ]

Great poem,nice imagery

[Renee85]

You have some really amazing work posted here. You paint these wonderful pictures with your words and I can't seem to stop myself from wanting to read more, it's pretty powerful. I do love the latest one.

__________________

"For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart. It was not my lips you kissed, but my soul." -Judy Garland

"Live as if you were to die tomorrow. Learn as if you were to live forever." -Mahatma Gandhi

[barnabasvamp]

Absolutely beautiful!



BV

It's the passion in a kiss that gives to it its sweetness; it is the affection in a kiss that sanctifies it.

[Patches]

Yvonne,



Sorry to have been so tardy in leaving feedback (my very big bad). Your poems are wonderful. Dark and brooding often carries the most impact - and wow!! what an impact.



Great work!! You've inspired me to unleash some long hidden words.



Cheers!!

Patches

Our wedding vows: Life Love Everlasting, Always Intertwining. - Sunday June 27, 2004 :)

[Wired vixen]

Hey there!



This last one....it was so beautiful *wipes a literal tear*



It was love that led me to you on bruised

Knees, devoted to your curious touch,

Spilling onto the sheet—our song

Played against the glowing mahogany,



I had to read the whole thing over several times and that stanza....amazing....just wow...







Stace xXx

"This is the very ecstasy of love".

-Hamlet

[onyxsundrops]

Removed

[bluewillowwitch]

Hey,
I love the lastest poems. I have to go back and read all the ones that I have missed. I am very bad. I haven't kept up at all.

[SJ]

Like that poem,great writing

[onyxsundrops]

Thanks SJ and Bluewillowwitch for the feedback.

Yvonne

[onyxsundrops]

Removed

[SJ]

Great visualisation in your writing.

[onyxsundrops]

Removed

[vix84]

Wow, I felt a shiver whilst reading that. Thanks so much. You choose your words well and put them together beautifully.

[onyxsundrops]

Removed

[SJ]

Wow,both those poems are great.

[barnabasvamp]

These last 2 were very moving.

BV

[onyxsundrops]

Removed

[SJ]

Wow,amazing poem.

[vix84]

Beautiful poem.

This was my favourite part the first time I read it:

"I felt known beneath her body, felt
these strange hands learning me,

even as I couldn’t know myself. No talk,
I enjoyed the rustling of sheets more

than her voice, more than the stifled whimpers
of the cold world outside, trying to sneak in."

Now I've reread it and have many more favourite parts. But I won't quote them all.

I really enjoy reading your poetry.

[onyxsundrops]

Removed

[barnabasvamp]

Wow, hard to find the words for this one. So many feelings. Wonderful

BV

[SJ]

Lots of different emotions in this poem,great writing.

[onyxsundrops]

Removed

[beanie]

Firstly, I heart your username. Secondly, I don't know why but your poems remind me of Borges. It doesn't make sense, the genres don't really match, but after reading your poems, Borges would just NOT get out of my mind.

I close my eyes, grip the clouds, and pull them down
until powdered fluff covers the morning sun,

that would hafta be my favorite part. The one that kinda made me go

[onyxsundrops]

Removed

[StaceAngel]

I...wow.... I haven't been pulled in by poetry like this in a long time. Yvonne this truly is amazing...

Lucid fuel on your fingers,
I rush to get to you before dawn,

before your nipples soften
and the morning closes your eyes

Its impossible to turn away after reading those lines, you really know how to captivate your readers.

and while your sigh barely reaches through the silence,
and your hand wanders through the sweat on your skin.

I am racing to get there, slipping on the rain soaked sheets,
you’re crashing, fighting hard to save the tears for me,

The imagery is fantastic...i love how this provokes such intense feelings, to sit here and have my legs tense up because i am this person running....amazing.

Please post more soon!

Stace xXx