Continuing Fic: Coming Back (Updated 01/18/08)

[Naeryn]

Hey it was 2am when I was reading, and you didn't give me chance to come back and say "phew!"

No babies. Although babies are cute. None here, move it along, nothing to see.

[tarawhipped]

Hiya Car! I decided to finally get off my ass and leave you some fb, re-read the last two updates, and I'm just at a loss.

I'm still amazed by how well you go back and forth between their child/teen/adult voices, all so real and convincing. You're also really good at the details, like having Tara type "centre" instead of "center." Your Donnie is so cool too....he's the kind of big brother I always wanted (mostly to beat up my big sister, of course).

This story is SO compelling. Even knowing that SOMETHING had happened to make them not communicate for a year did not prepare me for those emails, which were amazingly heartwrenching for such brief notes. I did notice something I hadn't the first time....Buffy's "confess-and-kiss" remark. So Willow recognized her feelings for Tara for what they were, and talked to Bufy about it (at babbling length, no doubt). I read over Sally's assumptions, and think maybe Willow's "I'm-sorry-I'm-a-thoughtless-jerk" remarks could have something to do with Tara revealing a date or something, and Willow thinking she was missing her chance. Then again, she could have had to cancel for a really good opportunity related to her job. I dunno. I could be spazzing and demand an explanation at once, but I refuse to beg....but only cause I know it won't work (and if it would, lemme know; I'll start begging). I just hope the next update gives us some answers, missy, or I'll....well, I won't stop reading, but I may cry....and call your mother and tell her you made me cry.

Watty the Wanker wrote:
Or you can do what Cam did last chapter, the cop-out.

Okay, you WERE there when Watty told me to write that, right?!?! Watty, you big stinker! Update ASAP!
-Cam

[Naeryn]

Update ASAP? You're one to talk Cam.

Where's our GER update? *twitches*

[GayNow]

Okay, Kittens...last set of replies before Chapter 9.

Just so you know...Chapter 9 is shorter than the others...so think of it as an interlude (watson and I call it "sorbet"...cleanses the pallet between main courses).

I'm hoping to have Chapter 10 posted by the end of the weekend.
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Patches

[blockquote]Thanks so much for participating in my thread! I'm so glad you decided to read my story and comment on it. Though, I am sorry that you didn't get your kitchen cleaned.

I’m not a fan of ‘memoir’ style writing, but this has such a unique flavour, I couldn’t help but be drawn in. What struck me was the ‘unique’ voice of each character, which is clear and distinct.

That's probably the best compliment you could give me. Thank you so very much for saying that.

you make writing look easy

Oh, thank you! But I'm sure you and every Kitten here knows that it's anything but easy. All you have to do is ask watson about how anal I am...though it works out, cuz she's just as anal. Fortunately, she and I work well together and share brain cells, so the process is pleasurable.

No worries...the reason behind the disagreement will be revealed in future chapters. You'll probably get to read the argument as well. I wouldn't leave Kittens hanging like that. Though, as I and others have said before, it's really not all that important anymore, is it? I'm a process girl...I want to explore how Willow and Tara deal with the argument and its aftermath more than I want them to rehash it.

Again, thanks so much for your kind words and for reading. I hope I can keep you interested in the story.[/blockquote]
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Miss Kittys Ball O Yarn
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I loved the part in the beginning, when Tara is flipping through the radio stations.

I'm so glad you liked that, Emmy. That's actually one of my favorite parts of the entire fic so far. I don't know why. I just chuckle every time I read it.

Thanks for the nice comments RE: Willow's flashback and thoughts about Tara. That photographic memory of hers! She remembers such detail. I felt I had to bring Willow and Donnie to an understanding of each other...they needed to have a bond. It needed to happen when they were still kids. I'm glad it seemed to work for everyone.

And it was so nice to see that Buffy and Tara had forged their own relationship with each other even though Willow and Tara were not on speaking terms.

I needed to have a bond between Tara and Buffy too. In many ways, Willow and Tara were always an anchor for each other. With the rift in place, they were unable to serve in that capacity...so it made sense for Buffy to step in -- for both of them. We'll get to see more of the Buffy/Tara friendship in future updates.

And then there was the poem. *sigh* how romantic. What a perfect way for Tara to reintroduce herself into Willow's life. And then...sniff sniff, you end it there with two spoken "hi"s.

I love the poem as a device for reconnecting Willow and Tara at that point. I was going to cut it when I decided to post this on its own rather than as a response to my challenge, but I just couldn't. It works too wonderfully to cut it. And, honestly, I thought I would have Kittens threatening to throttle me for ending the chapter that way. So glad that wasn't the case.

Now can I have rightful ownership of the dibs title????

How about a "Mini-dibs" title?

Thanks, Emmy...I so appreciate your words.[/blockquote]
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Wimpy
[blockquote]Yay, Pam! So glad you're still reading. I hope you get your computer back soon. There are so many wonderful stories being updated and written...I would hate for you to miss out! Thanks, Pam. I'm glad you're here.[/blockquote]
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WTF
[blockquote]Thanks so much! I'm glad you're enjoying![/blockquote]
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HalfCamel
[blockquote]No worries about being late, Jackie. Just glad you're here.

Your transitions between past and present, and between POV’s, were so seamless they didn’t feel out of place or awkward.

I'm glad they work for you, Jackie. I've been trying to do a better job with transitions. Hopefully they will get even better with time.

And this:

“M-o-o-o-o-o-m? Are we there yet?!”

I was sitting here staring at this line forever going “What?! Wait…. what?” So, of course, I’m very intrigued by this and I can’t wait til you give us the why and how.

Okay, as I've mentioned in other posts, Tara does not have a kid. She was simply whining to herself and the empty car because she wanted to be there yesterday and not sitting in that car. That's it. There's nothing deep and meaningful there.

Thanks so much, Jackie. I appreciate your kind words.[/blockquote]
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Auburn
[blockquote]Hey, Gemma! So glad you're still with the story. Yay!

Dr. Harold Bishop? Isn't that the guy out of the Australian soap 'Neighbours?'

You know, I honestly have no idea. That's just the name that popped into my head when I needed one for Willow's advisor. Interesting though.

Nice meeting, with Willow savouring the moment after so long you would expect her to go running straight into Tara's arms, but it's been so long that the time is worth remembering, not rushing through.

I wanted to avoid the whole "sorority sisters who haven't seen each other in a whole 20 minutes and just feel the need to squeal and hug when they meet" type of reunion. Willow and Tara are above that...they are beyond that. I wanted it to be simple. I'm glad it worked.

did I read somebody shout 'mo-o-o-o-m' in the back of Tara's car?... wait... I need to go read that again.

Been there...responded to that...done.

Thanks, Gemma. Thanks so much for reading my little story.[/blockquote]
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tarawhipped
[blockquote]

I decided to finally get off my ass and leave you some fb

I knew I shouldn't have brought those Xena DVDs over there! We may not see feedback or an update from you until you get to the end of season 6!

You're also really good at the details, like having Tara type "centre" instead of "center."

You can thank watty for that. I asked her to "make the chapter more British" on Tara's end. LOL So she gave me a few suggestions.

I did notice something I hadn't the first time....Buffy's "confess-and-kiss" remark. So Willow recognized her feelings for Tara for what they were, and talked to Bufy about it (at babbling length, no doubt). I read over Sally's assumptions, and think maybe Willow's "I'm-sorry-I'm-a-thoughtless-jerk" remarks could have something to do with Tara revealing a date or something, and Willow thinking she was missing her chance. Then again, she could have had to cancel for a really good opportunity related to her job. I dunno. I could be spazzing and demand an explanation at once, but I refuse to beg....but only cause I know it won't work (and if it would, lemme know; I'll start begging).

Boy, once the little wheels in your brain start turning, they just don't stop, do they? I'll just say "good guesses" and leave it at that. You'll have to wait for future updates to find out.

Watty the Wanker wrote:
Or you can do what Cam did last chapter, the cop-out.

Okay, you WERE there when Watty told me to write that, right?!?! Watty, you big stinker!

Yeah, she's a stinker...but she's cute...so we'll forgive her.

Thanks so much, Cam! I appreciate you![/blockquote]
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Okay...I think I got everyone...if I missed you, I'm sorry...let me know and I'll grovel at your feet and immediately reply to your feedback.

Megan, I know you had a lot of posts in the thread, but they were more for others than for me. I know you're there and I love ya, Sweetie! Here's your update.

[GayNow]

Title: Coming Back
Author: GayNow (Carleen)
Email: cmspry2@comcast.net
Feedback: Pretty please? Just remember, I leave feedback for you! Okay, maybe not for every update....but I try! And...and...I leave novellas. Okay okay....I'll be happy with a smilie face.
Distribution: Archiving is fine…please let me know where so I can call all my friends and yell, “Look! I’m famous!”
Rating: This part…PG…future parts…PG-13…will there be kisses and smut?…hmmm....dunno....we’ll see. I’ll make sure I give fair warning.
Disclaimer: BtVS characters, concepts and dialog belong to Mutant Enemy, Fox, The WB, UPN and others. The story, however, came out of my delusional little brain.
Summary: AU....no Hellmouth...no magic....no demons...no slayer....Willow and Tara made a solemn promise to each other 8 years ago.
Author’s Notes:

• This fic was inspired by my own fic challenge (Third Time's a Charm). But...well...it sort of took on a life of its own. So, I decided to give it its own thread. I'm nice that way.
• This is my first attempt at fic writing...or posting what I've written, anyway. And I have all of you wonderful kittens to thank for inspiring me. I'm not going to start listing off all of the individual authors, because that would just take too long. You know who you are...you've read my feedback...it's no secret who I worship.
• I have to give special, super-dee-duper thanks to the lovely WATSON for so many things -- for putting up with me...for painstakingly reading chapters and sections and paragraphs and sentences...for dealing with me obsessing over j-u-u-u-u-u-u-st the right word...for serving as co-writer in many many many instances (if it's a REALLY good sentence or phrase...it's probably hers)...for simply being a friend and encouraging me (Okay...encouraging? She was kicking me in the ass is what she was doing!)
• Thoughts in italics
• Thanks to Chris Cook for the super spectacular title graphic!

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Chapter 9

Buffy was still at her desk a couple of hours after she and Xander had returned from lunch. She was going over the same mock-ups for her latest project. Her heart wasn’t into her work, though. Having Willow at her house and telling Xander about Willow and Tara had stirred memories from the past 7 years. It didn’t help matters that the mock-ups in front of her were for the Espresso Pump campaign. She and Willow spent more time at the Espresso Pump while they were in high school than they did at home sometimes. Looking over the graphics for the campaign reminded Buffy of the good times she and her best friend had at the local café.

Buffy looked at the clock on the far wall. Well, they should be together now. Assuming Tara showed up. Oh, she’d better be there. Willow will be devastated if she didn’t show. And I’ll be forced to hunt Tara down and introduce her to pain for hurting my friend! Buffy shook these thoughts out of her head and chuckled at herself. Oh, yeah…little me is gonna get all big, bad and butch. Besides, Tara is my friend too. She’s been hurting just as much as Willow. What happens if she doesn’t show? Where does that put me? In the middle? Oh hell, if what I know about Tara is true – and I have no doubt that it is – she showed up. She and Willow are probably kissing and making up as I speak…um…think. Buffy gave an affirming nod and went back to the mock-ups. The ringing of her telephone broke the blonde’s concentration.

“Buffy Summers…Hi, Mr. Gomboni…Of course, I’m on my way.”

Buffy quickly grabbed a pen and notepad and made her way down the hall to her boss’s office. Why do I feel like I’m being called to Snyder’s office expecting him to suspend me? As she walked, Buffy went over in her head all of the things she could have possibly done to warrant being called to the VP’s office. Try as she might, she couldn’t think of anything…but that didn’t stop her from worrying. Trouble seems to be my middle name. She rounded the corner and came to a stop at the secretary’s desk.

“Hey, Kristine, how’s it going?” Buffy met Kristine on her first day at work for the company and immediately took a liking to the older woman. There was something motherly about the woman that Buffy latched onto.

“Well, hello, Buffy! I’m doing well, thanks. How are you, cutie?”

“I’m fine,” Buffy internally chuckled at Kristine’s term of endearment. “Um, Mr. Gomboni asked to see me.”

“Oh! Well let me announce you.” Kristine picked up her phone and dialed a couple of numbers. “Buffy Summers is here…okie dokie…Go on in, Buffy.”

“Thanks.” Buffy took a deep breath and walked to the door; she knocked a couple of times and then entered the office. “Mr. Gomboni? You wanted to see me, sir?”

“Buffy! Yes, come in. Have a seat. And, if I remember correctly, I told you to please call me Tony…Mr. Gomboni was my father.”

“Of course…Tony…I’m sorry.”

“Good. Now that we have that settled, there are a couple of things I’d like to discuss with you.” Tony leaned forward in his chair and opened a folder sitting on his desk. “First of all, how are things going on the Espresso Pump campaign?”

“Oh, um, really well, I think. I was just looking over the mock-ups when you called. They need to be taken over to Dave for final approval. I was going to do that today before I left.”

“Today? Four days ahead of deadline?” Tony raised an eyebrow…whether in surprise or disbelief, Buffy wasn’t sure.

“Um, well, you see, Mr. Gom-…Tony, the Espresso Pump has been a big part of my life ever since I was in high school. I can count on my left hand the number of days when I didn’t stop by there for a mocha. So that project is really a labor of love as well as...um…labor.” Buffy fidgeted a bit in her chair. God, Willow’s been in town for one day and you’ve picked up her babbling. You couldn’t just say “yes, sir”?

“Impressive, Buffy…very impressive. I’ll look forward to seeing the mock-ups once Dave has approved them. Speaking of Dave, he was just in here a little while ago. We had a fairly lengthy conversation about you.”

Buffy gulped. Here it comes. I wonder if Doublemeat is hiring. “About me?”

“Yes, about you. It seems as though Dave is highly impressed with the work you’ve been doing since coming on board with the company. He said your work on the campaign for The Bronze was some of the best he’s ever seen.”

“Really?” Buffy squeaked. She cleared her throat and focused on bringing her voice back to its normal register. “I mean, wow, thank you!”

“Thank you, Buffy. I can’t tell you how refreshing it is to see such dedication from someone so young. I’ve, um, also heard that you’ve been seen around the office well after closing time. Is this true?”

“Well, yes, sir, I do stay late on some days.”

“Some?” Tony looked at the blonde skeptically.

“Okay, yeah, most days. But, honest, it’s just because I want to make sure that I’m doing a good job. I mean, I’m not one of those people who stick around after everyone leaves just to raid the office supply closet. Really. I just sit at my desk and work…and then…when I’m done…I leave…and I’m just going to be quiet and let you talk now.” Damn you, Willow!

Tony laughed heartily at Buffy’s outburst. After a few moments, he calmed down enough to continue speaking. “I’m well aware that you work when you’re here late, Buffy. Again, I’m impressed with your dedication and work ethic.”

“Thank you, sir.” Buffy let out a sigh of relief. I’m not in trouble.

“Why don’t you take the rest of the afternoon off, Buffy? As a reward for the great work you’ve been doing. If you keep this up, you’ll be running your own campaigns in no time.”

Buffy looked at her boss with a shocked expression. His words soon registered in her brain and she broke out into a large grin. Definitely not in trouble. “Thank you, sir!”

“Tony.”

“Thank you, Tony! Um, I’ll just get those mock-ups over to Dave before I go and-“

“The morning will be fine, Buffy. Go grab your things and enjoy the day.”

“Okay.” Buffy’s smile was permanently affixed to her face as she turned and left the office. She hurried to her desk, turned off her computer, picked up her purse and headed out of the building.

I’ve gotta find Willow!

[FineyMcFine]

Dibs! We need a dibs emoticon.

ETA: Maybe I'm not so much an angst whore as a delayed-gratification whore. I am really enjoying these little side trips where we get to see more and more background and to get all sorts of little details filled in.

I am also loving the Buffy you've created. She's a really good friend, and so supportive of Willow, and also of Tara without, it seems, letting her loyalties get divided by the W&T rift. I also liked the humorous self-reference about "little old me getting all big, bad, and butch."

That also clears up the mystery of what the campaign was that she wrote email to Willow about. It was the Bronze!

Loving the sorbet. Now on with the steak!

[AntigoneUnbound]

Silver medal!

ETA: OK, I'm back. You know, this dibs game is fun! I think I'll try it at my next orgy...

I like this Buffy that you're crafting, Car. She raises a question that many of us have faced: what do I do when two people I love are in conflict? I enjoy seeing her POV, b/c not only does it give us a new and useful look into Willow and Tara's actions as seen by someone outside their relationship, but it also makes us more invested in her as a character. (My first, and very jaded, thought was that Tony was gonna put the moves on her.) Very nice touch with the "Kristine" element, too--something motherly, indeed!

And look at you, making us wait to see our girls in action! Not that our imaginations won't strive mightily to fill in the blanks, mind you...

I wonder what Buffy's gonna do with her afternoon off...?

Great stuff, Car. I so enjoy reading your work.

Mary

[Naeryn]

Third place isn't too bad.

... and of course, you couldn't possibly show us Willow and Tara in this update, could you?

Very well done. I loved Buffy's 'big, bad and butch' comment. Reminds me of the remark about flannel I made to my mother, some joke or other, and she just goes, "What? but what does sexual orientation have to do with fabric?" I, of course, burst out laughing... she repeated herself about three times, each greeted with new gales of laughter. It was just hilarious. You had to be there.

Anywho... Please, please, please let there be W/T goodness in the next update!

And of course I leave comments for other people. I have to, when I read their feedback too. And it's a sign that I really like your fic when I read other people's feedback.

[tarawhipped]

Darn you and your plot-advancing, no W/T ineraction update!!! Harrumph!

I admit I was wondering what sort of campaign Buffy and Willow were referring to before in their emails. I couldn't figure out what election could have happened around then that they could possibly be happy about. My first response to Buffy's last thought was "oh no you DON'T need to go find Willow!" but then I remembered the rules of the challenge that inspired this, and sighed deeply. Now I'm actually looking forward to seeing what she has to say.

I knew I shouldn't have brought those Xena DVDs over there! We may not see feedback or an update from you until you get to the end of season 6!

More like my wife won't be paying me any attention until she's through season 6! That said, I might actually get MORE work done!

And hey MEGAN!! Yes YOU! Mock me and my ASAP NOW, why don't you! And you're one to talk, smartass.

Great work, Car, really.
-Cam

[YMKA]

You did it Car.....you really did.....

all I have for you is..... ....

I might add something AFTER I recover.....

[singgirl]

Thank you, you have no idea how much I needed a happy update right now... really.

[grimlock72]

Having never read the challenged this sprung from appearantly I'm totally unaware of any rule. Could it be that Buffy has to interupt at the worst possible time ? (then again that time can't be this afternoon, too fast)

"Damn you, Willow!" made me chuckly, Buffy is a very fast/speedy girl. Doesn't give herself time to stop talking at times, so that fits . Staying late at work on most days really isn't a good idea, it's an indication something else is wrong. It's nice that Buffy's boss is pleased with her work, but less overtime would be good for Buffy me thinks.

Since Willow has not called Buffy in tears I'll assume the talk didn't go too badly. Now I'm curious what they're talking about of course, but you knew that .

[cebrau]

This was so good Car!!!!
Althoug I would have prefered some W/T interaction

I love it, I love it!!!

Great work..

Ceci

[JustSkipIt]

Hey Car,
Well I say Grr Arggghhh about it being a Buffy update. I mean I get it. At first I was like, "what? Buffy's going to find Willow? How rude of her. I can't believe she'd interrupt them." But then I realized that she's got to say something Anya-like. It's nice that she's such a source of support to the point of being concerned about what to do if Tara didn't show and being in the middle.

This update is quite smooth. One aspect I like is that it would seem that you've given most of the clues about Willow's cluefullness (about being gay I mean) to Buffy. That's nice and very smooth.

Ok, nothing more intelligent to say. Have a great one.

[sam]

Hehe..cute buffy. Great update...I hope the meeting went well..Love sam xx

[kindagay]

That was mean

Okay, firstly, I must apologise for not leaving feedback for the previous update, I started to type it, but then my computer went wonky & then I forgot that I hadn't actually finished typing & posting my feedback.
However - I loved the meeting, it was just perfect & I do remember that I wanted to tell you that your updates are like a breath of fresh air.

Secondly, oh yeah, a quick, Yay! Update

& now, I can get to the actual feedback for this update

I enjoyed it lots, of course I did, I always enjoy your updates, but, the complete absence of Willow & Tara was just mean.
It was nice to find out what's going with Buffy though - I'm glad she's doing well at work.

Oh hell, if what I know about Tara is true – and I have no doubt that it is – she showed up. She and Willow are probably kissing and making up as I speak…um…think

Oh, what's this? Buffy maybe knows something about Tara? Could it be that Tara's gay? & in love with Willow?
& I really hope Willow & Tara are getting with the kissing & making up, 'cos you know, as a very wise woman once said, making up is the best part.

I love that Buffy had 'picked up' Willow's babbling.

I’ve gotta find Willow!

I do hope that won't involve Buffy interrupting Willow & Tara's big reunion? Though, given that you're kinda mean & tease-y, it probably will.

I look forward to the next update, maybe you'll even treat us to some Willow & Tara goodness?

Hugs
Jeanne

[onyxsundrops]

Hey Auto,

I thought I had missed a lot, but it was just vast sections of feedback. So, what can I say that hasn't already been said? Not much. I loved the last two updates, especially the "Pixie" parts. My brother used to call me something similar. Anyway, like everyone else, I was hoping for some W&T interaction, but Buffy's POV was needed and just as appreciated. I like the way you've created/molded each of the characters. Keep up the great work!

Yvonne

[terra21]

Top 10 Reasons why I haven't left feedback:

10. I've been over at "Caged Angels" hitting the refresh button and waiting for an update all this time.
9. I had my internet service terminated because it was either the net or gasoline for my car.
8. I've been sitting on my ass with Cam playing The Sims
7. I've been having alot of sex (ok, that's an blatant lie)
6. My dog ate my LAN connection
5. I've been reading "As Time Goes By" and it's like crack, I hit it until I pass out then I hit it again until I pass out and now the pipe is empty man, and I just need an update, just one update man, that's all.
4. I've been tied to Amber Benson's bed??
3. I've been providing 24 hr on call tech support to meretricious for her new cell phone.
2. I've been held captive in a strip bar, post KR party.
1. The Sun was too bright.


Fortunately for me I have overcome all these obstacles and caught up on this lovely fic. I like all the "code talk" in the emails. I can't wait for all that to be revealed. The update before this had me crying, yes, there were tears. The long distance relationship situation hit home, been there done that, it sucked BAD! You captured it well Car. I could really feel my heart pounding as Tara finally made it to the park and saw the flash of red. Then you spank me. You spank me with a Buffy-non-W/T update. Ok, I deserved the spanking for being little late. Great story Car, you put lots of details in that weave the story together perfectly.

[Leafsdude]

*Points at Terra's review*

I was with her...I can vouch for her story, and she for mine...

*Tells Terra to play along...*

So, anyway, about this update...Well, short and sweet kinda covers it. I can't wait to find out what Buffy walks in on. Hopefully it's not angst-y, but something tells me it'll be angst-y. I dunno, I have angst radar, or maybe I just know that angst is always the first goal of any story writer.

Anyway, I love this review, and I love Buffy and the contagious Willow-babble disease. Uber-cute!

Now, more updates! NOW! Please? With a cherry on top? *Begs*

[LesbianJedi87]

"comes rushing in with a bleeding head" ugggh I didnt leave fb when I read this!! And my punishment! "points at head" It's fair I guess!

CAR! "waves" An update!
This update was interesting indeed, but it wasn't the update I WANTED!! I wanted kisses and gay cute love from Willow and Tara! Alas I never get what I want! :( But that will come soon, right?? Ya nodding? Hm??? GOOD! hehe.

I like your Buffy, in alot of stories she's like this slutty man-doing person (like Faith)and I never like her much, or she is very ditzy and boring (like cordelia) but you have made her very interesting and very dedicated to what she does, and I you for making her have some character!

On that note, I expect some W/T loving in the next update! And no more cell throwing woman! "picks up brain particles and leaves"

And btw: UPDATE SOON!

[watty]

If I don't do dibs then I get slack with the feedback, then again this whole week is watty's slack-off week.

What can I say about this chapter? It's a fantastic interlude, Willow and Tara just met in the park and exchanged greetings. Now cut to Buffy -- on the surface it's jarring, but when it's executed in your inimitable style, it's so smooth and fits so well. Cos here's more backstory about the last 7 years, and Buffy's friendship with both Willow and Tara. It's good to have Buffy in this mix, cos she's not on any side, but on both their sides. Plus she's in favor of

kissing and making up

I like her.

Did this chapter start off as sorbet? *thinks* No, it didn't. But it is a sort of sorbet, even though it's more like a 5 gallon tub of sugary-sweet goodness. More to dig into and enjoy.

Good stuff, cupcake.

The Sun was too bright.

Oh.my.fucking.god. T, I laughed so hard. Your list of excuses (yeah, I said excuses, cos where's my Lamplight and KR feedback?!?! And I let you come to TARCon even though you're neither the Chicago contingent nor one of the Marys) is both hilarious and so true, though I wondered about #7 until your disclaimer about it being a blatant lie. Heehee.
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[Willow~Rosenberg]

That was sneaky. I'm here expecting some W/T talking and catching up and we have a Buffy-filled update. I liked that we have someone else's perspective on the Willow/Tara ordeal. I just wonder if Buffy realizes how accurate she could be with the "kissing and making up" comment. I'm also glad that she didn't get the chance to interrupt their reconnecting thus far. I am looking forward to seeing what you do with our girls reconnecting and admitting that they are in love with each other.

[Artemis]

Interesting - clears up some of the mystery about Willow and Buffy's 'secret project' they discussed via email previously. I was a little initially at realising that this wouldn't be a Willow/Tara chapter, but I really like the version of Buffy you've got her. She's so hard-working and helpful, yet worried about whether she's doing enough - it's really nice seeing her get a reward for everything she's done. And her perspective on Willow and Tara (together and individually) adds a lot of depth to proceedings.

Now, meanwhile back at the park...?

[Emms]

Oh No! Buffy's gotta find Willow!?? I have an Idea that she's gonna say something Anya-esque when she gets there Anyway.....Great update Car! I'm sorry that I'm so late with the feedback. My Wednesdays, Thursdays and Fridays are usually pretty hectic, so making with feedback any more above "I liked it lots" and "Great Update" can be a little tough.

So...onward with the feedback. This was unequivocally the best "Buffy" centered update I have ever read, in any fic, at any time. Usually I'm not so interested with Buffy's character and have a hard time getting interested no matter how well she's written. (I never watched BTVS for Buffy....it was always about Willow....and after a while, about Tara as well.) But I can't help but find myself really very interested in your Buffy. She's so multi layered (which is rare in fics) And I'm finding that I enjoy her a lot more when she has a "real" life and isn't dusting vamps.

And....do I sense a little flirting going on between our very own Buffy and Kristine ? .........cause that could be very interesting.

well.....that's all I've got for now.

xoxo
Emms

[beanie]

Apologies for just never ever leaving pretty words. I'm a tres lazy person.

But okay, so I was surprised when the chapter was about Buffy, because in addition to being lazy, I'm impatient. But then after reading for a minute I was "Awww"ing my brains out. She shows an insecure side of herself at work and around new people whereas she seems the always confident one in the later seasons of the show. Oh and

“Well, hello, Buffy! I’m doing well, thanks. How are you, cutie?”

I LOVE when older work people do that. It makes me feel so coddled. (That was the part when I aww'ed and my brains . . . -splat-)

And Buffy-babble. Who knew? The way Buffy's mind was constantly on Willow. Worrying about Willow before the meeting and her relationship post- Tara and Willow reunion and then rushing to meet with Willow afterwards. God, she's like the best friend ever. Um . . . can I have her?

[Krokador]

wow, Buffy-babble

But... no Willow/Tara action? not even a hint? Thats cruel

Can't wait to read the next part, keep up your good work I love that fic

[GayNow]

Here are some feedback replies, Kittens. You all continue to overwhelm me. Thank you so much!
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SallyMcFine
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I am really enjoying these little side trips where we get to see more and more background and get all sorts of little details filled in.

I'm so glad someone likes them! I guess I just like bouncing around and keeping people guessing. I'm glad it's working.

I am also loving the Buffy you've created.

Thanks, Sally. I kinda like her too.

I also liked the humorous self-reference about "little old me getting all big, bad, and butch."

That's one of my favorite lines.

That also clears up the mystery of what the campaign was that she wrote email to Willow about. It was the Bronze!

hmmmmm....are you sure?

Thanks so much, Sally. As always, I'm happy to see your feedback![/blockquote]
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AntigoneUnbound
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You know, this dibs game is fun! I think I'll try it at my next orgy...

Don't forget the chocolate syrup.

I'm really glad you like Buffy. I had to make her a better friend than she turned into in the series. I really think JW and ME did her an injustice.

(My first, and very jaded, thought was that Tony was gonna put the moves on her.)

Tony Gomboni (say it out loud) is your atypical Dego...and I should know...I've got a family chock-full of typical Degos.

Thank you so much, Mary. I'm so glad you're enjoying the story. [/blockquote]
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Naeryn
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and of course, you couldn't possibly show us Willow and Tara in this update, could you?

Nope!

I loved Buffy's 'big, bad and butch' comment.

Heehee!

Please, please, please let there be W/T goodness in the next update!

I'll think about it.

And it's a sign that I really like your fic when I read other people's feedback.

Aaawww, thanks, Megan! [/blockquote]
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tarawhipped
[blockquote]

Darn you and your plot-advancing, no W/T ineraction update!!! Harrumph!

My first response to Buffy's last thought was "oh no you DON'T need to go find Willow!" but then I remembered the rules of the challenge that inspired this, and sighed deeply. Now I'm actually looking forward to seeing what she has to say.

And you're that sure I'm sticking to the rules of the challenge?

I might actually get MORE work done!

WOOT! Gotta light a fire under your ass!

Thank you, Cam. I'm so glad you're still enjoying the story...even if there is more Buffy than you expected. [/blockquote]
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YMKA
[blockquote]I have no idea what I did...but thanks for keeping up with the story, Marina. [/blockquote]
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singgirl
[blockquote]Glad my update could help. Thanks for reading![/blockquote]
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grimlock72
[blockquote]Challenge Rule: Buffy has to say something Anya-esque.

Staying late at work on most days really isn't a good idea, it's an indication something else is wrong. It's nice that Buffy's boss is pleased with her work, but less overtime would be good for Buffy me thinks.

I think Buffy will realize that her hard work has paid off and she can go home earlier now and then. No worries.

Thanks so much for keeping up with the story, grimmy. I appreciate your feedback so much.[/blockquote]
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cebrau
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I would have prefered some W/T interaction

Me too!

Thanks so much, ceci![/blockquote]
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JustSkipIt
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But then I realized that she's got to say something Anya-like.

Does she really have to? Hmmm....

One aspect I like is that it would seem that you've given most of the clues about Willow's cluefullness (about being gay I mean) to Buffy. That's nice and very smooth.

Thank you, Debra!

As always, your feedback is like an ice-cold glass of water on a hot summer day...so refreshing. Thanks![/blockquote]
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sam
[blockquote]Thanks for reading, sam![/blockquote]
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kindagay
[blockquote]No worries about missing fb on an update. I realize RL stuff gets in the way.

do remember that I wanted to tell you that your updates are like a breath of fresh air.

Aaawww thanks!

the complete absence of Willow & Tara was just mean.

Oh, what's this? Buffy maybe knows something about Tara? Could it be that Tara's gay? & in love with Willow?

I think Buffy suspects more than knows when it comes to Tara's feelings for Willow. Buffy just believes that Tara is a kind person who wouldn't let Willow down.

I do hope that won't involve Buffy interrupting Willow & Tara's big reunion? Though, given that you're kinda mean & tease-y, it probably will.

maybe you'll even treat us to some Willow & Tara goodness?

Maybe.

Thanks, Jeanne! I appreciate your kind words.[/blockquote]
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onyxsundrops
[blockquote]Thanks, Evy! I really appreciate your kind words. I promise this chapter will be necessary in future chapters. I wouldn't throw it in just to be mean. [/blockquote]
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terra21
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8. I've been sitting on my ass with Cam playing The Sims

She'll let you near the computer?

5. I've been reading "As Time Goes By" and it's like crack, I hit it until I pass out then I hit it again until I pass out and now the pipe is empty man, and I just need an update, just one update man, that's all.

Oh I know that feeling, dude!

4. I've been tied to Amber Benson's bed??

Don't we all wish?!

1. The Sun was too bright.

Very bright! Radiant, in fact!

The update before this had me crying, yes, there were tears.

Aaawww!

You spank me with a Buffy-non-W/T update. Ok, I deserved the spanking for being little late.

You enjoyed that spanking. I know you did.

Terra, thank you so much! I appreciate your time and kind words.[/blockquote]
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Leafsdude
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I can't wait to find out what Buffy walks in on. Hopefully it's not angst-y, but something tells me it'll be angst-y.

Hmmm....maybe...maybe not.

Thanks so much, David. I'm glad you're continuing to enjoy the story.[/blockquote]
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LesbianJedi87
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I wanted kisses and gay cute love from Willow and Tara!

Don't we all?

I like your Buffy, in alot of stories she's like this slutty man-doing person (like Faith)and I never like her much, or she is very ditzy and boring (like cordelia) but you have made her very interesting and very dedicated to what she does, and I you for making her have some character!

Thanks, Rose. I just needed to have "the Buffy that could have been" in my story.

And no more cell throwing woman!

You started it!

Thanks again, Rose![/blockquote]
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watson
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Now cut to Buffy -- on the surface it's jarring, but when it's executed in your inimitable style, it's so smooth and fits so well.

Thanks, watty. As you know, this bit of information about Buffy will come in handy later.

Did this chapter start off as sorbet?

No...but since the previous chapters turned into 7 course meals, this one now feels like sorbet.

As always, thank you, watty. You're the force that keeps my feet so firmly planted on the Earth. I'm sure I would have been overwhelmed without you to ground me.[/blockquote]
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Willow~Rosenberg
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I just wonder if Buffy realizes how accurate she could be with the "kissing and making up" comment

She has a pretty good idea...she's not 100% positive, but she's gotten good vibes.

Thanks for continuing to read![/blockquote]
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Artemis
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clears up some of the mystery about Willow and Buffy's 'secret project' they discussed via email previously.

Does it?

And her perspective on Willow and Tara (together and individually) adds a lot of depth to proceedings.

Yeah, she's going to be a helpful force.

Thank you, Chris. I always appreciate your comments. You're worth your weight in gold, my friend.[/blockquote]
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Miss Kittys Ball O Yarn
[blockquote]*sings* "When the moon hits your eye like a big pizza pie...that's Emmy's feedback!" (Gimme a break...I'm in a weird mood.)

This was unequivocally the best "Buffy" centered update I have ever read, in any fic, at any time.

Wow! Thanks, Emmy!

And I'm finding that I enjoy her a lot more when she has a "real" life and isn't dusting vamps.

I think so too.

do I sense a little flirting going on between our very own Buffy and Kristine ?

Oh no...no flirting there. Uh huh. Kristine's a "motherly" type. My shoutout to Kristine Sutherland. That's it.

Thank you, Emmy. I so appreciate your kind words.[/blockquote]
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beanie
[blockquote]Thank you so much for your nice feedback. I'm glad you liked the "Buffy sorbet." She's an important part of this story, so I had to give her some solo time.

God, she's like the best friend ever. Um . . . can I have her?

Sure...if you can catch her![/blockquote]
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Krokador
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no Willow/Tara action? not even a hint? Thats cruel

Aaawww I'm sorry. Don't cry.

I'm so glad you're enjoying my story. Thanks so much for your kind words.[/blockquote]

[spells42]

GayNow
Oh darn! I thought there might have been an update when I saw your entry.

I've been enjoying this story (along with many others on the board) but no fb before now. I'm slowly gaining confidence in that (I don't appear to have trod on anybody's toes yet.) so .. here goes.

The correspondence selection is an interesting and intriguing way to span the long time they spend apart. It creates as many questions as it answers, such as - are they or do they realise they're gay, do they know if the other is gay, have they said anything about or do they realise their feelings for each other (saying how much you miss someone doesn't count; the same thing could be said to a friend or even to the guy that makes you the perfect coffee in your favourite cafe!). I know we can assume an awful lot given the forum we're in, and the fact that they've sustained their friendship over 8(?) years of just writing, but what twisted path will you take to get us there, hmmm? I'm dying to know what the big falling out was about.

The flashbacks to the origin of the swing were sweet. So nice to see Tara in a happy family setting (even tho' her mum's sick). Interesting also to see Willow learn something about sibling dynamics from Donnie and Tara.

Buffy's a much more interesting and likable character in this fic compared to the later seasons of BtVS. She's being a good best friend to Willow, but WHY is she headed to find Willow when she knows she's in the middle of the long awaited reunion with Tara. She must know Tara well enough to realise that she would never let Willow think she was going to meet her if she wasn't. (Umm, hope you can untangle the pronoun mess)

Looking forward to the next update.

BTW, I loved Terra's list of excuses. My response to #4 was the same as yours.

[GayNow]

spells42
[blockquote]Welcome to my thread! I'm so glad you decided to post some feedback. I've seen your posts on other threads and have enjoyed reading them.

I'm so glad that you're enjoying my story. It's been an interesting process, let me tell ya. I'm so used to writing non-fiction (academic stuff) and this is a completely different process. But I'm really enjoying it. It's so nice to have such a wonderful group of people read what I have to write -- this is such an accepting community.

The reason behind the disagreement will come out in a future update. And there will be more flashbacks and some excerpts from Willow's and Tara's diaries. So we'll get to see more of what transpired during their 8 years apart. And, of course, more W/T sweetness is to come.

Thanks again for your kind words. I really appreciate them.[/blockquote]

[Emms]

My feedback is the same as the moon hitting your eyes like a big pizza pie?

xoxo
Emms