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 Post subject: Poem: Mistress (Inspired by Justskipit's Please)
PostPosted: Sun Mar 02, 2008 12:13 am 
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Title: Mistress
Author: Moani (Chachumera)
Disclaimers: There is no way in hell I'll be able to write as well as Deb o_O So, yeah, I don't own the fic Please. Nope. No siree

Hi All. I made me a little poem. I know it must be weird that I made a poem about a smut fic, but I just thought of it in a different point of view.

This poem is about giving yourself to someone completely, regardless of what they might do to you. It's about trust and love...

Well, it's a poem so I guess that means that different people will get their own interpretation of it. Because as my Creative Writing teacher says, "There is no wrong answer."


Note: I know I repeat myself a lot in this poem, but one of my favorite forms of writing is the kind that repeat, so I hope you like it. :blush


Thank you to Debra for writing such amazing fanfics :kgeek



Mistress

I kneel before you, Mistress.

My hands belong to only you, Mistress.
Please take them as if they were your own.
Use them for whatever will please you, Mistress.
My hands are yours.

My legs and feet belong only to you, Mistress.
Please take them as your own.
I will move them only at your command.
Mistress, my legs and feet are only yours.

My body belongs only to you, Mistress.
Please use it as your own.
Use it for whatever will displease you to do.
Mistress, my body is only yours.

I belong only to you, Mistress.
Please give me your commands.
I only live because you wish it, Mistress.
My life belongs to you.

Without you, I am nothing, Mistress.

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Click here to read Please by JustSkipIt.

Please, please, please tell me what you think :)

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 Post subject: Re: Poem: Mistress (Inspired by Justskipit's Please)
PostPosted: Mon Mar 03, 2008 5:51 am 
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Great poem!


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 Post subject: Re: Poem: Mistress (Inspired by Justskipit's Please)
PostPosted: Thu Mar 06, 2008 8:40 pm 
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To me it felt less like a poem than a prayer...the sub kneeling at her mistress's feet, worshiping her Goddess and pledging her ultimate devotion with not just all her heart but every cell of her being, every corner of her soul...very cool and I say this as both a great admirer of the original fic and as many no doubt are aware from reading my stuff, someone who is no stranger to the dynamic...brava!

:kdevil Sandi


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 Post subject: Re: Poem: Mistress (Inspired by Justskipit's Please)
PostPosted: Mon Mar 10, 2008 1:54 am 
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SJ wrote:
Great poem!


Thank you!

umgaynow wrote:
To me it felt less like a poem than a prayer...the sub kneeling at her mistress's feet, worshiping her Goddess and pledging her ultimate devotion with not just all her heart but every cell of her being, every corner of her soul...very cool and I say this as both a great admirer of the original fic and as many no doubt are aware from reading my stuff, someone who is no stranger to the dynamic...brava!

Sandi


Wow. I had a smile stretched from ear to ear while reading this

Yeah, it is. I'm happy that you saw it that way `cause that's kind of what I was aiming for.

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 Post subject: Re: Poem: Mistress (Inspired by Justskipit's Please)
PostPosted: Thu Mar 20, 2008 8:45 am 
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That's good. *shivers*

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