"Bitter" a poem

[boo]

i'm not so sure about this, but... here goes. please tell me what you think, the good, the bad, the awful, i'll take it all.

i don't know what my inspiration is. i'm listening to tori amos and talking to a friend, and i started writing that. and now it's here. rip me to shreds.

"bitter"

bleeding crimson
for her
for me again
bitter
so bitter
taste in my mouth

tender
so sweet
slips away
between fingers
out of my grasp
gone

she's gone

bitter
so bitter
taste in my mouth

she's gone

[imperfectpixie]

aww i love that! ooo. you rock

[Quill]

Very nice. The repition is very powerful...I can almost taste it...*wink*

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"I'm a very self-centered poet...all of my poems are about 'I'. I can just picture it now, the title of my first book of poetry will be: 'An egocentric book of self-centered poems by someone arrogant enough to think someone would want to spend money on a book of poems about her selfish, boring existence'."
~"Josephine"

[boo]

gasp.

o me! thanks for responses so far. i categorize myself as one who is very much like tara, so i was afraid to post.

but you've made me happy.

[This message has been edited by boo (edited January 07, 2002).]

[Quill]

you have nothing to fear here boo...we love this kind of stuff...keep it coming!

[aladdin]

I liked this. I'm just not sure if you are not trying to put too much meaning in it with this schoice of words.
But I can be wrong.

[boo]

i guess i could be putting more meaning than intended. i try to leave my writing open-ended, and often get reffered to as vague. but... i like to let the reader think what they like. so if you thought it had a lot of meaning, then yes it did. =)

sorry if i confused you.

[Pixie-Muso]

Hey boo! Quill's right, you dont have anything to fear by posting here. Kitties always give great responses to creative works! I like your poem too .

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"...the hardest thing in this world is to live in it..."
~Buffy, The Gift.

[The Next Tara Maclay]

Very nice Boo!!!