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My attempt at a poem

Postby so why so sad » Tue Jan 13, 2004 2:28 pm

I can't write really but here is my attempt....:blush



Closure



All I need is closure to make me feel good again.

Is this too much to ask?

Just think, the crying inside would stop,

The upset and tears would be a million miles away.



Why is closure so hard to achieve?

You would think these things would be easy to resolve.

These day to day things people experience everyday,

Usual happenings.



Not knowing how to close this chapter is enough.

Why do I feel I am the only one like this?

I know everyone else has troubles too,

How do they close the door?



All I need is closure to make me feel good again,

Is this too much to ask?

Just think, the crying inside would stop,

The upset and tears would be a million miles away.



An objective view would help.

Someone on the outside to look in and see.

Guidance when I feel I am lost in a maze,

Missing inside the turmoil of changing emotions.



What I want is for someone to take me away.

Float up high on a cloud,

Far from the sadness and stress of this place,

Look down on the madness instead of being involved.



All I need is closure to make me feel good again,

Is this too much to ask?

Just think, the crying inside would stop,

The upset and tears would be a million miles away



Can someone please help me close this door?

Or is this something to be done alone?

Will anyone come and take me away from this?

Is there a cloud float away on?



All I need is closure to make me feel good again,

Is this too much to ask?

Just think, the crying inside would stop,

The upset and tears would be a million miles away



To accumulate merit and wisdom

so why so sad
 


Re: My attempt at a poem

Postby sam darls » Tue Jan 13, 2004 3:45 pm

This is really beautiful..and you say you can't write!! :flower Love sammi xx

"Sometimes things happen between people that you don't really expect. And sometimes the things that are important are the ones that seem the weirdest or the most wrong. And those are the ones that change your life." - Jessie Sammler (Evan Rachel Wood)

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Re: My attempt at a poem

Postby willowsgirl » Tue Jan 13, 2004 7:16 pm

Wow, if this is just an attempt then...wow :)

This was really good stuff, I really enjoyed it. Looking forward to reading more.



Stacey xx

Tara ignored him. "Your interruption has left me high and, well... I hardly think dry is the word." Returning home by tempest duer

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Re: My attempt at a poem

Postby SJ » Wed Jan 14, 2004 1:41 am

Liked your poem,thanks for sharing :read

SJ
 


Re: My attempt at a poem

Postby so why so sad » Wed Jan 14, 2004 11:43 am

Thank you :blush



Glad you liked it. :) I will have a go at writing something more. :flower

To accumulate merit and wisdom

so why so sad
 


Re: My attempt at a poem

Postby TaraBaby77 » Wed Jan 14, 2004 8:16 pm

Great stuff!!! I like this poem. I thank you for sharing... Keep them comin' kay??? Once again, good job. =)

Aaron

'TaraBaby77'


"It's about two people,
regardless of sex, who love each other and treat each other with compassion and
respect."

TaraBaby77
 


Re: My attempt at a poem

Postby shadowygirl » Thu Jan 15, 2004 6:14 am

HEY!!!!!! :bigwave :bigwave



:party :bounce :bounce :party



You said you can't write ?!?!?! OMG you soo can and you have to do it more cause I totally loved the way you wrote that its beautiful and sad and just wow :banana



More soon :pray :flirt



pllllleeeeeeeeease :whistle



Luv April

:pride :kitty

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Re: My attempt at a poem

Postby soluna350 » Thu Jan 15, 2004 6:58 am

Great poem! I usually don't reply, but that was really great.

Sol

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Re: My attempt at a poem

Postby so why so sad » Fri Jan 16, 2004 10:19 am

Thank you so much.



OK. I will try and write some more. I write from my heart and this one was sad and hard to write but I am very glad you liked it! :blush :)



Thank you again. :kiss :flower

To accumulate merit and wisdom

so why so sad
 


Re: My attempt at a poem

Postby Guinevere » Tue Jan 27, 2004 10:11 pm

Your poem really resonates with me, I so understand what it feels like to need that closure. You really did capture it perfectly.





Guinevere

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