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Developing: Wolves of the Sea

Postby Still Waters T » Fri May 26, 2006 8:02 pm

Against my better judgment :hmm I've decided to just go for it and post something I posted about in the Initial Ideas thread almost exactly a year ago. I like taking my time, :P plus I really didn't think I'd ever have the guts to post this, ...but then I joined a fanfic RPG (also against my better judgment) :laugh a couple months ago and I figured that if I can join that and be an RPG roleplayer, then I can definately post this and see if anyone likes it or not.

Thoughts and comments on whatever I can change and improve is greatly appreciated. If anyone wants to be my personal beta reader for this fic - awesome! :)

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Re: Developing: Wolves of the Sea

Postby Still Waters T » Fri May 26, 2006 8:09 pm

Title: Wolves of the Sea
Author: Still Waters T a.k.a. Livvy
e-mail: livvy_82@hotmail.com
Disclaimer: Joss Whedon and UPN own Buffy the Vampire Slayer in totality. Joss Whedon and the WB own Angel: the Series. No profit is made from this fanfiction and no copyright infringement is intended.
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Pairings: W/T, X/A, B/L
Rating: R? :hmm
Summary: Willow “the Red” Haraldsdóttir is a Norse earl’s daughter, and thus a powerful Viking. Tara is the youngest daughter of an Irish High King in Lough Neagh, and a healer. What happens when the Vikings come to raid the Northern parts of Ireland, and the two of them happen to cross paths?
Note # 1: There’s supposed to be stories of female Viking warriors, but in that case I don’t think it was usual, and it was supposed to be forbidden (look to Note # 2), but there’s a difference between there being a law against something, and actually following said law. So I wanted to explore the idea of Willow as a Viking, even though she is teeny tiny.
Note # 2: In real Viking times an Icelandic law says that if a woman dresses in men’s clothing, or cuts her hair like a man, or carries weapons to be different from others, then the punishment is limited lawlessness. But I choose to disregard this law since Willow is in fact a Viking who goes into battles, so she needs weapons to fight, and pants (don’t want her tripping over her dress now do we?).

Slight warning: There will be a bit of violence and killings in this fic.

(Thoughts are in Italics)

Prologue:

Lindisfarne – Year 793 AD

A monk shouted out, “Ships!” Other monks around him turned to where he was staring. Out at sea, rapidly speeding toward the shore along the monastery, were several black ships. From where the monks stood they could see shields covering the sides of the ship, and weapons glinting menacingly.

With a sinking feeling in their stomachs, the monks ran panicked towards the monastery. With savage roars the raiders from the sea followed them inside.

And as suddenly as they had appeared, the raiders disappeared out to sea again with what they had come for. Back on the island, monks down by the shore lay face down in the water, and the monks who had made it to the church had been hacked down. Some lay there clutching the altar.

Harald Thorgislsson leaned against the rail of one of the ships and patted himself on the back on a successful raid. He could make a career out of this. None of his men had been killed. He looked down by his feet at the man laying there with a bleeding stomach. He turned back to the view of the shrinking monastery. None dead, just a few nicks and scratches, he thought to himself.

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Lough Neigh - Year 839 AD (August)

Standing neck-deep in water staring at a strange red haired woman staring back at her, Tara was starting to regret desperately needing to get away from everyone and everything for the afternoon. No matter how good she was at dealing with things in the village, she still needed some time alone, to let nature soothe her, and center herself before going back to the noise that was the village.

So she had taken a walk. But because of her fatigue the last few days, she hadn’t been up for a long walk, and went down along a path leading to a lake. She had planned on sitting there and collecting herself. Just sit there, close her eyes, listen to the birds sing and the water softly lap up onto the grass at her feet, feel the wind gently graze her skin, and feel the warm rays of the sun on her face. However with the lateness of the afternoon came the suffocating heat. So she had taken a swim, and it had been wonderful lying on her back just floating through the water. Letting the water move gently against her body, and for the time being, forget about the harsh reality that was her life.

Something had made her open eyes, and reality had come crashing back in the form of a red-haired woman standing on the other side of the bank openly leering at her. In the shock of it she managed to dunk her head under water.

Coughing out water, she tried standing up properly, while self-consciously trying to cover herself up. With all the mossy and slippery branches at the bottom of the lake, the task wasn’t as easy as she would have hoped at that moment. Collecting herself while standing neck-deep in the water, she really wished the water was less see-through.

The woman was dressed in a deep blue tunic and tight-fitting brown pants that fit her nicely. From the looks of her rather dusty and blood spattered pants she looked as if she had just been in a battle.

A short menacing sword hung from her belt. She had a bow across her chest, and as if that wasn’t enough, a dagger was horizontally attached to her belt toward the front.

The redhead stood there silently, with her thumbs hooked in her belt, looking very relaxed. Tara noticed some odd tattoos on the back of the redhead’s hands.

The silence was unsettling, but Tara took the opportunity to take a closer look at the stranger. The redhead’s shoulder length hair was damp, but it framed her face nicely with the little curls here and there. Her eyes, a paler green than the color of grass, looked intelligent and full of secrets.

“Wh-who are y-you?” she sqeaked. Oh hellfire, I should have stayed in the village.

Scanning the wooden area behind Tara, the redhead asked: “Are you alone?”

“Uh….” Should she answer that question truthfully or not? On the one hand, she didn’t sense any danger from the woman, but on the other it could be perceived as inherently stupid to admit to any strangers that she was in fact alone. “N-no, a friend of mine is just b-beyond those trees,” she said, pointing off in the direction behind her.

The redhead looked doubtful. “Why do I think you’re lying to me?”

“I-I um…I'm not,” she shot off desperately. She really wanted to get out of the water now, but the woman obviously didn’t feel like leaving any time soon.

“Maybe, but I’m curious to know what a woman, such as yourself, might be doing wandering alone in the woods. Don’t you know there are dangerous people about?”

“S-Such as yourself?” Tara asked, and slowly backed away to her side of the bank where her clothes lay.

“You have no idea,” she mumbled cynically to herself.

“What’s that?”

“Nothing. Go get dressed.” Willow turned her back on her.

Tara frowned at her, but she didn’t particularly want to protest to getting dressed. Hurrying out of the water to get to her clothes as fast as possible, Tara almost tripped over branches lying between her and her clothes. She threw her clothes on, but had trouble tying up her dress - her fingers wouldn’t work fast enough.

Slipping on her shoes, she slowly stood up, grabbing a sturdy looking branch and keeping it behind her. There was something predatory about this woman.

The stranger “tsk tsk’ed” at her makeshift weapon behind her back. “Feeling distrustful are we?” the redhead asked, and took a few steps toward Tara.

Tara wanted to ask the stranger who she was and what she was doing here, but before she could say anything she heard someone shouting. The redhead turned in the direction the shouts came from.

It seemed like a good opportunity to make herself scarce, so she did.

ETA: I edited out the "trust issue" line. I can't even remember anymore how many times I've edited this chapter, so for simplicity's sake I'll just call this draft # 2.
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Re: Developing: Wolves of the Sea

Postby Hemiola » Sat May 27, 2006 7:10 am

Welcome back, StillWatersT! :)
Ah yes, historical AU with Vikings--I'm pretty much in heaven (I am old enough to be fan of the old Kirk Douglas/Tony Curtis film "The Vikings" ;-) )

I pretty much love anything to do with this period (violent though it was), and look forward to the continuation of the story. Apart from the obvious romantic possibilities, it should be interesting to see how the girls deal with the conflict of cultures (one would assume that Willow believes in the gods and goddesses of the Aesir; Tara might be a Christian at this point in history, but I would think that she more likely would follow the "old" religion [i.e. Druidism]).

A nit-picky language point: using a phrase such as "trust issues" is a bit too modern. As the actor Ned Beatty once said after finding himself stuck in a way-too-inaccurate historical film, he expected any moment that his next line would be something like "My Lord, thy Corvette waiteth at the corner." :lol

Anyway, PLEASE KEEP GOING--I have to see how this turns out. :party
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Re: Developing: Wolves of the Sea

Postby Still Waters T » Sat May 27, 2006 11:13 am

Hemiola wrote:Welcome back, StillWatersT!

Thanks!

I pretty much love anything to do with this period (violent though it was), and look forward to the continuation of the story. Apart from the obvious romantic possibilities, it should be interesting to see how the girls deal with the conflict of cultures (one would assume that Willow believes in the gods and goddesses of the Aesir; Tara might be a Christian at this point in history, but I would think that she more likely would follow the "old" religion [i.e. Druidism]).

I'm glad someone liked it! Willow will definately not be Christian. Tara will be Christian, but I was thinking that she would follow some of the "old" religion's customs. I need to think more about it though, and re-read everything I've written and all my notes on this fic before I can say anything concrete.

Thanks for pointing out the "trust issue" thing. I've edited it out of the chapter.

Anyway, PLEASE KEEP GOING--I have to see how this turns out.

Will do!

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Re: Developing: Wolves of the Sea

Postby inlerf » Mon May 29, 2006 6:20 pm

ok, totally off topic, but, is that shane of l word from your avatar, Still Waters T?
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Re: Developing: Wolves of the Sea

Postby Still Waters T » Wed May 31, 2006 7:12 am

Technically it's Kate Moennig :D with her little dog Floyd :bounce while she and the rest of the cast are reading through/rehearsing an eppy. :hmm
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Re: Developing: Wolves of the Sea

Postby inlerf » Wed May 31, 2006 7:19 am

of course, but shane sounds nicer ;P



...okay, i should be technical too. wouldn't call alyson hannigan willow when she isn't playing willow.
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Re: Developing: Wolves of the Sea

Postby Still Waters T » Wed May 31, 2006 7:31 am

You don't have to be technical about it, :P but through no fault of mine that's just how I am. :blush :P

ETA: Just decided to post the next chapter, since I'm now done with my last exam. Yayness! :bounce I've skimmed over it a couple times, but any errors/typoes left I will now blame on me being exhausted from my exam today.

Title: Wolves of the Sea
Author: Still Waters T a.k.a. Livvy
e-mail: livvy_82@hotmail.com
Disclaimer: Joss Whedon and UPN own Buffy the Vampire Slayer in totality. Joss Whedon and the WB own Angel: the Series. No profit is made from this fanfiction and no copyright infringement is intended.
Feedback: Yes please! :D Feedback would be greatly appreciated. Tell me whatever I’ve done wrong, or possibly right, if that is the case.
Pairings: W/T, X/A, B/L
Rating: R? :hmm
Summary: Willow “the Red” Haraldsdóttir is a Norse chieftain’s daughter, and thus a powerful Viking. Tara is the youngest daughter of an Irish High King in Lough Neagh, and a healer. What happens when the Vikings come to raid the Northern parts of Ireland, and the two of them happen to cross paths?
Note # 1: The name “Haraldsdóttir” is Old Norse and means “Haraldsdaughter.”
Note # 2: finn-gall (Irish) = fair foreigners -- > Norse Vikings
Note # 3: Vikings have been looked upon as barbarians, but in truth, times were brutal back then. Vikings weren’t the worst of people. Yeah, they had raids where they plundered, stole, and took slaves among other things, but they weren’t barbarians. They were actually pretty sophisticated. E.g. free women had a far better position in Viking societies, than in Christian societies. Women could divorce their husbands (in many cases they could control their husbands by threatening with divorce); they ran the household; and they weren’t sexually repressed as they seemed to become when Christianity arrived.

But back to the raids: Before the Vikings first arrived in Ireland, the Irish themselves were well practised in the art of raiding the territories of their rivals. The Vikings merely added to the intensity of this well-established practice. Many monasteries were attacked repeatedly but recovered quickly and usually continued to flourish.

Warning: Violence, murder, and mayhem.

(Thoughts are in Italics)
(Spoken Old Norse is in blue) < -- This is easier since I don't actually speak Old Norse :P and I have a few other things that take up a bit of my time (even though I technically have summer vacation as of this afternoon).

Chapter 1:

The sun was barely peeking up from the outer rims of the ocean. The sound of a monk’s monotonous singing could be heard from Bangor monastery’s holy church. The sound spilled out, passing the protective walls surrounding the monastery.

Alarm bells coming from the watchtower shattered the peaceful morning, followed by scared shouts of Vikings. “The finn-galls are coming! Norsemen! God save us from the Norsemen!”

Within seconds the monastery was in chaos. Monks came tumbling out from the church, and started running around panicked, not knowing what to do or where to go. People in the village surrounding the monastery armed themselves. Wives said goodbye to their husbands, and mothers said goodbye to their sons.

A handful of monks had the good sense to run to the bell tower, frantically climbing up the rope ladder and hide there, while a few chosen monks trained in fighting picked up their fighting staffs. Unfortunately, the majority of the monks were still running around like headless chicken, heedless of the 9 black “dragon ships” that shot up onto the beach and settled there.

There were well over 300 vikings altogether on the ships. Eager to raid the vulnerable monastery they howled fiercely and jumped out of the ships and sprinted in large disorganized groups up the beach. However, they encountered the armed villagers before anything else. The Norsemen slowed down to a stop, took aim, and threw their spears into the crowd of villagers running toward them. Muffled screams of pain could be heard, and soon the clanging of swords.

The villagers made a valiant attempt to protect their village, but they had to fall back under the overwhelming pressure of Norsemen baring down on them.

The berserkers flew at anyone within range. They were as wild bears; putting the fear of god into anyone who saw them in action.

The first Norseman to enter the monastery encountered a monk on his knees holding a crucifix, praying to his god to save them all from the heathens. However, he was immediately struck down with a blow to the head from an axe. Dying instantaneously he was spared the horror of seeing an old monk get shot by a single arrow to the chest. He didn’t see another aging monk on his knees offering gold plates to a Norseman; only to have the Norseman slice open his gut. With a look of astonishment, the old monk dropped the gold and tried to hold his stomach together with his hands to prevent his innards from tumbling onto the ground. Blood seeped out from between his fingers, and he slowly sank to the ground.

From inside the bell tower the monks in hiding looked on in fascinated horror. They prayed for the people down there fighting for their lives, while being grateful they were out of harm’s way.

Brother Jonathan noticed two female Norsewomen making their way onto the holy grounds. Something niggled in the back of his mind; a memory. He had heard a rumour of a Norsewoman, with hair the color of flames, and with the ability to strike down her enemies with lightning. He had heard tell from travellers that she was a daughter of the Norse god Thor.

He didn’t know what to believe, but seeing her down there fighting her way to the church, he felt compelled to believe the stories. She had surely come here to punish them all for their sins.

“What are they doing with that?” The question brought Brother Jonathan out of his reverie, and wetted his curiosity.

Crawling over to the small group of monks at the entrance of the bell tower, he leaned over them and looked down below. Some Norsemen had their arms full of wood and pieces of bogpeat.

Brother Jonathan felt a strange feeling of dread when he saw the men below spread the wood around the bell tower with the bogpeat. “Dear Lord in heaven....” Turning to his fellow brethren, he continued: “They want to burn us out!”

* * * * *

Willow the Red was at the front of her ship. Her ship was in the middle of the ship formation, along with her brother William’s. Her father had given it to her for her 20th birthday. She had proven her worth as a Viking, so he had rewarded her a ship with 40 Vikings to man it and be part of her team during raids. Her Viking team had only increased in quantity since she got her ship.

All the Vikings were split up in teams, with different purposes. They were more efficient that way. Some teams looked for gold, others for food, fur, amber, or future slaves. Every Viking had its purpose, even the ones who had to look after the ships and load the loot onto them, while the rest had the fun.

She had grown up by the sea, so the sea was part of who she was. With the wind whipping her hair about, and feeling the waves carry the ship ever forward to its destination, she would close her eyes and just soak it in. This was where she was the happiest – out on the sea.

Though being a Viking was like a double edged sword, she still loved it. The travelling, the different cultures and the spoils of the raids. When she was younger, the thrills of it all was enough, but not really anymore.

Viking ships were one of the lightest and fastest on the seas, and they had perfected the art of sneaking up on unsuspecting villages and monasteries. Because sound travelled well over water, they all kept quiet, even the berserkers. There was nothing to be heard, except for the oars hitting the water, driving the longboats forward faster.

She looked over at the group of berserkers on her ship. They had no armour, but wore bearskins. They were chewing on their shields – they were so eager to attack the monastery. Berserkers were different from the average Viking. They were feared even among their own family and friends, because they could turn on their own at any time. But when it came to battles, you wanted them on your side.

Faith stood at the ready next to Willow, tapping her foot impatiently. She never could learn to be patient.

And Xander...he looked nervous enough to bite his own shield like the berserkers. She had known him most of her life, and she knew his skills in battle were enviable, but he lacked a certain amount of confidence in himself, even with his years of experience. It kept him from becoming arrogant like a lot of Vikings with a few years on their hands. He was a good man, and she hoped he’d remain that way.

As the shore was nearing, she placed her helmet on her head, and checked her armour and weapons. Her mail armour tunic was on, with a reindeer hide beneath for padding and extra protection. Her weapons were at the ready in her belt. Her favorite double-edged long sword with Damascus steel, “Leg-biter,” was hanging comfortably in its scabbard at her side. Like most Vikings she had runes and other inscriptions on her sword. From a distance the light glinted off the sword, making it look like a serpent.

Swords were particularly important because they were a symbol of good status and wealth. She had two. Damascus steel was stronger than most swords, and hard to get a hold of. But after a particularly good raiding trip, she had gone to the best blacksmith in Hedeby, and bought herself two Damascus steel swords The sword had cost her an arm and a leg, metaphorically speaking, but it had been worth it.

Hedeby was one of the most important trading cities in Denmark. People from all over the world came there.

Finally the ships slid up on solid land. Any other types of ships would have had to be tied to a docking place, but Viking ships were different; they were more sturdy, faster and lighter than other ships and could easily be moved across land, and thus they had no problems getting them out on the water again. It was one of the reasons why they were so good at catching unsuspecting settlements by surprise, and getting away before anyone had the presence of mind to assemble a defense.

They jumped out alongside hundreds of other Vikings. Everyone ran up the beach in groups to the monastery with their axes and spears at the ready, while other groups spread out and attacked the village. Atting the monastery and the village, the Vikings gave off a blood-curdling roar.

The beach was riddled with bodies they had to step over on their way to the monastery. Mayhem had replaced the idyllic atmosphere of the morning.

It was like taking food from a baby – so easy. Faith would say the monks deserved to be plundered when they were such weaklings; less than men.

Willow agreed that it was like stealing from babies – it was too easy. She had no qualms against killing. In fact it was really easy to kill someone. She just preferred to fight people who actually tried to fight back. It made it more justifiable.

Willow followed Faith who was heading for the church. Inside the holy church they found everything they could possibly wish for in jewelry: jeweled covers of illuminated manuscripts, gold crucifixes and silver chalices. Xander was dragging a small chest after him.

For such a small chest, you would think one man would be able to carry it,” he panted.

Faith grinned at him. “You’d think.

Roughly patting his shoulder, Willow told him: “Don’t worry. We’ll find a couple big strong men outside.

Hey! I resent that!” He said, insulted.

Dragging the awfully heavy chest toward the exit, Willow had a thought.

Wait! I’ll be right back. You two go and load this onto our ship. I just want to check something.

Sure. Leave us with the heavy chest. We don’t mind,” Xander said sarcastically.

Great. Meet you down on the beach.” And she ran off farther into the church.

She’s just…leaving us here,” he said exasperatedly.

Stop being such a wuss. Let’s get this bitch down to the ship before you expire, you look like you’re going to pop something. Your face is all red.

Yeah, yeah.

You know, you should train more. You’re getting lazy in your old age.” She grinned. “And I don’t think Anya would object to it.

The Vikings would also collect scriptures that the monks had intended to burn from i.e the muslim world. They were eager to find new solutions being true entrepeneurs and aquiering new knowledge. In this way they saved what would otherwise be lost (i.e. medical science from the muslims or other things they deemed to be unholy).

The air inside the holy church had been stuffy. Once they got outside the air wasn’t so much fresh, as smoky and smelling of blood, but at least it didn’t smell of the surpressed. The air was so thick with fear they could almost taste it.

A group of Vikings had started a huge fire around the bell tower. Satisfied with their work, they went about setting the rest of the monastery on fire.

Xander just shook his head. “I don’t get them. What’s the point of torturing the monks to death like that?

I would hate to be a Christian monk now,” Faith grinned.

Meek, pious, and celibate?” He looked at her questioningly. “When would you not have hated it? You can’t even go a day withou-[/color]”

Shut up, Xander, and get that thing to the ship.

Faith and Xander found their ship, and let the ship watchmen load it onto the ship. Not long after, Willow showed up with her arms loaded over with scrolls.

Medical scrolls from the Middle East.

Xander, Faith and Willow made haste to the village. They didn’t want to miss out on all the action there. The monasteries were fun enough, and easy to find treasures in, but there was a lack of action. There was no challenge in it.

Running through narrow walkways in between the houses, they couldn’t storm the village in large groups like normal, but the Vikings before them had already paved way. There was no longer any resourceful defence in place.

Walking swiftly around the village they encountered random armed villagers jumping out at them from dark alleyways and nooks and crannies. Willow flipped one villager over her head with her wooden shield. She just knocked him out with the back of her battle axe before he could jump up. They could use more slaves.

Xander and Faith gave her a wondering look as to why she had left him alive. “I’ll come back for him. I’m in a need of more strong slaves.

Xander nudged her shoulder. “Want to check out that big house up the hill?” Faith was already trotting up to the house, so Willow just nodded, and they both ran after Faith.

The house looked deserted. It was dark, but the light from the doorway showed the furniture had been overturned.

Someone’s obviously been here already.” Faith held her palm over the firepit. “The fire’s been extinguished very recently I’d say – it’s still smoldering hot,[/color]” she said quietly.

Maybe they’re still here somewhere.” Xander looked around, but it was too dark to see much. Willow walked quietly across the floor, and opened two window panes, letting in the light.

Not for long,” Faith said, drawing her dagger. Faith preferred to forego using a shield, and instead keeping both hands armed. Both Willow and Xander preferred using shields, but it wasn’t always advantagious. Without one they could move more easily.

Shh,” Willow glided over the floor, listening for any sounds. Faith and Alex followed her lead. They didn’t have her acute sense of hearing, but they were trying none the less. “Do you hear that?

Hear what Red?” Faith couldn’t distinguish anything beyond the screams and clanging of weapons from the outside.

Isolate the sounds from outside, and you’ll hear it – a mewling sound.

Crouching down, Faith tried to locate the source of it. “Where is it coming from?

There.” Willow had found the source. Beneath a bed lay a young woman.

Xander bent down and reached in under the bed to drag the woman out, but the woman lashed out at him with a knife. Surprised, Xander hit his head on the underside of the bed and scrambling back he held his bleeding hand. “Ow! Great googlymoogly, was that really necessary?!”

Fiesty little girl,”grinned Faith. “Good for her!

Well, can you blame her?” Willow said exasperated. She just wanted to be done with this and move on. “We’re attacking her village, invading her house, and trying to capture her. Wouldn’t you want to strike back?

I know I would. Anyone try to invade my house and attack my family, not even the gods would be able to protect them from me.” Faith looked visibly mad just at the thought of it.

Crouching down to get a good look at the woman, Willow gave her an ultimatum: “Either you come out from under there, or I’ll just kill you where you lie. Understood?”

The woman nodded timidly.

“Good.” Willow stood up.

Peachy,” Faith said impatiently.

“Slide the knife out slowly, and come out with your hands visible.” The woman complied with her demands.

Xander secured her quickly, and they left. There wouldn’t be much more to pillage now. And they all prided themselves with leaving as fast as they came. They went looking for the man Willow had knocked unconscious. Xander lifted him onto his shoulder with a grunt, and they proceeded down to the ships and boarded their own.

* * * * *

The attack on the monastery and the interconnected village only took a small amount of time. There was no time to get help from the village beyond the hill in the distance. And before anyone had fully comprehended what had just happened to them, the Vikings had slid their ships out to sea again, and disappeared.

The monastery was left in shambles; bodies scattered around, and blood soaking into the earth. Some Vikings had made a fire at the bottom of the bell tower – effectivly killing and literally cooking the monks inside it. The lucky few who had survived somewhat intact walked around in a daze.

Later on, people came running from the village nearby; ready to help, but too late. The Vikings had come and gone, and taken whatever they wanted. The treasures could be replaced, but not the people. The people would either become Viking slaves or be sold into slavery somewhere in Denmark only to end up God knew where.

The villagers organized the cleaning up of the monastery. Tending to the injured, and collecting the bodies in one place to be buried at a later time. Some had to go down to the beach and drag a few drowned monks up. A couple monks came straggling back to the monastery in the nude. The Vikings had just wanted to have some fun, and humiliate them.
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Re: Developing: Wolves of the Sea

Postby Hemiola » Wed May 31, 2006 5:33 pm

A splendid first chapter, StillWatersT! :party I'm already involved in the story and the characters, and would like to know what comes next.

A clever idea putting the Old Norse in blue:-). At some point we will have to encounter characters speaking Irish ("Gaelic"), which of course should be in green. ;-) Likewise, when Willow and Tara meet, there will have to be some indication that either Tara learned some Norse (maybe from a captured Viking?), or Willow picked up some Irish (perhaps from a slave?). ;-)

I love "Willow The Red", and I like the way you brought Faith and Xander into the story. I think that someone like Faith ought to have her own nickname or sobriquet--maybe "Faith The Furious" since she is almost like a female berserker. As for Xander--I don't know, maybe "Xander Everloyal" or "Evertrue" or something like that. Just a suggestion...

Once again some language nit-picking: I still feel that terms such as "wuss" and "peachy" are way too modern. Might there not be some equivalent more in line with the language of the period? BTW, I should also mention your superb command of the English language. I assume that your first language is Norwegian (?Landsmal?)--how'd your English/American get to be so good?:)

There are a few obvious spelling mistakes and typos ("Atting"--I assume you meant to type "Attacking"), which I'm sure you'll pick up when you do your next read-over. In any case, I can only repeat what I said the last time: PLEASE KEEP GOING--I need to know what happens next. :party

Edited to add: it was nice touch adding footnotes for some of the terms. Also, I wonder about the feisty young girl they found in the house--could she perhaps be named Dawn? ;-) ;-)
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Re: Developing: Wolves of the Sea

Postby Still Waters T » Wed May 31, 2006 8:15 pm

Hemiola:
Hemiola wrote:A splendid first chapter, StillWatersT! I'm already involved in the story and the characters, and would like to know what comes next.

Thank you! Don’t know when I’ll be able to finish writing the next chapter and posting it here though, cos I have an RPG I have to prioritize first, and a summer job at some point.

Likewise, when Willow and Tara meet, there will have to be some indication that either Tara learned some Norse (maybe from a captured Viking?), or Willow picked up some Irish (perhaps from a slave?).

You’re starting to give me ideas Hemiola.

I love "Willow The Red", and I like the way you brought Faith and Xander into the story. I think that someone like Faith ought to have her own nickname or sobriquet--maybe "Faith The Furious" since she is almost like a female berserker. As for Xander--I don't know, maybe "Xander Everloyal" or "Evertrue" or something like that. Just a suggestion...

I love suggestions! Keep 'em coming! I'll think about Faith's and Xander's nicknames. Some of these things, even tiny details, I tend to stew over for days, weeks, months even before I've finally made up my mind.

Once again some language nit-picking: I still feel that terms such as "wuss" and "peachy" are way too modern. Might there not be some equivalent more in line with the language of the period? BTW, I should also mention your superb command of the English language. I assume that your first language is Norwegian (?Landsmal?)--how'd your English/American get to be so good?:)

I need to pay more attention to my written language I see.

Why, thank you! Yup, Norwegian is my native language, mother tongue and all that. I speak the Bokmål type of Norwegian (written it is pretty similar to Danish). I have, however, had English since the 3rd grade, lived a year in the US when I was 16, have plenty of friends abroad, and my university studies involve North America. So I'm pretty used to it by now.

There are a few obvious spelling mistakes and typos ("Atting"--I assume you meant to type "Attacking"), which I'm sure you'll pick up when you do your next read-over. In any case, I can only repeat what I said the last time: PLEASE KEEP GOING--I need to know what happens next.

This would be why I should get a personal beta reader. I kinda have one, but she’s not so much into the W/T fanfics as she is into L Word fics and RPG.

Thanks for pointing out the grammar mistakes and the typos for me! I hate it when I have any typos and grammatical errors of any kind. I’m such a perfectionist.

Edited to add: it was nice touch adding footnotes for some of the terms. Also, I wonder about the feisty young girl they found in the house--could she perhaps be named Dawn?

I didn’t want to confuse anyone too much to the point where they might be confused about what the h*ll is happening – so yeah, that’s why I made those little notes. : ) And it gave me a chance to ramble on a bit more about Viking stuff. And I know, I for one, like to learn new, fun, little facts here and there even when I'm reading fan fics.

My lips are sealed …which does not mean that it is Dawn, but then on the other hand it doesn’t mean that it isn’t her either. Maybe I haven’t made up my mind yet about how I’ll introduce Dawn in the story…and maybe I’m just deliberately trying to confuse you.

Ooh, reading through this scene more carefully this time (although I still haven’t gotten any sleep since…Tuesday afternoon, and it’s now passed 5 AM Thursday morning ) made me aware of the fact that I unintentionally had a paragraph or 2 that weren’t supposed to be posted. Man, I must’ve been tired, and still am. I've edited parts of the chapter (and will edit my chapter post when I'm done), and now I need to write a bit more on an L Word RPG scene of mine. And then... finally

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Re: Developing: Wolves of the Sea

Postby DaddyCatALSO » Thu Jun 01, 2006 5:08 am

Solid beginning, but the "B/L" is killing me; who's "L"?
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Re: Developing: Wolves of the Sea

Postby Still Waters T » Sun Jun 11, 2006 5:29 am

Some things, like finally enjoying some vacation and being away from studies, then starting my summer job, beta reading a few things, family time etc. have kept my focus away from this board and a bit preoccupied, but I will finish editing that last chapter. I haven't been able to write more on the fic though.

DaddyCatALSO: Thank you. :) And "L" stands for Liam.
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Re: Developing: Wolves of the Sea

Postby Hemiola » Thu Jul 12, 2007 1:36 pm

Bump for Still Waters T: Is there any chance you could continue with this wonderful idea? :pray
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Re: Developing: Wolves of the Sea

Postby Still Waters T » Sun Aug 19, 2007 11:04 am

Hmm...various sounds of hesitation.... :ashamed Maybe? :hmm Honestly, I don't know. It's been like a year since I last worked on this fic. But I have recently felt the urge to maybe start writing a bit again, so we'll see what happens. :)
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Re: Developing: Wolves of the Sea

Postby Hemiola » Sun Aug 19, 2007 2:34 pm

Please, please, please, PRETTY PLEASE WITH SUGAR ON TOP PLEASE KEEP WRITING THIS!!!! :) :pray :party
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